Debutante

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["Debutante" saw the light of day in my first poetry chapbook, "The Lady in the Pink Hat," Candor Press, 1969.]

Sighs
The fresh chill
Of November morn
The stare of icy eyes
While the sun is born
Fetal innocence
Unaware, the Fall demise
Young oak unconvinced
Not older braver trees.
Blow north wind
Unfettered
Against the shallow charms
And golden warmth, deterred
By fragile youth's alarms.

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Christopher Allen

Date: 6/14/2021 11:29:00 PM

Like this one Milton, particularly the last line. All the best Chris

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/15/2021 9:34:00 AM

Thank you, Chris. Thanks for your read and your thoughtful comment.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/2/2021 3:10:00 AM

delicate and pretty; metaphoric masterpiece here.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/2/2021 8:49:00 AM

Thanks, Caren. You are being way too kind, but I'll take it!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/1/2021 6:06:00 PM

This is superb, Milt. You really entered the mind of a debutante. Amazing for a young male to be capable of that. Bravo, gw

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/1/2021 6:47:00 PM

Thanks so much, G.W. Finally, I think, someone understood the poem. Many have tried, I think. Your comment was so rewarding for me!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/1/2021 5:05:00 PM

Love this. You must have been so young when you wrote it. I did not even really write poetry until later in my middle age.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/1/2021 6:51:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea. I have been writing since I was in elementary school, believe it or not. Published my first poem in a national magazine when I was in college. I was thrilled. Still am thrilled that anyone would write anything I write! But, then, you know that feeling, too.

JCB Brul

Date: 6/1/2021 1:42:00 PM

What a profound poem I found here! Your imagery is stunning! A fav for me!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/1/2021 3:50:00 PM

Thanks so much, JCB. I really appreciated your comment on my poem. It meant a lot to me!