Crystal Canticle

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Fall softly, wee one, here ... fall softly
    to your repose, drift the dark like a
        feather! You are perfection, defined,
            utterly and sublimely unique, your

Nascency like no other! Oh, countless
    of your kind - yes, only the stars
        themselves can avail your plenitude,
            yet so exquisitely 'sui generis'! Fiery,

Brilliant, prismatic, birthed in perfectly
    chiseled features ... dancing, soaring,
        fanciful, true! You wink at me, flirting
            coyly, (as others, but you're mine!) ...

I draw closer with every flutter, clouds
    parting just enough for the moon to
        peek through, as if they know how
            beautiful you are, and how shameful

That such as you should die unseen
    in the night ... alone. But alas, it is
        my love for you that seals your fate,
            and this long, dark, immaculate dance -

Your life's embers and intent - comes
    gently to rest in my palm, and there,
        in the warmth of my glove, you die ...
            silently, tenderly, beautifully perfect ...

Snowflake.





~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Strand Choice T, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 3rd Place ~  in the "Embers And Snowflakes" Poetry Contest, Anthony Slausen, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 3/30/2020 8:58:00 AM
Excellent write with striking imagery, Greg:-) Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 1/9/2018 9:44:00 AM
Nice one. Congratulations, Kai
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 11:09:00 PM
Thanks so much, Kai - glad you liked it! :-)
Date: 1/9/2018 8:17:00 AM
I love where you took the theme, Gregory. Beautifully written! Congratulations on your podium win! Sandra
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 11:08:00 PM
I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Sandra ... kind of an odd thing to personify, but it just seemed a subject that was crying for something fresh. Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/8/2018 6:06:00 AM
Beautiful write, Gregory. Congratulations!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 11:07:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Rhoda - thank you so much, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/7/2018 10:16:00 AM
Congratulations on your win,Gregory , beautiful write. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2018 3:52:00 PM
I'm pleased that you enjoyed it, Eve, thank you so much, Friend! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 1/7/2018 6:55:00 AM
Back to congratulate you deary :) xomo <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2018 3:52:00 PM
Thank you very much, Dear Xomo - blessings, Friend! ;-) <3
Date: 1/6/2018 5:20:00 PM
Excellent use of personification in this majestic piece, Greg! CONGRATS on your win. Janice
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2018 3:51:00 PM
That's very sweet of you to say, Janice, thanks so much! :-)
Date: 1/6/2018 3:21:00 PM
Awesome poem, Gregory. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2018 3:51:00 PM
Thank you so much, Line - Best wishes, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/6/2018 12:59:00 PM
Oh Gregory, how very tender and exquisite your poem is. Your imagery is superb and your content is divine. I was completely enthralled with your delicately elegant and scintillating poem. Congratulations for your excellent win. Warmest wishes ~Susan
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2018 3:50:00 PM
This is such a wonderfully heart-felt and beautiful comment, Susan, a poem in itself! Thank you so much for the kind words - I'm so happy you liked my snowflake! :-)
Date: 11/29/2017 10:52:00 AM
What lovely images you have given the miracle of a snowflake. Congrats and blessings, Janis.
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Date: 11/29/2017 5:28:00 PM
Thank you very much, Janis, that's very kind of you, Friend! :-) <3
Date: 11/29/2017 3:09:00 AM
Congrats on your placement with this light and delicate piece, Gregory, well done. Regards, Viv
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2017 5:27:00 PM
Thank you so much, Viv - I am honored and humbled to be on such a list with so many great poets. Blessings!
Date: 8/8/2017 5:40:00 PM
How lovely! Congrats, Greg! Janice
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/18/2017 3:02:00 AM
Thank you so much, Janice ... blessings, Friend! :-) <3
Date: 8/8/2017 6:04:00 AM
Metaphorically beautiful Greg. Personification excellently described with utmost passion. All in awe of a snowflake!.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/18/2017 3:01:00 AM
Thank you so much, Jannie - I greatly appreciate the kind words, my friend! :-)
Date: 8/7/2017 11:19:00 PM
Thank you Greg for all the kind words on 'Dear Jupiter'. My friend, 'Crystal Canticle' is a 'jewel' . What amazing imagination! Best wishes in the contest. A snowflake. Blessings.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/8/2017 4:06:00 AM
Thank you so much, Curtis, that's very kind of you - so pleased you enjoyed this one, my friend! :-)
Date: 8/7/2017 12:38:00 PM
This one got me at the end, your imagery led me to believe this was about a woman, great personification Greg, your poetry is rich in texture and substance!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/7/2017 9:49:00 PM
Thank you so much, John, your opinion is an important one to me - blessings, Brother!
Date: 8/7/2017 12:16:00 PM
Gorgeous :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/7/2017 9:48:00 PM
Thank you, Maureen - kind as always! :-)
Date: 8/7/2017 9:52:00 AM
Amazing poem, Greg, you simply wow!!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/7/2017 9:47:00 PM
Thanks, Jo - very kind of you, my friend!
Date: 8/7/2017 7:14:00 AM
WOW--just wonderful!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/7/2017 9:47:00 PM
Thank you, Vijay - glad you enjoyed it! :-)
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