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Death, Where Are You

Skulking - lurks an unseen shadow chilling both the heart and marrow destiny - your dust of sorrow Death, where are you Nurturing an endless grudge at life’s end the gentle nudge of darkness’ - god forsaken judge Death, where are you Breathless creature littered path a trail of tears your aftermath cold hallowed wail of livings wrath Death, where are you My pain beseeches you dear death free these emotions, suppress my breath beneath your cloak let me forget Death, where are you ©4/29/2018 submitted to – Rhyme and Refrain – Poetry Contest sponsor – Broken Wings

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Line Gauthier

Date: 6/2/2018 6:24:00 PM

I like your rhythm, John. A great poem, congrats on your podium finish.

James Inman

Date: 5/15/2018 7:56:00 PM

Very deep John, you have some very nice lines in your write.

Juliet Ligon

Date: 5/15/2018 3:55:00 PM

Nicely done. I especially enjoyed your last stanza. Adding to favs!

Constance La France

Date: 5/15/2018 2:33:00 PM

John, congratulations on your win in my contest with this deep and wonderfully penned poem, well done ~

John Lawless
Date: 5/15/2018 8:18:00 PM

Thank you BW for taking the time and energy to sponsor this wonderfully challenging contest.

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/14/2018 4:15:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this well-written somber poem. Rhyme and rhythm make a perfect read and feel for the refrain. Well done!

John Lawless
Date: 5/15/2018 8:16:00 PM

Thank you Susan I have always enjoyed a short walk on the dark side

Curtis Moorman

Date: 5/14/2018 2:49:00 PM

Chilling reality as it relates to the cold breath of death. Well executed.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/30/2018 11:02:00 AM

Such deep chilling imagery John - I've had to withdraw my poem as the new rule of having to use one of the 4 refrains renders it unsuitable for the contest and I can't change it as it just doesn't make sense. I will post it and may write another but it takes so long with this broken finger:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 4/30/2018 1:28:00 PM

the rules were changed after I wrote and posted the poem - I am still seeing people not understand the rule about using the 4 line refrain:-( hugs jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 4/30/2018 1:06:00 PM

Jan, I've written quite a few poems for contests only to find out that i missed one of the requirements and therefore.....well you know. Keep poking at those keys

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/30/2018 12:21:00 AM

Wow! This really got to me, John. It's a theme I've often thought about and written on. I loved the rhyming here....great job and good luck in the contest.

John Lawless
Date: 4/30/2018 1:02:00 PM

Hey, Eileen, good to hear from you. Yes, Death and I have had way to many conversations over the years.

Robertina B.

Date: 4/29/2018 2:21:00 PM

Such profound writing, John!! Absolutely Wonderful.. All the best to you..

John Lawless
Date: 4/30/2018 1:07:00 PM

Thank you Robertina. I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment.

Kevin Shaw

Date: 4/29/2018 1:27:00 PM

Well written John, your first verse is a beauty. I had a look at this contest and decided it wasn't for me. It certainly suited you, good luck in the contest, regards, Kevin

John Lawless
Date: 4/30/2018 1:03:00 PM

Thanks Kevin. It did take a bit of time to get all the pieces to fit.