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Lost, to the darkness, deep ... This bleak sojourn I have made times on end, dipping my eyes to the dreadful forms that mock me, a maelstrom of words spinning my mind, to pinch off the oppressive stench of this place. You have beckoned me, ages hence, howling and shrieking like a puerile revenant, 'til the discordant consequence I could refuse no more. Hope, they call you? Oh, such a horrid and cruel parody! Do you see in me a fool, then? A jaded harlequin? A multitude of monikers be yours, but THAT is the most absurd, and it shall not tremble my lips! Have you not known me ... in all the scratchings of dread and despair - in that stark honesty? You are the bastard of my passions, and you have worn this flesh as your own ... oh, how long I watched from the depths of sorrow as you danced in my form, somber moon cackling like a demon. How you strangled the very spirit from my trembling bones, my marrow sucked like pulpy food for your pleasure. Such exquisite agony! Such divine misery, mine! Carnal truth scrapes, raw, the depths of my spirit, with grisly intention ... The blood of my kind heart, stirred up and imbibed as your remedy, the clotted matter spit in my face with magnificent madness. Alas, Dear Oblivion, the ebon sky now weeps ... stars streaking earthward like ragged rain, 'Til the heavens are as The Torment - lightless, devoid, barren, and bloody. Thus, the last breath of a saint, becomes the first breath of a monster, and in feigning prescience of an answer that will never come, I ask of you, "Hope", in utter terror and awe ... why? Why do you taunt me so?!? ~ 4th Place ~ in the "Poe In Plath Style" Poetry Contest, July Morning, Sponsor. ~ 5th Place ~ in the "Emotional Anger, Hurt, Rage" Poetry Contest, Lewis Raynes, Sponsor. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Deep and Dark II" Poetry Contest, Laura Loo, Sponsor. ~ 6th Place ~ in the "In the Dark" Poetry Contest, Russell Sivey, Sponsor.

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Date: 3/15/2018 1:38:00 PM
Back to say congrats again, this was even better second read, the poems in this premium contest are outstanding! I am partial to your writing, Leanne's, was great as were all that I read!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/15/2018 6:56:00 PM
Thank you soi much, John ... I'm struggling to find time to read ANYthing of late, but I plan to soon, as I'm way behind on commenting and thank-you's, etc.. This contest will be one of the first, as I've scanned a couple and they're just so good. This was a great contest theme and a favorite genre ... looking forward to it. Blessings, Buddy! :-)
Date: 3/9/2018 7:45:00 PM
Congratulations on your excellent win! Eve ~`*
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/11/2018 8:12:00 AM
Thank you so much, Eve - greatly appreciated! :-) <3
Date: 3/9/2018 2:47:00 PM
Greg, inspired writing!!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/11/2018 8:12:00 AM
Many thanks, Craig! :-)
Date: 3/9/2018 12:18:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Gregory. Well done on this dark and macabre style.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/11/2018 8:12:00 AM
Very kind of you, Line - thanks so much! :-) <3
Date: 3/9/2018 11:20:00 AM
What a deep, and perfect illustration of two poets who could take us to those dark places ! What a terrific poem for this contest! Congrats on your win !!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/11/2018 8:11:00 AM
That's so sweet of you, Carrie, and your opinion is valuable to me, as I admire your work so much! Many thanks and blessings to you, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/9/2018 10:51:00 AM
love that last stanza Greg, great poem all around as always :)-luloo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/11/2018 8:10:00 AM
Thank you VERY much, Luloo - so pleased you enjoyed it! Blessings, Dear Lady! :-) <3
Date: 12/3/2017 3:53:00 PM
I am just now seeing the note you left for me here. (I ordinarily don't see those replies made to my comments) Thanks so much. I am humbled. And also Congrats for your win with THIS one!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/3/2017 6:20:00 PM
Thank you very much, Andrea ... that means a lot to me. Blessings! :-)
Date: 10/28/2017 10:36:00 PM
Gregory, congratulation on your win Hugs Eve ~`*
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/28/2017 11:54:00 PM
Thank you so much, Eve! :-)
Date: 10/27/2017 11:03:00 PM
A very nostalgic poem. Congrats on your win, Greg.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/27/2017 11:19:00 PM
Thank you so much, Afzal ... greatly appreciated!
Date: 10/27/2017 1:14:00 PM
You put the D in Dark on this one my friend, Congrats on your win
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/27/2017 3:43:00 PM
Very kind of you to say, Brian, and very much appreciated, my friend! :-)
Date: 10/27/2017 9:27:00 AM
Congrats with another win with this dark poem, well done Greg!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/27/2017 3:43:00 PM
Thank you, John, much appreciated, my friend ...
