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September 18, 2017
Placed 1st: Your personal perfect poem contest by Brian Strand
Placed 6th: premiere contest 15 by SKAT A


 

A softer breeze blows his way And a sunny day shines everywhere Painting the sky blue and grey. But those hues are not for him, For him it's dark everywhere As if the earth never rotates And dark moon stays frozen in place, Like a perpetual solar eclipse Dark of the world stays transfixed. Of all the people he would like to see, He would like to see his wife's face In the twilight evening-sky bestows When her loving posture glows As she points to a beautiful rainbow. As he hears the birds chirping One thing he does regret: He's never seen a bird's nest, Having heard the hatchlings' cry Never has he seen the birds fly. When he walks his child to school As people frolic in the day's glitter, Of all the things that come to mind One thing has bothered him for a while: He has never seen his daughter's smile. There are no road signs for him Only the wisdom hand guides his path. With borrowed eyes he works his farm, And rides the wind to spin a ball, And swings a bat with a mighty call. Having felt this power in Angel's eyes He wonders what God looks like. Among the many friends he has His wife is his best friend. Among the people who love him She is the best, love could ever find. While all his friends believe in him His wife is the only one who thinks Her husband is not blind.

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Date: 7/10/2022 9:13:00 AM
"He has never seen his daughter's smile.'' When I think of the deprivation of people like him, my eyes get moistened. Also I think how blessed we are to have been born with all faculties in tact. But here the man in question, I feel, has an inner light shining in him.... A touching poem, Vijay !
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Date: 1/20/2021 3:05:00 PM
What a most endearing poem, Vijay ~ so glad it features in the 2020 PS Anthology.
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Date: 6/29/2019 12:26:00 PM
Darkness is Everywhere, without his Wife. These moments you paint with your words truly touch my heart. This is very emotional. Congratulations Vijay, on this win. ~ Brandy
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Date: 6/28/2019 7:47:00 PM
Vijay, it is a delightful to return once more to partake of the beauty of your truly moving poem. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/26/2019 12:33:00 PM
Congratulations on your deserving first placement with this moving, lovely poem Vijay. xxoo
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Date: 6/25/2019 7:05:00 PM
Vijay congrats on your win!;)
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Date: 10/12/2018 7:47:00 PM
Just perusing old poems of yours . This one is considered your fifth best (I guess for reads and faves is how best poems are rated). I remember reading this one before and it remains for me a most touching poem.
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Date: 4/16/2018 11:39:00 PM
Wow, awesome ending, Vijay. Superbly written. A most deserving win. Congrats. It's a FAVE for me.
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Date: 1/22/2018 9:45:00 PM
Viajy, it was a joy to re-read this beautiful and deep poem again. Congratulations on your excellent win my friend! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/22/2018 7:16:00 PM
Such a beautiful poem, Vijay. Though blind, his inner peace, acceptance and the 'light of his life' light his way. So wonderfully expressed, and my heartfelt congratulations on your win! :) Sandra
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Date: 1/22/2018 6:13:00 PM
I'm not surprised to see your name on the winners list. Another fine piece.
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Date: 1/22/2018 6:45:00 PM
Thank you Richard.
Date: 1/22/2018 10:37:00 AM
Vijay Pandit :) Congrats on your win, thank you for entering my contest. HUGS **SKAT**
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Date: 1/22/2018 6:44:00 PM
Thank you..appreciate your comments.
Date: 12/9/2017 12:11:00 PM
Powerful poem, Vijay. It totally mesmerized me, engulfed me in the humanity of a soul whose light shines bright in the perpetual darkness. A great, great poem! Will put in the fave file for sure. Love and smiles always.
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Date: 1/17/2018 5:08:00 PM
Thank you Freddie.
Date: 10/22/2017 8:35:00 PM
The power of believing is strong. This is a great poem. have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 1/17/2018 5:07:00 PM
Thank you Darlene.
Date: 9/19/2017 8:38:00 PM
An excellent poem Vijay. Lovely lines throughout expressing the darkness within. Your last line is amazing. Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 9/20/2017 5:46:00 AM
Love your visit always---Thanks Susan for reading through this rather long poem! You are so right--I get very emotional by the end and the last line says it all--we must be on the same wavelength!!
Date: 9/19/2017 8:30:00 PM
Absolutely amazing poem for the contest Vijay. A winner to me! Very well done! :)
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Date: 9/20/2017 5:43:00 AM
Love your comments Heidi--thank you for your vote of confidence. Thanks again for reading through this rather long poem!
Date: 9/19/2017 7:03:00 PM
wow, this is very very good work, Vijay! I think the last line was a perfect way to sum it up. Awesome!
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Date: 9/20/2017 5:41:00 AM
Many thanks Andrea--enjoyed reading your comments. Thank you for reading through this rather long poem!
Date: 9/19/2017 1:42:00 PM
the inner darkness in the midst of everyone elses reality is so true. Best wishes for a win, Vijay
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Date: 9/19/2017 2:37:00 PM
Thank you Jack for your visit and lovely comments!
Date: 9/19/2017 12:09:00 PM
Brilliantly done ... Wonderful poetry of darkness ... Congratulations in advance ...
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Date: 9/19/2017 1:04:00 PM
Thank you Probir--love your comments--it is always a pleasure to hear from a poet so admired by many!
Date: 9/19/2017 11:30:00 AM
Oh this is so brilliant. I love your interpretation; never thought you would end it how you did. The rhyme at places makes it sound lovely too. Hope this does very well in the contest!!
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Date: 9/19/2017 1:01:00 PM
I am so glad you it read to the end--Yes, I agree--the ending is designed to capture the reader but it's a long-read to the end. Many thanks for your visit and your lovely comments Sneha! I just read your poem--you should write more often!
Date: 9/19/2017 11:28:00 AM
Your poem is absolutely lovely! A wonderful tale! Fave!
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Date: 9/19/2017 12:57:00 PM
Love your visit and your delightful comments, Kim!
Date: 9/19/2017 9:46:00 AM
You are a very talented poet my friend.. you write many forms so well.. this perceptive poem can be related by many..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/19/2017 10:22:00 AM
Your kind words mean a lot for me--thank you Silent One for your lovely feedback!
Date: 9/19/2017 8:12:00 AM
Excellent. Very perceptive write. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 9/19/2017 8:52:00 AM
Thanks for reading through this long poem and thanks Ravi for your lovely comments!
Date: 9/18/2017 9:28:00 PM
This is very moving--really well-written, Vijay. Janice
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Date: 9/19/2017 6:50:00 AM
Thank you Janice for your insight--appreciate your lovely comments!
Date: 9/18/2017 8:47:00 PM
That was beautifully written. And a unsuspected deep ending. My mind went in different directions about what was about to happen. Thank you
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Date: 9/19/2017 6:48:00 AM
Thank you Margaret for reading through this long poem--appreciate your lovely comments!

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