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Desiring

Such beauty set before these eyes, longing for closure of the desire of my being. My skin aches for your touch, gentle and tender; desiring. Lost as a warrior's bullet seeking a victim; lost as a comic without an audience on opening night. My heart wants and needs like cherry red hot fire and desirer, desiring. Your piercing eyes draw me though there is no heart beating in your hollow chest! Exploding mines won't destroy this longing; it will follow me postmortem; dire desiring. The bat of your lashes is stronger than a savage warrior, whose blows end a feeble life. No tenderness; you break all lives like Medusa turns men to stone;liar, desiring. Drifting away on solitude, alone tonight and you are cozy by the fire, full with no regrets. A dagger penetrates deep in my lungs taking the air away; danger, desiring.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 4/27/2010 8:32:00 PM
Congratulations on your win...Enjoyed...Marty
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Date: 3/31/2010 9:33:00 AM
Excellent poem and good form.... The only thing missing is the inline rhyme that precedes the refrain.... Check my Random Thought*39** for an example of the inline rhyme..... Good work my friend....:JP]
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Date: 3/30/2010 2:19:00 PM
That's powerful Doris
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Date: 3/30/2010 12:38:00 PM
Wonderful poetry Doris >> James
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Date: 3/30/2010 11:10:00 AM
Wow! Love the reference to Medusa, the snake lady! This is a magnificent poem filled with passion and "desire." Great work, Doris! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/30/2010 6:16:00 AM
Excellent write Doris .. if for the new contest good luck.. absolutely stunning your words.. lost as a warrior's bullet ..luv it... Medus turns men to stone.. brilliant..luv.. Linda-Marie
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Date: 3/30/2010 4:39:00 AM
Doris, This is NOT an EASY form! Excellent passions painted through words. This is going to my favorites and I'm recommending it to another. Very well written sentiments in this very difficult form. Nice work. Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 3/30/2010 12:48:00 AM
Very passionate writing, Doris! I enjoyed it. LUv,Andrea
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Date: 3/29/2010 11:06:00 PM
so passionate.a true poet knows how to express their true emotions to make the readers really feel. -Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 3/29/2010 10:37:00 PM
This is a beautiful passionate write Doris..Charma.
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Date: 3/29/2010 4:24:00 PM
loved it very very intense..yet I feel the page layout is not all it could be...hmmm I must learn from you and research Ghazal form!!! Light & Love oh desirable one
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Date: 3/29/2010 3:18:00 PM
Ghazal is an interesting form. I like the passion of your poem and the yearning as a softner. Love, daver
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Date: 3/29/2010 9:13:00 AM
Hi Doris, world without money would be great as ideas and goods could be traded without any prejudice! We only have to look at our banks and how they harm our wellbeing and livelihood! What a disaster! I only hope that world finance will recover soon. I enjoyed your passionate write! Keep your pen flowing and thank you for your comment...Gert
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Date: 3/29/2010 7:47:00 AM
Very passionate write...this deep felt emotion..Mom
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Date: 3/29/2010 7:45:00 AM
Doris - You have passion coursing through this write - I love it - Especially the repetition of desiring - That makes it oh so much more !!! Thanks for sharing your passion with everyone -:)
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Date: 3/29/2010 7:31:00 AM
Enjoyed this very passionate write Doris, great content and so full of true feeling , well done Daniel
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