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Dancing With Description- Contest

Alarm as mind is hurled in icy cage
 deaf to what between them nurses said,
 orchestra of terror took the stage
 and heartbeat had took refuge in my head

 'Just keep you're breathing steady, won't be long,
 you're doing well', consultant's last remark,
 metallic taste was forming on my tongue,
 a whistling in my ears heralded dark.

 wide eyed, frozen, hands on rails tightly cling
 helpless, supine, outside my comfort zone,
 nerves tighter than overtuned guitar strings,
 surrounded, yet never felt so alone.

 It still walks with me now, I shan't forget
 The day that fear and I finally met.


 For contest 'Dancing with description', sponsor- Casarah Nance

 Viv Wigley
 28th October 2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 11/14/2015 7:56:00 AM
Thank-goodness it's over for now. Not a pleasant thing to worry about. But we are lucky to have such services. Imagine how it was before general anesthesia. Ouch. When given the option, some procedures can be done without it, but it requires some faith and most people will decline.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/14/2015 8:32:00 AM
Even with anaesthesia, still scary. Thanks for dropping by, Duke. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/10/2015 7:02:00 PM
Congratulations on the well-deserved win, dear Viv:) It's so vivid, I can imagine everything. +7 I love ir
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/10/2015 9:15:00 PM
Cheers, Elis, appreciate your visit. Viv
Date: 11/10/2015 11:33:00 AM
Viv, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/10/2015 9:14:00 PM
Thanks Skat, a good crop of entries again. Viv x
Date: 11/10/2015 7:50:00 AM
Again Viv, Excellent!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/10/2015 9:13:00 PM
Thanks James! Regards, Viv
Date: 11/10/2015 4:34:00 AM
VIV --This is the best write in the contest ----7 ++++++++++++++
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/10/2015 7:33:00 AM
Thanks, very kind, glad that it appealed to you. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/10/2015 3:54:00 AM
Fantastic write, Viv.well deserved win.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/10/2015 7:33:00 AM
Cheers, Scott, a good contest all round. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/10/2015 1:33:00 AM
Love the descriptions Viv, I really danced with your lines.. =`) for me, I will add it my first... I esp like the line with guitar strings.. congrats!~Olive Eloisa =`)
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Date: 11/9/2015 11:34:00 PM
Excellent poem, Viv! I felt the fear and dread from the first line! Congrats on your awesome win :)
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/10/2015 12:26:00 AM
AhahaaA! :D
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/10/2015 12:14:00 AM
I envy people like you who can type with one hand and eat chocolate with the other, Laura. Viv x
Date: 11/9/2015 7:35:00 PM
Well done, Viv..Congratulations. Pretty riveting.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/9/2015 10:40:00 PM
That first time feeling of being totally under somebody else's control just freaked me out, Lin. I've got the hang of it now. Thanks for dropping by, Viv x
Date: 11/9/2015 6:32:00 PM
Well expressed! Congrats Viv.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/9/2015 10:41:00 PM
Thanks Richard, and well done you too. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/9/2015 5:33:00 PM
What an experience, Viv, and how well you made the reader feel your fear. Congrats on your nice win. Sandra
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/9/2015 10:42:00 PM
Thanks Sandra, and your entry was a good 'un, too. Viv x
Date: 11/9/2015 3:30:00 PM
This one will strike home with so many of us who have experienced this same fear. It is such a human experience, that happens every day, but to each one who is the patient.....it is one of the most vulnerable times in our lives. Well done!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/9/2015 10:43:00 PM
Yes, Carrie, to the operating room staff it's just a production line, but to first-timers it's almost the end of the world. Thanks for dropping by, Viv x
Date: 10/30/2015 12:26:00 PM
Incredible write, Viv. Very emotional and descriptive.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 10/30/2015 8:52:00 PM
Thanks, James. Poetry is a great way of saying 'AAAARGH!'. Viv
Date: 10/29/2015 3:07:00 AM
- Really well written, Viv !!! - Luck in content !! - Best wishes for a lovely day - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 10/30/2015 1:41:00 AM
Thanks, Anne Lise, have a lovely weekend, Viv x
Date: 10/28/2015 6:41:00 PM
wow, now I think THAT is exactly what she was looking for!!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 10/28/2015 8:30:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, I think this is also how my other ha;f felt when she was rushed to hospital before giving birth to my daughter. Thanks for dropping in, Viv x
Date: 10/28/2015 6:24:00 PM
G'day Viv... spine tingling stuff mate. Great - Lindsay
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Viv Wigley
Date: 10/28/2015 8:32:00 PM
My heart goes out to anyone going into surgery for the first time, Lindsay. Well, not in a medical sense, anyway. Thanks for stopping by. Viv
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