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Days sneak up on the sleeper, Either anticipated, or scorned To the pessimist, they are dwindling, And to the bright eye—they carry on beyond our selfish minds Upon the wakened dreamer, Days draw on in a smiley haze, Keeping one buoyantly bouncing inward Outnumbered and overlooked—he is opulently occupied elsewhere To the seeker of truth, Ancient, though ageless are the days before him Crouching along the edge of tomorrow—seeking always more… As days billow like robes cooling long-trod legs gainst the Eastern sun And to the beasts and birds, Feathers, claws, snout, muscle and bone— all harmonize Instinct and passionate drive hurling precious life onward, Their days meander freely, like knowing feet on familiar ground For the contest “Days” Sponsor: Thomas Martin

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Date: 5/6/2015 8:29:00 PM
This poem's enigmatic beauty communicaates to me that to receive life with passion One must be an optimist. We become prey to the fowl of misfortune when our truth hails misery , when our souls sleep in the center of creation Laura. "Crouching along the edge of tomorrow, seekingalways more..." I like the symbolic inhibition and aggression in that expression my Gothic Princess. Initiative is the spark I catch from this beaitifully ambiguous poem Laura...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/6/2015 11:29:00 PM
You've grasped the understanding of this piece beautifully my sweet fellow poet! Your visits are worth the world and more! <3 ~Laura
Date: 5/3/2015 9:27:00 PM
Laura, Congrats on your awesome win. Forever ~SKAT~
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/3/2015 11:54:00 PM
Thanks for your sweet support! <3 ~Laura
Date: 5/3/2015 7:41:00 AM
Yes, my friend...that is an awesome metaphor, riding the sun into a brand new day! There are times like that, when I just bounce out of bed and eagerly start the day. Hope you do too. Hugs!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/3/2015 11:53:00 PM
<3 Lots of love to you, Kim! ~Laura
Date: 5/3/2015 6:39:00 AM
A well contemplated write, it tells us that days could mean differently to each of us, depending on our perspective. I loved "Crouching along the edge of tomorrow—seeking always more… As days billow like robes cooling long-trod legs gainst the Eastern sun". A winning piece. A 7. Hugs!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/3/2015 7:31:00 AM
Do you ever feel like you can just ride the sun into a brand new day? Thanks Kim, you understand this piece and I appreciate your feedback!<3 ~Laura
Date: 5/3/2015 4:26:00 AM
"Crouching along the edge of tomorrow"...WOW Laura, how the heck did you come up with THAT? I do believe that is one of the best and unique lines I have ever read! A 7 and then straight to my favs...
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/3/2015 6:21:00 AM
I'm humbled by your comment, friend! Thank you so much! Will check out your poems soon! <3 ~Laura
Date: 5/1/2015 10:47:00 AM
This poem embodies the kaleidoscope of colors and the fountain of sparkling phases that paint and create magic upon the page. Emile.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/1/2015 8:35:00 PM
Emile, a most gracious compliment from a fantastic poet!!~Laura
Date: 5/1/2015 9:06:00 AM
Hello Laura, Your free verse write is quite enchanting with some most definite themes to think about for the reader. Very Well-Done!! Best of Luck in the contest!! A "7" from me too!! Best Always, Gary
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/23/2015 12:20:00 AM
Gary** wow, Laura..just wow....
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/1/2015 8:33:00 PM
Thanks Greg! I made a couple of changes in hope that the poem flows more freely. I always appreciate your thoughtful feedback. ~Laura
Date: 5/1/2015 9:01:00 AM
Very well
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/1/2015 8:37:00 PM
Many thanks! Will be reading your poetry later this evening") ~Laura
Date: 5/1/2015 8:27:00 AM
There is much to ponder with this one. Good luck in the contest Laura.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/1/2015 8:39:00 PM
The theme really inspired me. Can't wait to read the winners- thanks! ~Laura

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