Dark Clouds

Dark clouds gather pain On nights without slumber Hoping to find sleep She closes her eyes to dream While lullabies in the distance gleam

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Date: 10/4/2017 2:21:00 PM

I like the contrast between the first and second part of the poem, Joseph; the end line wraps it up nicely. Regards // paul

Joseph May
Date: 10/4/2017 2:34:00 PM

Thank you Paul

Date: 10/1/2017 8:20:00 PM

I really like this short poem which somehow got past me!! Was it for someone's contest?

Joseph May
Date: 10/4/2017 2:34:00 PM

Thank you Andrea

Date: 9/24/2017 12:01:00 PM

Wow, Joseph! Succinct and sweet:)

Joseph May
Date: 10/4/2017 2:34:00 PM

Thank you Jo

Date: 9/24/2017 9:07:00 AM

A beautiful write Joseph with a fabulous last line!

Joseph May
Date: 10/4/2017 2:33:00 PM

Thank you Susan

Date: 9/23/2017 3:03:00 PM

Lovely!

Joseph May
Date: 9/23/2017 4:32:00 PM

Thank you Vijay

Date: 9/23/2017 2:56:00 PM

- Beautiful, Joseph - Best wishes for a wonderful weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Joseph May
Date: 9/23/2017 4:31:00 PM

Thank you Anne

Date: 9/23/2017 1:20:00 PM

Very beautiful Joseph! I loved that last line.

Joseph May
Date: 9/23/2017 4:31:00 PM

Thank you Arthur

Date: 9/23/2017 11:49:00 AM

Oh, I love this poem Joseph! A definite favorite to think about the lullabies at night :)

Joseph May
Date: 9/23/2017 11:53:00 AM

Thank you Heidi..hugs