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Descendant

The old house was left
a wordless descendant
Ravines of cold air slide in through the cracks
Deadbolts are latched and keys have been hidden
Years of desertion have swallowed the years

Cupboards are bare, and the hinges are bent,  
Doors are askew with a vague musty scent
Laughter was swept with the dust of neglect 
Summers and winters have long been forgotten
Windows watched seasons gobble the stars

A derelict house that no one would claim
A house shuttered tight, where no one remains
No one has bothered to take just a look
No one is writing a page from this book
No one is left to tell of the story
No one is left to walk down the stairs
  


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Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Callus Avatar
September 9, 2016 at 3:16 PM
What's left is a beautiful poem, deeply captivating, Carrie! Empty and derelict...the bare bleak feelings are well transmitted. Congratulations on this fine win. Regards // paul
La France Avatar
September 9, 2016 at 11:41 AM
Carrie, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderfully penned poem ~
Chansarkar Avatar
September 9, 2016 at 10:32 AM
Congrats Carrie, its an emotional and lovely poem!
Scars Avatar
September 9, 2016 at 7:58 AM
sweet Carrie, much depth here and awesome flow the last two lines set the tone for the poem....congrats on your placement! :)-luloo
Krampe Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 8:58 PM
Congrats, Carrie. I love your imagery. Agnes
Warrior Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 8:24 PM
Congrats!!! Carrie...on a well-deserved win...god bless...^WW^
Dietrich Avatar
September 8, 2016 at 6:51 PM
BRILLIANT, Carrie. Don't you just love how inspiring her contests can be?
Wigley Avatar
September 7, 2016 at 8:27 PM
Love the bleakness, and sense of abandonement. A fine entry for the competition, Carrie, I'm struggling to bolt something together. Viv x
Lewis  Avatar
September 6, 2016 at 8:53 PM
love your imagery with this piece well done I'm new to soup :) well kind of lol
Neumann Avatar
September 5, 2016 at 3:22 PM
This is very well written. Good luck for the contest, Kai
Scars Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 11:12 AM
Carrie, BW will love this, its deep and beautiful at the same time :)-luloo
Mark Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 6:12 AM
Can't fault it Carrie, though I understand little of the form it reads clever with deep storylines, ...the changes I would offer would probably be rejected by the form, not you.....Ian x
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