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Cries of a Concubine

Only she knows the weight of this veneer that emanates from her aloof demeanor. An ebony goddess, she waits in obscurity ever ready to do the king's bidding. Trapped in this masquerade that is her life her heart bleeds with heavy, crimson tears. Yet she allows her emotions to slip into an opaque mist as she hypnotizes her master with seductive eyes. With each passing day, her despair increases her life of oppression brings a dark void of spirit making the idea of death a welcome relief. How can she find a way to suture her wounded soul? The gnawing, naked ugliness of her existence grips her as she feels the haunting conviction of self loathing. When will this pain end? Only God could save her now. Written on 5/29/2017

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Donna Roberts

Date: 11/6/2018 11:23:00 PM

Dripping with talent and wisdom

Laura Leiser
Date: 11/7/2018 11:09:00 AM

Thank you, Donna!

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 2/1/2018 2:26:00 AM

Good one. I have no first hand experience, but I know that you captured the topic very well...

Curtis Moorman

Date: 1/12/2018 12:22:00 PM

A masterpiece, Laura. Will be reading, and enjoying, more of your work.

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/13/2018 12:33:00 PM

Thank you very much, Curtis. I'm honored you enjoyed this

Debbie Duncan

Date: 6/21/2017 10:14:00 PM

Love this write :)

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/22/2017 6:14:00 PM

Thank you, Debbie. :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/6/2017 9:27:00 PM

An emotional write! Well done! Congrats, Laura!

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/7/2017 12:12:00 AM

Thanks, Kim. :)

Lu Loo

Date: 6/6/2017 9:20:00 PM

the title caught my eye RIGHT away. "Only she knows the weight of this veneer that emanates from her aloof demeanor."~~~ those first two lines dragged me in and sucked me right through with intensity. great poem! be blessed...thank you and congrats :)

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/6/2017 10:48:00 PM

Thank you, Laura Loo, for my placement in your contest! I'm glad you liked my interpretation of "deep and dark". :)

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 6/6/2017 9:27:00 AM

Very compelling poetry, Laura. Exquisite in detailing the emotional innerspace of a palace concubine. The painful introspection and conflict laid bare. A most beautiful work of poetry. A fabulous poem. Should score well in the contest, be a winner for sure. Love and joy always.

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/6/2017 4:26:00 PM

Thank, Freddie! I'm glad you liked this one. :)

Margaret Wade

Date: 6/2/2017 11:51:00 AM

So deep and dark and and sadly beautiful Enjoyed it so much. :) Maggi W

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/2/2017 1:12:00 PM

Thanks so much for your kind comments, Margaret! I'm glad you liked it :)

Honestly J.T.

Date: 5/30/2017 11:03:00 PM

I've enjoyed reading this poem. Good job -JT

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/30/2017 11:22:00 PM

Thank you, JT. I'm glad you liked it :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/29/2017 7:55:00 PM

Hi Laura, I really liked your take on the contest theme. A concubine's life is so terribly sad.You express that sadness so well in this well written write. This would be an easy seven. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/29/2017 10:13:00 PM

Thank you, Alexis. I appreciate your kind comments :)

White Wolf

Date: 5/28/2017 11:23:00 PM

Fits the description of the contest beautifully, Laura! A very well crafted piece!

Laura Leiser
Date: 5/29/2017 7:41:00 AM

Thanks, White Wolf. I appreciate your kind comments :)