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Cry of Demise

While gray waters of June moan…one last time Near the dimming edge of our isle, offshore-- How so many stars tremble quite sublime For this clutch of demise gushes its pour. Near the dimming edge of our isle, offshore I summon the fighter in me… Wake wake! For this clutch of demise gushes its pour- To ignite weakened hope ‘s flame, and not quake. I summon the fighter in me … Wake wake! As courage prevails nudging my bruised soul… To ignite weakened hope’s flame , and not quake, Entombing young brother… dug in the knoll. As courage prevails, nudging my bruised soul, The deepened cry of goodbye washes the day Entombing young brother… dug in the knoll,l Till chapel bells peal on, quite far away. The deepened cry of goodbye washes the day... How so many stars tremble quite sublime Till chapel bells peal on, quite far away-- While gray waters of June moan…one last time. Kim Rodrigues' Contest : Write Me A Pantoum 10/16/2017

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Date: 10/16/2017 3:27:00 PM
Your poetry is always a pleasure to read, even when it is a little sad. Good luck, nette!
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Date: 10/16/2017 8:22:00 AM
Wow Nette, Wow! The emotion within this write is truly stirring! I really enjoyed reading this courageous and enlightening poem this morning! You are surely a terrific writer, I just love the way you weave your words together, and your descriptions are superb! What a remarkable piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/16/2017 7:56:00 AM
Very moving, Nette. A wonderful, emotional expression, Good Luck !!!
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Date: 10/16/2017 1:56:00 AM
I could feel the emotion in each line and verse, loved this one nette
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Date: 10/15/2017 8:12:00 PM
Such a sad goodbye felt in the heart and soul Nette. A well-written Pantoum, beautiful in its melancholy; 'While the gray waters of June moan... one last time,' - such poetic woe. Good luck in the contest
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Date: 10/15/2017 7:54:00 PM
Your pantoum is well written as always, nette--I feel the sorrow and goodbye--best for a win!
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