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Diary Entry on a Disconnected Day

There is something in the day that has disconnected. Syntax has gone awry with distance stretching further than thought and sentences stranded in a silence left by words that have fled the tongue. And then there is that shadow falling across passing time, its shape giving no hint as to what it is, growing when eyes look away, then appearing in a glance like a shadow caught on an X-ray.

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Date: 3/7/2024 6:37:00 AM
Hello Paul, This is a beautiful exploration of the elusive nature of time and the disconnection we sometimes feel from it. Your use of language creates a haunting atmosphere, capturing the ineffable sense of something amiss in the passing moments. The imagery of syntax gone awry and sentences stranded in silence is particularly striking, evoking a visceral response. This is quite an introspective and thought-provoking. - Blessings Daniel
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Paul Willason
Date: 3/13/2024 5:16:00 AM
Do apologise for the delay in replying...yr comments as always deserving of an appreciative acknowledgement. You have given the poem a good workout Daniel....thoughtfully put together. My sincere thanks.

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