Home » Poems » Charlie Smith » Depression

Charlie Smith | + Follow Poet |

Depression

Poet's Notes

(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like Charlie Smith.

Unending darkness floods the skies alone in dreams my heart must weep no words are spoken or even cried such silence lives where shadows sleep My pleas just echo off the stillness my tears find no comfort as they fall my hope stands as a martyred witness I pin no exit from this pall Turn your head and spare no time leave greater credence to lesser thoughts take what is said in this poor rhyme add to your bed of forget-me-nots Think only of what should have been No lesser loss, this mortal sin.

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Greig Turnbull

Date: 10/17/2018 1:01:00 PM

"I pin no exit from this pall"....Wow! I just love the images you create. I don't know why, but I see T.S. Elliots London. The silent, insulating darkness.

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/17/2018 2:37:00 PM

Thanks Greig...

Vicki Acquah

Date: 5/13/2018 2:56:00 AM

I really love the way you expressed this so poetically relatable.

Charlie Smith
Date: 5/16/2018 10:44:00 AM

Thank you Vicki...

J Hamilton Gist

Date: 4/4/2018 3:29:00 PM

Worth working through.

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/5/2018 11:04:00 AM

Indeed J. Thanks...

Rainbow Promise

Date: 3/9/2018 6:26:00 PM

Nicely said. Suffers woul love the soothing manner in which their condition was penned. Great write. Best wishes Rainbow ??

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/9/2018 7:53:00 PM

Thank you Rainbow...

Marc Acrich

Date: 3/9/2018 11:37:00 AM

Very nice, It has a gentleness to it, Mine is rough like concrete That come at you like a freight train https://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poems_by_poet.aspx?ID=97183

Charlie Smith
Date: 3/9/2018 12:22:00 PM

Thanks for the visit Marc...

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/16/2017 8:30:00 PM

How did I miss this? I can really relate this, great poem!

Charlie Smith
Date: 9/17/2017 12:59:00 PM

Thanks Arthur, I'm happy you found it...

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 7/18/2017 8:21:00 PM

Your two last lines says it all Charlie.It is hard to heal from depression.Been through it myself. It comes and goes. I always win.

Charlie Smith
Date: 7/18/2017 10:48:00 PM

I'm betting on you Darlene, thanks for the visit...

Dean Wood

Date: 7/8/2017 10:59:00 PM

This is so very well done Charlie. This poem resonates with me as I have been there. Your description is spot on and so artistic. Really enjoyed it! - Dean

Charlie Smith
Date: 7/9/2017 11:47:00 PM

Thank you Dean...

Jannie Breedt

Date: 7/8/2017 1:11:00 PM

Hi Charlie . Aha you mastered the elusive sonnet with amazing rhyme I hope this will lift your countenance high because I struggle to get it right. Wonderful

Charlie Smith
Date: 7/8/2017 1:52:00 PM

I often wonder if I do any of these forms justice Jannie. But it is what it is. Thank you so much for the encouragement, I deeply appreciate it...

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 7/8/2017 7:44:00 AM

Oh this is an abyss with no bottom and you fall so silently...like this. Well penned. :)

Charlie Smith
Date: 7/8/2017 7:56:00 AM

Thank you Sunita.

Funom Makama

Date: 6/30/2017 9:40:00 AM

This is fantastic, so fantastic. Coming to this page feels predestined because I feel so satisfied. Thanks for the wonderful share.

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/30/2017 4:05:00 PM

You are so kind, thank you Funom.

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/27/2017 10:46:00 AM

You strike deep, the nature of the great beast. Depression, the invisible monster that eats at one's heart and soul. A superb sonnet my friend and a fav...

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/27/2017 11:08:00 AM

How very gracious you are friend Robert, thank you.

Lisa Ricci

Date: 6/24/2017 4:44:00 AM

Good Morning Charlie. You wrote with dignity and grace. For all those who experience this may they endure. Well done in its entirety.

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/24/2017 10:32:00 AM

Thank you Lisa.

John Hamilton

Date: 6/23/2017 9:38:00 PM

This is an outstanding piece Charlie, I do so admire your writing skill and technique especially with sonnets, but it doesn't matter the form you are always top notch!

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/24/2017 10:31:00 AM

Thank you John, I always appreciate your visit.

Darren White

Date: 6/23/2017 2:15:00 PM

This sonnet is a little gem, I see all the intricacies and admire it. But most of all I recognise this, being clinically depressed, it paints a very vivid picture for me.

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/24/2017 10:28:00 AM

Hope all is well now Darren, They always say " a better life through chemicals". That's not to make light of the disease but there does seem to be some effective treatments. The best to you...

White Wolf

Date: 6/21/2017 3:37:00 PM

Charlie! Charlie! Brilliant! As one that has cyclothymia, I can SO relate to this superb sonnet! Outstanding

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/21/2017 7:14:00 PM

Thank you so very much WW.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/19/2017 11:16:00 AM

This is one of the best poems I have ever read about depression Charlie, and in a lovely Sonnet no less! You are such a master poet, your contemporary words vie with the famous! I loved this! A Fave my friend! : )

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/19/2017 11:51:00 AM

Your encouragement is incredible Connie, thank you so much...

Val Brooklyn Rogers Blk Panther

Date: 6/19/2017 11:00:00 AM

Hey Charlie, such a magnificent collection of words for the exploration of the darkness of the human mind. Expert senses!!

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/19/2017 11:50:00 AM

Thank you so much Val..

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/18/2017 10:04:00 PM

I am no judge of poetry to be honest, however this resonated and reached me to the core, and for me thats what its all about, and a fav for me! Haven't been around as much so catching up on some reading! :)

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/19/2017 8:26:00 AM

Wonderful to hear from you Arthur, thank you...

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/17/2017 9:53:00 AM

Sadly and beautifully expressed Charlie...god bless my friend...^WW^

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/17/2017 6:09:00 PM

Peace be with you WW...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/16/2017 9:31:00 PM

this really paints a picture of that dread disease, Charlie. WEll done.

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 10:27:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, all my best to you...

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 6/16/2017 6:47:00 PM

Powerful poetry on an unpleasant theme, Charlie. Your sonnet sings w/the spirit of a Dylan soul. Pure poetry, top-notch wordsmith artistry. Instant PSoup classic and a fave of mine. Love always.

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 10:26:00 PM

Freddie I always appreciate your comments thank you...

Elizabeth Kinch

Date: 6/16/2017 3:11:00 PM

So moving and expertly crafted. Poetry at its best Charlie.

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 10:23:00 PM

You are so kind Elizabeth, thank you...

Gary Bateman

Date: 6/16/2017 2:55:00 PM

Hello Charlie, This sonnet gives a striking, poetic description of depression. Your words and verses weave together to form an indelible impression on the reader. Very-Well Done!! A FAVE!! Cheers and Best, Gary

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 10:22:00 PM

I appreciate your encouragement Gary, thank you...

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/16/2017 10:28:00 AM

Yes, that's exactly how it feels, very well depicted, Charlie, hope this is fiction:)

Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 12:12:00 PM

It tis, Thank you Jo...