Date: 9/23/2017 4:36:00 AM
Congratulations, Greg on your win with such a flowing poem.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/24/2017 12:55:00 AM
Thank you very much, Subimal, that is very kind of you, my friend! Blessings! :-)
Date: 9/22/2017 10:25:00 AM
Gregory, CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this beautifully penned write!
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Date: 9/24/2017 12:53:00 AM
Blessings, BW - that's very kind of you to say - thanks so much!! :-)
Date: 9/22/2017 10:21:00 AM
Congratulations, Gregory, wonderful write. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 9/24/2017 12:53:00 AM
Very kind of you, Eve - thanks so much, my friend! <3
Date: 9/22/2017 7:26:00 AM
Deep, dark and foreboding phrases make for a winner. Well done, Greg.
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Date: 9/24/2017 12:52:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Lin, as you know, your opinion is very important to me, dear friend - blessings! :-) <3
Date: 9/22/2017 7:07:00 AM
Congrats!!! my friend...a well-deserved win Greg...god bless...^WW^
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/24/2017 12:51:00 AM
Thanks so much, W2 - very kind of you, friend! :-)
Date: 9/22/2017 7:06:00 AM
Hey Pssst Greggeri ;) you ended 1 place above my entry. Grants my dear friend <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/24/2017 12:50:00 AM
That's so you can hold me up, Buddy! ;-) Congrats and thanks, my friend, I am honored to be even mentioned on the same list with you and these other amazing poets! <3
Date: 9/20/2017 8:29:00 AM
Wow! Can't get much darker. Very well done Greg. Do the letters S&M mean anything to you, Ha! Best wishes in the contest...
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/20/2017 3:18:00 PM
Thanks, Charlie, glad you enjoyed this one! It actually is about the dichotomy of hope whilst amidst the throes of addiction and depression, and how it can produce very unrealistic expectations, (though I believe it ultimately is salvation).
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Date: 9/20/2017 3:18:00 PM
(continued) I often write with a lot of ambiguity and hidden meaning, though, and I love to see how folks interpret these deeper, less "clear" pieces. Poetry says something different to each of us, I think! Thanks again! :-)
Date: 9/18/2017 10:33:00 PM
Gregory, this is a stunning piece of dark verse. I often lose interest in blank verse but this one pulled me along in fascination. Your combination of imagery and words give that impression of all good art - that of being uncovered rather than made; and the message strikes a powerful chord.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/20/2017 3:19:00 AM
Thank you SO very much, Geoffrey, I'm truly pleased that you liked this one, as it is very special to me ... I greatly appreciate the kind and generous comments! Blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 9/14/2017 8:38:00 PM
My goodness, what an amazing entry for In the Dark!! How ever did you come up with this idea and all the incredible imagery. Not being a free verse person, I know I can't measure up to this one!!!
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Date: 9/14/2017 9:12:00 PM
I'm a bit too "complex" for my own good, Andrea, and too much time in dark places, self-imposed ... I guess that translates well to these shadowy realms, lol. And please don't say you can't measure up! You are an EXQUISITE writer, and I've yet to read ANYthing of yours that couldn't win ANY contest! We are all chasing you, my friend, and the extraordinarily high and refined bar you set keeps us striving to do our best - what a blessing that is, and what a treasure you are -
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/14/2017 9:12:00 PM
I am better because of you, (and the other amazing writers here), and while I'll never reach that level, it helps me to expect more of my own work. Thank you so much, my friend! <3
Date: 9/14/2017 8:01:00 PM
I really like these words "Weeps - stars streaking earthward Like ragged rain"
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/14/2017 8:13:00 PM
Thank you so very much, G, I'm pleased you liked this! Blessings! :-)
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Date: 9/14/2017 8:02:00 PM
Then of course the saints death and demons birth/ transformation is really awesome.
Date: 9/14/2017 9:11:00 AM
Superb, dark and drawing one in, Greg:)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/14/2017 8:11:00 PM
Very kind of you, Jo, thank you very much! :-)
Date: 9/14/2017 7:01:00 AM
Thvia is absolutely right ... This is what is poetry ... Thanks for liking my Moonlight Delight ...
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Date: 9/14/2017 8:11:00 PM
Thank you so much, Probir - much appreciated my friend! :-)
Date: 9/12/2017 10:37:00 PM
Your word choices are simply stunning. This is why poetry is called an art, for pieces such as this. Love.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/13/2017 10:21:00 AM
That's so very kind of you to say, Thvia - I greatly appreciate it, my friend! Blessings! :-)
Date: 9/12/2017 5:17:00 PM
Yup this is deep and dark, Russell should love this one!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/13/2017 10:20:00 AM
Thanks, John ... we'll see. Too many great poets here for me to ever count on such, and so many better than I. Some that I thought were my best that never even placed - God keeps us humble. I try to keep mySELF humble, cuz God's usually a bit more ruthless about it, lol! Blessings, Brother. :-)
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