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Crystal Canticle

Fall softly, wee one, here ... fall softly
    to your repose, drift the dark like a
        feather! You are perfection, defined,
            utterly and sublimely unique, your

Nascency like no other! Oh, countless
    of your kind - yes, only the stars
        themselves can avail your plenitude,
            yet so exquisitely 'sui generis'! Fiery,

Brilliant, prismatic, birthed in perfectly
    chiseled features ... dancing, soaring,
        fanciful, true! You wink at me, flirting
            coyly, (as others, but you're mine!) ...

I draw closer with every flutter, clouds
    parting just enough for the moon to
        peek through, as if they know how
            beautiful you are, and how shameful

That such as you should die unseen
    in the night ... alone. But alas, it is
        my love for you that seals your fate,
            and this long, dark, immaculate dance -

Your life's embers and intent - comes
    gently to rest in my palm, and there,
        in the warmth of my glove, you die ...
            silently, tenderly, beautifully perfect ...

Snowflake.





~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Strand Choice T, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 3rd Place ~  in the "Embers And Snowflakes" Poetry Contest, Anthony Slausen, Judge & Sponsor.
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Ibeh Avatar
March 30, 2020 at 8:58 AM
Excellent write with striking imagery, Greg:-) Congratulations on your win!
Neumann Avatar
January 9, 2018 at 9:44 AM
Nice one. Congratulations, Kai
Barden Avatar
January 10, 2018 at 11:09 PM
Thanks so much, Kai - glad you liked it! :-)
Haight Avatar
January 9, 2018 at 8:17 AM
I love where you took the theme, Gregory. Beautifully written! Congratulations on your podium win! Sandra
Barden Avatar
January 10, 2018 at 11:08 PM
I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Sandra ... kind of an odd thing to personify, but it just seemed a subject that was crying for something fresh. Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Tripp Avatar
January 8, 2018 at 6:06 AM
Beautiful write, Gregory. Congratulations!
Barden Avatar
January 10, 2018 at 11:07 PM
That's very kind of you, Rhoda - thank you so much, my friend! :-) <3
Roper Avatar
January 7, 2018 at 10:16 AM
Congratulations on your win,Gregory , beautiful write. Hugs Eve ~`*
Barden Avatar
January 7, 2018 at 3:52 PM
I'm pleased that you enjoyed it, Eve, thank you so much, Friend! Blessings! :-) <3
Pigeon Tart Avatar
January 7, 2018 at 6:55 AM
Back to congratulate you deary :) xomo <3
Barden Avatar
January 7, 2018 at 3:52 PM
Thank you very much, Dear Xomo - blessings, Friend! ;-) <3
Canerdy Avatar
January 6, 2018 at 5:20 PM
Excellent use of personification in this majestic piece, Greg! CONGRATS on your win. Janice
Barden Avatar
January 7, 2018 at 3:51 PM
That's very sweet of you to say, Janice, thanks so much! :-)
Gauthier Avatar
January 6, 2018 at 3:21 PM
Awesome poem, Gregory. Congrats on your well deserved win.
Barden Avatar
January 7, 2018 at 3:51 PM
Thank you so much, Line - Best wishes, my friend! :-) <3
Ashley Avatar
January 6, 2018 at 12:59 PM
Oh Gregory, how very tender and exquisite your poem is. Your imagery is superb and your content is divine. I was completely enthralled with your delicately elegant and scintillating poem. Congratulations for your excellent win. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Barden Avatar
January 7, 2018 at 3:50 PM
This is such a wonderfully heart-felt and beautiful comment, Susan, a poem in itself! Thank you so much for the kind words - I'm so happy you liked my snowflake! :-)
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November 29, 2017 at 10:52 AM
What lovely images you have given the miracle of a snowflake. Congrats and blessings, Janis.
Barden Avatar
November 29, 2017 at 5:28 PM
Thank you very much, Janis, that's very kind of you, Friend! :-) <3
Wigley Avatar
November 29, 2017 at 3:09 AM
Congrats on your placement with this light and delicate piece, Gregory, well done. Regards, Viv
Barden Avatar
November 29, 2017 at 5:27 PM
Thank you so much, Viv - I am honored and humbled to be on such a list with so many great poets. Blessings!
Canerdy Avatar
August 8, 2017 at 5:40 PM
How lovely! Congrats, Greg! Janice
Barden Avatar
November 18, 2017 at 3:02 AM
Thank you so much, Janice ... blessings, Friend! :-) <3
Breedt Avatar
August 8, 2017 at 6:04 AM
Metaphorically beautiful Greg. Personification excellently described with utmost passion. All in awe of a snowflake!.
Barden Avatar
November 18, 2017 at 3:01 AM
Thank you so much, Jannie - I greatly appreciate the kind words, my friend! :-)
Johnson Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 11:19 PM
Thank you Greg for all the kind words on 'Dear Jupiter'. My friend, 'Crystal Canticle' is a 'jewel' . What amazing imagination! Best wishes in the contest. A snowflake. Blessings.
Barden Avatar
August 8, 2017 at 4:06 AM
Thank you so much, Curtis, that's very kind of you - so pleased you enjoyed this one, my friend! :-)
Hamilton Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 12:38 PM
This one got me at the end, your imagery led me to believe this was about a woman, great personification Greg, your poetry is rich in texture and substance!
Barden Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 9:49 PM
Thank you so much, John, your opinion is an important one to me - blessings, Brother!
Pigeon Tart Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 12:16 PM
Gorgeous :)
Barden Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 9:48 PM
Thank you, Maureen - kind as always! :-)
Daniel Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 9:52 AM
Amazing poem, Greg, you simply wow!!
Barden Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 9:47 PM
Thanks, Jo - very kind of you, my friend!
Pandit Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 7:14 AM
WOW--just wonderful!
Barden Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 9:47 PM
Thank you, Vijay - glad you enjoyed it! :-)
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