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The old house was left a wordless descendant Ravines of cold air slide in through the cracks Deadbolts are latched and keys have been hidden Years of desertion have swallowed the years Cupboards are bare, and the hinges are bent, Doors are askew with a vague musty scent Laughter was swept with the dust of neglect Summers and winters have long been forgotten Windows watched seasons gobble the stars A derelict house that no one would claim A house shuttered tight, where no one remains No one has bothered to take just a look No one is writing a page from this book No one is left to tell of the story No one is left to walk down the stairs _______________________________________________________

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 9/9/2016 3:16:00 PM
What's left is a beautiful poem, deeply captivating, Carrie! Empty and derelict...the bare bleak feelings are well transmitted. Congratulations on this fine win. Regards // paul
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Date: 9/9/2016 11:41:00 AM
Carrie, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderfully penned poem ~
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Date: 9/9/2016 10:32:00 AM
Congrats Carrie, its an emotional and lovely poem!
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Date: 9/9/2016 7:58:00 AM
sweet Carrie, much depth here and awesome flow the last two lines set the tone for the poem....congrats on your placement! :)-luloo
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Date: 9/8/2016 8:58:00 PM
Congrats, Carrie. I love your imagery. Agnes
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Date: 9/8/2016 8:24:00 PM
Congrats!!! Carrie...on a well-deserved win...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 9/8/2016 6:51:00 PM
BRILLIANT, Carrie. Don't you just love how inspiring her contests can be?
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Date: 9/7/2016 8:27:00 PM
Love the bleakness, and sense of abandonement. A fine entry for the competition, Carrie, I'm struggling to bolt something together. Viv x
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Date: 9/6/2016 8:53:00 PM
love your imagery with this piece well done I'm new to soup :) well kind of lol
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Date: 9/5/2016 3:22:00 PM
This is very well written. Good luck for the contest, Kai
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Date: 9/3/2016 11:12:00 AM
Carrie, BW will love this, its deep and beautiful at the same time :)-luloo
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Date: 9/3/2016 6:12:00 AM
Can't fault it Carrie, though I understand little of the form it reads clever with deep storylines, ...the changes I would offer would probably be rejected by the form, not you.....Ian x
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