Depression

Unending darkness floods the skies alone in dreams my heart must weep no words are spoken or even cried such silence lives where shadows sleep My pleas just echo off the stillness my tears find no comfort as they fall my hope stands as a martyred witness I pin no exit from this pall Turn your head and spare no time leave greater credence to lesser thoughts take what is said in this poor rhyme add to your bed of forget-me-nots Think only of what should have been No lesser loss, this mortal sin.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017


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Date: 10/17/2018 1:01:00 PM
"I pin no exit from this pall"....Wow! I just love the images you create. I don't know why, but I see T.S. Elliots London. The silent, insulating darkness.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 10/17/2018 2:37:00 PM
Thanks Greig...
Date: 5/13/2018 2:56:00 AM
I really love the way you expressed this so poetically relatable.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 5/16/2018 10:44:00 AM
Thank you Vicki...
Date: 4/4/2018 3:29:00 PM
Worth working through.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 4/5/2018 11:04:00 AM
Indeed J. Thanks...
Date: 3/9/2018 6:26:00 PM
Nicely said. Suffers woul love the soothing manner in which their condition was penned. Great write. Best wishes Rainbow ??
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Charlie Smith
Date: 3/9/2018 7:53:00 PM
Thank you Rainbow...
Date: 3/9/2018 11:37:00 AM
Very nice, It has a gentleness to it, Mine is rough like concrete That come at you like a freight train https://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poems_by_poet.aspx?ID=97183
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Charlie Smith
Date: 3/9/2018 12:22:00 PM
Thanks for the visit Marc...
Date: 9/16/2017 8:30:00 PM
How did I miss this? I can really relate this, great poem!
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Charlie Smith
Date: 9/17/2017 12:59:00 PM
Thanks Arthur, I'm happy you found it...
Date: 7/18/2017 8:21:00 PM
Your two last lines says it all Charlie.It is hard to heal from depression.Been through it myself. It comes and goes. I always win.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 7/18/2017 10:48:00 PM
I'm betting on you Darlene, thanks for the visit...
Date: 7/8/2017 10:59:00 PM
This is so very well done Charlie. This poem resonates with me as I have been there. Your description is spot on and so artistic. Really enjoyed it! - Dean
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Date: 7/9/2017 11:47:00 PM
Thank you Dean...
Date: 7/8/2017 1:11:00 PM
Hi Charlie . Aha you mastered the elusive sonnet with amazing rhyme I hope this will lift your countenance high because I struggle to get it right. Wonderful
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Charlie Smith
Date: 7/8/2017 1:52:00 PM
I often wonder if I do any of these forms justice Jannie. But it is what it is. Thank you so much for the encouragement, I deeply appreciate it...
Date: 7/8/2017 7:44:00 AM
Oh this is an abyss with no bottom and you fall so silently...like this. Well penned. :)
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Charlie Smith
Date: 7/8/2017 7:56:00 AM
Thank you Sunita.
Date: 6/30/2017 9:40:00 AM
This is fantastic, so fantastic. Coming to this page feels predestined because I feel so satisfied. Thanks for the wonderful share.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/30/2017 4:05:00 PM
You are so kind, thank you Funom.
Date: 6/27/2017 10:46:00 AM
You strike deep, the nature of the great beast. Depression, the invisible monster that eats at one's heart and soul. A superb sonnet my friend and a fav...
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/27/2017 11:08:00 AM
How very gracious you are friend Robert, thank you.
Date: 6/24/2017 4:44:00 AM
Good Morning Charlie. You wrote with dignity and grace. For all those who experience this may they endure. Well done in its entirety.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/24/2017 10:32:00 AM
Thank you Lisa.
Date: 6/23/2017 9:38:00 PM
This is an outstanding piece Charlie, I do so admire your writing skill and technique especially with sonnets, but it doesn't matter the form you are always top notch!
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/24/2017 10:31:00 AM
Thank you John, I always appreciate your visit.
Date: 6/23/2017 2:15:00 PM
This sonnet is a little gem, I see all the intricacies and admire it. But most of all I recognise this, being clinically depressed, it paints a very vivid picture for me.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/24/2017 10:28:00 AM
Hope all is well now Darren, They always say " a better life through chemicals". That's not to make light of the disease but there does seem to be some effective treatments. The best to you...
Date: 6/21/2017 3:37:00 PM
Charlie! Charlie! Brilliant! As one that has cyclothymia, I can SO relate to this superb sonnet! Outstanding
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/21/2017 7:14:00 PM
Thank you so very much WW.
Date: 6/19/2017 11:16:00 AM
This is one of the best poems I have ever read about depression Charlie, and in a lovely Sonnet no less! You are such a master poet, your contemporary words vie with the famous! I loved this! A Fave my friend! : )
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/19/2017 11:51:00 AM
Your encouragement is incredible Connie, thank you so much...
Date: 6/19/2017 11:00:00 AM
Hey Charlie, such a magnificent collection of words for the exploration of the darkness of the human mind. Expert senses!!
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/19/2017 11:50:00 AM
Thank you so much Val..
Date: 6/18/2017 10:04:00 PM
I am no judge of poetry to be honest, however this resonated and reached me to the core, and for me thats what its all about, and a fav for me! Haven't been around as much so catching up on some reading! :)
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/19/2017 8:26:00 AM
Wonderful to hear from you Arthur, thank you...
Date: 6/17/2017 9:53:00 AM
Sadly and beautifully expressed Charlie...god bless my friend...^WW^
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Date: 6/17/2017 6:09:00 PM
Peace be with you WW...
Date: 6/16/2017 9:31:00 PM
this really paints a picture of that dread disease, Charlie. WEll done.
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Date: 6/16/2017 10:27:00 PM
Thank you Andrea, all my best to you...
Date: 6/16/2017 6:47:00 PM
Powerful poetry on an unpleasant theme, Charlie. Your sonnet sings w/the spirit of a Dylan soul. Pure poetry, top-notch wordsmith artistry. Instant PSoup classic and a fave of mine. Love always.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 10:26:00 PM
Freddie I always appreciate your comments thank you...
Date: 6/16/2017 3:11:00 PM
So moving and expertly crafted. Poetry at its best Charlie.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 10:23:00 PM
You are so kind Elizabeth, thank you...
Date: 6/16/2017 2:55:00 PM
Hello Charlie, This sonnet gives a striking, poetic description of depression. Your words and verses weave together to form an indelible impression on the reader. Very-Well Done!! A FAVE!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 10:22:00 PM
I appreciate your encouragement Gary, thank you...
Date: 6/16/2017 10:28:00 AM
Yes, that's exactly how it feels, very well depicted, Charlie, hope this is fiction:)
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2017 12:12:00 PM
It tis, Thank you Jo...
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