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Down where the creamy Magnolia blossoms are opened 
                    
                                          exposed to drizzle and cool damp air

Down where the spider's wide web woven between the Inkberry 

                                         Holly and  veranda
 
                       'Tis dotted

With dewdrops~ tiny diamonds waiting on the sun to glisten

                                                 Down where 

The rain runs like a river flowing in the yard
                          
                                              Down to the storm drain on to the creek

Through corrugated culverts
              
                            which are filled with water that slowly drains away

                                                                                         
Like heart devoid of all emotion, energy, and enthusiasm

                                      A Heart

Which has poured out energy until  the life force has drained 

                                                       away

There's a strong breeze which has given Vultures a way to soar.....

                                                Circling~~

Their flight of ease catching currents

                                                           Search

Until they see  food 

                                    Hunger driven 

Hunger

                Drives one whose heart is drained needing to be filled 

                                          But


                                with

                                                 What?

Sponsor: John Lawless
Contest: One-hundred and thirty-six words

I checked in several checkers and counted them myself several times. 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 9/29/2019 9:41:00 AM
Lovely Sara. So beautifully described the imagery was great. Congrats on your well deserved win. God Bless, JB
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Date: 10/14/2019 9:06:00 AM
Judy, Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. I appreciate the time spent here reading and taking time to comment on my work. Sara
Date: 9/27/2019 9:22:00 AM
love these wonderful descriptions - so pleased to see it was a winner
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Date: 9/27/2019 6:41:00 PM
Jack, Thanks for stopping by with congrats. Sara
Date: 9/16/2019 5:29:00 AM
it's great expressive poem// I like it
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Date: 9/14/2019 7:29:00 AM
A great visual and use of space...congrats on your top placement!
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Date: 9/15/2019 6:01:00 PM
Jeanne, Thanks for the nice comment. I appreciate you dropping by. Sara
Date: 9/10/2019 5:19:00 PM
One of my personal favourites. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 9/11/2019 8:19:00 AM
Richard, Thanks for honor of being called a favorite. I appreciate you dropping by. Sara
Date: 9/10/2019 1:25:00 AM
Your use of white space is very effective, culminating in the final question: Hunger / Drives one whose heart is drained needing to be filled / But with What? Congratulations on your win. ~Su
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Date: 9/10/2019 4:50:00 PM
Suzette, Your comment on my work is very encouraging ..I appreciate the time spent here reading my work. Sara
Date: 9/9/2019 5:35:00 PM
Great job Sara. The line breaks and format "force" the reader to follow its jagged flow pausing as directed and left with THAT question......Thanks for participating in the contest.
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Date: 9/10/2019 4:49:00 PM
John, I appreciate you dropping by to let me know that I placed in the contest and to comment on my work. Your presence is uplifting. Sara
Date: 8/26/2019 2:17:00 PM
love this thoughtful write, my friend
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Date: 8/26/2019 2:45:00 PM
Jack, Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
Date: 8/23/2019 6:05:00 AM
Really expressive here...Life is like a cup when filled must be emptied and filled again...the question you asked is...with what...i guess each individual knows...
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Date: 8/23/2019 7:35:00 AM
Michael, Yes, we can become drained, empty and need a refreshing and if we don't fill our minds, hearts, emotions and physical good we are headed for trouble. Thanks for your visit. I though about the son "Fill My Cup" when I was writing this one. Sara
Date: 8/23/2019 3:31:00 AM
This I so picturesque, an incredible write plus a lovely picture. I hope to see it gain top place.
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Date: 8/23/2019 4:48:00 AM
Victor, thanks for the well wishes in the contest. I appreciate you dropping by. Sara
Date: 8/23/2019 2:40:00 AM
" 'Tis dotted With dewdrops~ tiny diamonds waiting on the sun to glisten" - I fell in love with this poem almost immediately, but especially with this line, Sara. Bravo! You have outdone yourself here.
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Date: 8/23/2019 4:45:00 AM
Caren, Thanks for dropping by. Your comments are appreciated. Sara
Date: 8/22/2019 1:33:00 PM
Nicely done, Sara....we must realize that, when faced with starvation, even carrion can be attractive.....
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Date: 8/23/2019 4:36:00 AM
Leo, I think that we can do some things that we thought we would never do when it comes to surviving and I hope that I don't have to come face to face with that situation. Your presence at my page is encouraging. Sara
Date: 8/22/2019 11:39:00 AM
ohh sara, what an intricate web of metaphors paced beautifully throughout your poem...you are nature's harbinger!...huggs
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Date: 8/23/2019 4:29:00 AM
Nette, Thanks for dropping by. Your comments are always uplifting. Sara
Date: 8/22/2019 10:49:00 AM
you have really brought your words to life and set the scene up beautifully...great poem, it has a mysterious feel within that beauty... love this one! :) hugs
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Date: 8/23/2019 4:25:00 AM
Sandra, Your encouraging words gives me a boost. Thanks so much for dropping by. Sara
Date: 8/22/2019 10:44:00 AM
This is beautiful and thought provoking Sara. Very nice :)
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Date: 8/23/2019 4:22:00 AM
Heidi, Your visit to my page is encouraging. I appreciate your presence here. Sara
Date: 8/22/2019 9:18:00 AM
Excellent imagery--I see the blossoms, the web, dew drop diamonds..I enjoyed the read, Sara. Also liked the ending that evokes a question mark. A lovely poem.
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Date: 8/23/2019 4:18:00 AM
Vijay, Yes, a question is always a good way to end a poem. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara