Deprived of Your Love

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April- 26- 2025

Deprived of your Love Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Anoucheka Gangabissoon

I died when you denied our love a chance. You went on avoiding me, breaking my heart. Like a pearl locked in an oyster, You have sealed your heart, barring entry. What currents flow through your heart? What eddy churns and gyrates there? Do the thoughts of our love now linger there? Does my image, to your mind ever return? Do you recall how we stood silent beneath the stars? How we then built an epoch in a glance! We so blindly loved each other. Like a phantom I followed you behind. To you alone my heart as offering I gave. Never suspected any force would tear us apart. But how Fate waited swift to smite And how we had to part in anguish, Toppling down the sand castles we built, Leaving a heap of debris behind. I yearn for what went missing at some point, Somewhere in the long journey of life. Now each sunset is a reminder of our touch, And your laughter rings in my heart as a haunting echo. I know, there is an ocean between us now. Yet, desperately I yearn for your embrace. Do I not deserve a second chance? I yearn for you, missing so much. Will you once more open your heart, That I can enter it and nest within, To douse all my smouldering pain Until Death invites us to our grave. After months, I have gained the courage to ask. Unless you give a positive response, I am done!

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Krishnanand Guptar

Date: 6/8/2025 10:34:00 AM

Congratulations dear friend on your win in this contest with a lovely poem depicting the aftermath and yearnings after denial of love from a heart "Like a pearl locked in an oyster, You have sealed your heart, barring entry.". Wishing you a cheerful forthcoming week.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/27/2025 11:55:00 AM

What a Lovely yet sad write you have here. I enjoyed reading this. Sometimes we need to say goodbye. "Good Luck" Have a wonderful spring day.........

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/26/2025 9:24:00 PM

You nailed that theme, Valsa. So emotive and beautifully written

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 4/26/2025 1:35:00 PM

So much is said, so much left unsaid. Romance can be cruel. You have summed up love's plight in genius craft from it's scaling heights to its devious descends. I applaud you. Good luck with the contest.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/26/2025 12:59:00 PM

The striving of a broken heart, even the realization of being an ocean apart, doesn’t stop the hope! Hugs ~ Kim

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/26/2025 11:27:00 AM

Creatively penned. Way to go. I enjoyed reading. Loving someone and then they refuse to love back has to be very hard and painful. Sara K

Joe Dimino

Date: 4/26/2025 6:13:00 AM

"What currents flow through your heart? What eddy churns and gyrates there?" -- Great poetry! One thing I have always appreciated about failed relations...is the often brilliant poetry that follows. A gem! My successes have never produced meaningful, unique poetry. The successes are all, I love you, blah blah blah. Your eyes, blah blah blah -- pain and loss is truly singular. Probably what angels and God are most attuned to. Blessings my friend.

Ink Empress

Date: 4/26/2025 5:28:00 AM

What a heartfelt and emotive write this is dear valsa; i really felt the lines "Somewhere in the long journey of life. Now each sunset is a reminder of our touch, And your laughter rings in my heart as a haunting echo" the way youv depicted nostalgia grief etc etc in such a poignant manner is truly impressive and soul stirring as well as your use of metaphors and the powerful ending, really stood out for me, youv written one that is also lyrical! Best wishes for the contest! Sending you light always! Fave ofcourse!