Dark Love

love the night, the lack of glare, the subtle sounds the hoot of owl and the warm street light, oh love, love the blue black all around my heart pounds my blood rushes firecrackers fly above moon captured, Japanese lanterns on a string jewel gingerbread houses lullaby winds the stroke of love as it laps the church bell's ring love the down comforters nighttime's soft grin love the punched hole made with a pin on black to view the eclipse while the sun takes nap cherish the silhouette dark paper unpacked images of lovers ones all unwrapped *Without the dark, we wouldn't see the stars.* 10/20/13

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Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 12/20/2013 6:27:00 AM

Reminds me of a poem I've written but never posted or shared, about luring the moon into my room and warning the morning to stay out of sight. Maybe I should find that one and post it. Loved this work, Debbie :)

Jake Ponce

Date: 10/30/2013 1:15:00 PM

You perfectly captured the beauty of night in this piece.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/24/2013 11:36:00 AM

Splendid..Clever and so beautiful.Ow yeah lady you transmitted feeling.. 'Japanese lanternes on a string'..That s a romantic imagery.Tnks for stopling by..Big hugs and Winter is coming.I remember your last Winter was rough.Stay warm dear.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/23/2013 9:43:00 PM

Some really gorgeous lines in this one, Debs. I loved the one: "nighttime's soft grin" and "love as it laps" too!!!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/23/2013 6:52:00 PM

There's 3 poems here, the original format is quatrains with the end rhyme [a,b,a,b/c,d,c,d/e,f,e,f] since the judge favors rhyme - I would call this a NONCE FORM - a nonce form is generally created by a poet for a specific poem but which may, over time, and with repeated usage by subsequent poets, become a "received form." Enjoy! Light & Love

Kelly Deschler

Date: 10/23/2013 5:57:00 PM

Yes, I love the nighttime, too! I love the sound of the owls. I love the glow of the moon and the stars. The night seems to have more of a serene and cozy feeling, that day does not. Wonderful poetry, Debbie! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!...Thank you very much for the kind comments!

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/22/2013 7:39:00 PM

So clever are you.........a poem within a poem !!! There are stars throughout your poem of poems!

Joseph May

Date: 10/22/2013 4:31:00 PM

wonderful write....thanks for stopping by....best wishes

Karen Anglesey

Date: 10/21/2013 12:25:00 PM

Simply lovely with stunning imagery. A very creative rhyme :)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/20/2013 10:28:00 PM

Fabulous, Debbie...What awesome images this conjured up in my mind....You are a master! HUGS HUGS HUGS!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 10/20/2013 9:36:00 PM

Wonderful!! I love these images of night, Debbie! I've always been a night owl, myself...I wanted to thank you for reading and commenting on my ghazal. I'm going to try to write another as you suggested just to challenge myself. Love and blessings, Rhonda

Sandra Adams

Date: 10/20/2013 7:38:00 PM

love this one...I am afraid of the dark at time...I love seeing the moon and hearing owls and the crickets singing in night's air...yet the lack of light, lets the imagination run wild sometimes...good poem Debbie...love your images In this one :) hugs