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February 3, 2017

~ Eighth Place ~
Premiere Contest: You Choose
Sponsor: Brian Strand

~ Second Place ~
Contest: 128 Words
Sponsor: Silent One

*contest requirements: 4 words per line, all 1 syllable words, 32 lines for total of 128 words. 
Rhyme scheme is aabb *


 

Bites of frost fierce; iced words did pierce flushed flesh, soft soul chilled as you stole youth of my life, long lived your wife. We wed; blissed days blest till your craze. Mid-age, your mess lust for me less, as thrills I gave you now don’t crave. My angst for naught in knots of fraught tight twist my mind, your grit does grind strewn tears from eyes pain’s gems your prize plash at your feet my dirge does beat. Our love I mourn my rose your thorn, once in sweet bloom lies’ stench does doom. Sprung from spouse cage red town's your stage to soothe your doubts raise hell, nude bouts... go chase young things can’t stop your flings we’re done, I know ~ snowed neath cold woe.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 8/7/2019 5:47:00 AM
Wow, iambic dimetre! Such a rare thing in modern poetic latitudes. And such a luxurious as well. Bravo, Susan.
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Date: 8/10/2019 6:26:00 PM
Iambic dimeter..? Back when I wrote this poem (still so new to writing poetry), I was just going for four syllables per line.. :)) but it does have a nice rhythm to it. Your comments make my day, Kurt. Your friendship is appreciated. Warmest wishes .. ~Susan
Date: 3/10/2018 4:54:00 PM
I will take this as fiction, but fiction that hit home for me, until the cheating part. I've felt love rot, the HE trying not and written quite a few poems along these lines. You spilled the feel in the phase of, 'frankly, my dear ...', if you know what I mean, and a great job you did. Hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 3/10/2018 6:58:00 PM
Oh yes my lovely friend, a write of fiction. So great to see you again. Thank you for sharing your valued thoughts with me and for the delight of your visit dear friend! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 2/28/2018 8:48:00 PM
I'm back to say CONGRATS, Susan! Janice
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Date: 3/1/2018 6:50:00 PM
Janice, your kindhearted congrats are truly appreciated!
Date: 2/26/2018 11:01:00 AM
Gosh, this comes from such a strong centre Susan. Her fury is ferocious. Congratulations on this winning work.
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Date: 2/26/2018 7:14:00 PM
Yes Jean, I was feeling FEISTY the morning I wrote this fictional poem :)) Thank you for your lovely comments and for bringing your smiling face to my page.. Your visits are always a pleasure! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 2/15/2018 10:40:00 PM
Sincere congratulations on your win in this VERY challenging form, Susan - blessings and congrats to you, my friend! :-)
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Date: 2/16/2018 6:34:00 PM
Thank you for your heartwarming congrats and kind words Gregory. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/10/2018 9:18:00 PM
It's enough to make a woman want to turn the tables and take a younger lover...congrats Susan, this is articulately delivered with heart and soul. x
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:32:00 PM
Thank you Leanne for your valued comments and kind congrats. Your visit is a pleasure. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/10/2018 11:01:00 AM
Dear Susan, my friend, your wonderful talent continues to shine in all your works. Indeed you are a master poet! BIG congratulations on your wonderful win! Hugs as always. Pandita
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Date: 2/10/2018 9:38:00 PM
Dear Pandita, my friend, thank you for your wonderful compliments. Your heartwarming comments and kind congrats are greatly appreciated. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 2/9/2018 3:46:00 PM
My GOSH Susan ... this is just amazing! You are such a gifted poetess :) Congratulations on your win here!! Your NE friend :P
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Date: 2/9/2018 7:16:00 PM
Judy, my dear friend, your kindness is generous and deeply appreciated. Thank you for your lovely comments, kind congrats and the smile :)) My warmest wishes to you always. ~Your NE friend
Date: 2/8/2018 7:48:00 PM
Wow Susan!...so cleverly written for requirements! Like the line..."blest till your craze". Have a beautiful day Susan :)
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Date: 2/9/2018 3:30:00 PM
Thank you Chris, I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your precious thoughts. Your comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Date: 2/8/2018 7:22:00 PM
How movingly you have described what happens to so many long-term relationships, Susan! Janice
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Date: 2/9/2018 3:29:00 PM
Thank you Janice for your lovely comments. Your kind words are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Date: 2/7/2018 3:45:00 PM
So very sad yet so very beautiful Susan.
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Date: 2/8/2018 5:23:00 PM
Thank you Shadow for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me. Your lovely comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Date: 2/7/2018 7:56:00 AM
Susan I really loved this poem. A powerful write. Regards, Sathya
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Date: 2/8/2018 5:22:00 PM
Sathya, I truly appreciate your endearing and kindhearted comments. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem.. thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts with me ~Susan
Date: 2/7/2018 6:45:00 AM
I can see why this won! Congrats! It's a sad tale though.
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Date: 2/8/2018 5:20:00 PM
Yes, tis quite a sad tale of woe :)) Your kindhearted congrats and lovely comments are truly appreciated Becca.. Thank you. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/6/2018 11:29:00 PM
Wow... A wonderful write... Congrats on your win... I loved it..
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Date: 2/8/2018 5:17:00 PM
Thank you Supraja for your beautiful words. I truly appreciate your kind comments and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/6/2018 8:47:00 PM
A wonderful winner written by a wonderful winner...A virtuoso performance in mono-syllabic expression! Cheers! ---gw
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Date: 2/8/2018 5:16:00 PM
Ohh, such a wonderful comment given by such a wonderful poet! :) I value your inspiring words Gershon. Thank you for your kindness and light.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/6/2018 5:46:00 PM
Congrats to you, Susan. It was certainly not an easy challenge!
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Date: 2/6/2018 7:16:00 PM
Lol! That's true Andrea. It was harder than I thought it would be but a lot of wonderful writes were produced. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Your heartwarming congrats and kind words are truly appreciated. ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 8:52:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Susan! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 2/5/2018 9:13:00 PM
Your kind congrats warms my heart Eve. Thank you for your lovely visit. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 6:28:00 PM
Great storytelling with these short words, Susan. Congrats on your win!
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Date: 2/5/2018 8:18:00 PM
Your visit is always a delight Agnes. Thank you for your uplifting comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 1:15:00 PM
You paint your words on a many colored canvas of sights and sounds that the reader can relate to in a privet, personal way. It flows well and holds your interest from start to finish. Well done, Emile.
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Date: 2/5/2018 8:28:00 PM
Thank you Emile for your uplifting comments. I'm so happy you thought highly of my poem. Wonderful words from a poet I admire.. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 10:30:00 AM
So true in many cases Susan, what I like about your poetry is that most is based on real life real feelings that many can relate to. This is a worthy winner!
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Date: 2/5/2018 8:25:00 PM
John, your kind visit is appreciated. Thank you for sharing your valuable thoughts with me. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 10:24:00 AM
Susan, such a wonderfully written story in this difficult challenge. I'm glad to hear that it is pure fiction my friend. Congrats on your win. John
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Date: 2/5/2018 8:23:00 PM
Oh yes pure fiction :)) Thank you John for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Your kindhearted words and sweet congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my friend. ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 10:05:00 AM
excellent poetry, see it's a winner well done.
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Date: 2/5/2018 8:17:00 PM
Your wonderful visit is truly appreciated. Thank you Harry for your heartwarming comments. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 7:27:00 AM
Congrats on your win Susan..
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Date: 2/5/2018 8:16:00 PM
Thank you for your kindhearted congrats Joseph.. ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 6:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Susan, absolutely brilliant as usual. :))
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Date: 2/5/2018 8:40:00 PM
Roy, thank you for the delight of your visit and for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Your warmhearted congrats and beautiful sentiments I truly hold dear my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 2/5/2018 12:50:00 AM
Congratulations, Susan on your great win. So true the depiction.
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Date: 2/5/2018 8:15:00 PM
Thank you Subimal for your kindhearted congrats and lovely comment.. ~Susan
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