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Contest Description

I want you to have a look at the lyrics below.  The song is creep by Radio head.  However, if you are going to find the song and have a listen, I would prefer you to listen to the two links I have provided, as I prefer those two covers.  That is the tone I want to set for your poem.  Deep and dark and full of emotion..

Think about the lyrics, what do they mean to you?  Think outside the box..

Any form is fine.. You can do lyric if you like, but not important.

Creep

Contest Judged:  11/30/2016 5:30:00 AM
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	Place	PoemTitle	Poet
	1	CREEP	Elaine George

Creep

Here...
In my garden
Upon the break of dawn
I see you there
And know  
That something's wrong

That look upon your face
I am sure
No amount of time
Will dare erase
As I peer into 
Those frozen crystal tears
Where my own reflection
Now appears...

How *****?

There you stand above 
Those thorns
Of bitterness
So sharp and green
With envy
Of your loveliness
Held within
The grip of winter's breath
A  scarlet Goddess
In the throws of death 

I look at you
And feel your pain
As your scarlet petals 
Wither  in the frozen rain
And fall like drops of blood upon
the snowy mantle white
The sacrifice you made
To know 
This thing called life

       ~~~

Where Others look at you
And see a rose
I look at you and see
What I suppose

    ~~~

Others look at me 
And see
  
A CREEP!

A WEIRDO!

Which causes me
To reflect
Upon myself
In deep repose  
And ask myself...


WHAT THE HELL
AM I DOING HERE
ANYHOW?



For:   Creep contest

 AWARDED: FIRST PLACE

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Sara Kendrick Date: 11/30/2020 4:13:00 AM Interesting work. I am not exactly sure about whom you are speaking. It would seem someone not invited is your garden but then not really sure? Thanks for dropping by my page. A guess it leaves me with questions. Sara Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/18/2018 7:40:00 PM Did this recently win another contest. I see a new congrats on it . Newer than the one I gave you some two years ago! I sure do wish you would write a lot more because you are so dang good. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 1/27/2018 9:39:00 AM Hi Andrea, No, I only entered it in one contest. Thanks for your support. These days I am spending all my spare time trying to complete two novels which I have been working on for a long time. My memoir, which is a series of short stories, one of which Is posted recently as a narrative, 'Through the Heart', here on poetry soup, and the other novel, completely fictional, 'Out of the Darkness'.

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 2/28/2017 1:46:00 AM Elaine, this is great. A real creep and meaningful read. Congratulations, Kai Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 2/28/2017 2:25:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Kai, and for your most appreciated comments. Elaine.

Eve Roper Date: 2/26/2017 6:20:00 PM I love the emotions and the imagery you applied to this piece great work. I see it was a winner in a contest well deserved... Thank you for reading my poem... Hugs Eve Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 2/28/2017 2:38:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Eve, and for your most appreciated comments. Elaine

Daver Austin Date: 1/18/2017 8:38:00 AM Love it. Your finish suggests a belief in eternal soul. Amazing to me that many do not believe in eternal soul. Love, daver Login to Reply

Francis J Grasso Date: 12/10/2016 7:36:00 AM Beautiful, Lainey. I love this one! A winner in any contest. Congratulations! ...Fran Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 12/10/2016 7:45:00 AM Thank you so much, Fran. Your comments are always much appreciated. Elaine

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/4/2016 4:15:00 PM My gosh, Elaine, you really went all out with this one. BIG congrats to you. It ended so differently from how it started and showed great creativity. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 12/10/2016 7:40:00 AM Thank you, Andrea.

Afolabi Muideen Date: 12/4/2016 2:39:00 PM Congratulations on your post my friend. You penned this so great and excellent. A deep written poem..........A.M. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 12/10/2016 7:32:00 AM Thank you for your very welcome, appreciated comments , Afolabi.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 12/4/2016 1:19:00 PM Congratulations Lainey. A very deserving placement. This is beautifully written! 7 ; ) Login to Reply

Sonia Walker Date: 12/2/2016 11:43:00 PM Elaine, congratulations on your win. All the best, Sonia. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 12/10/2016 7:25:00 AM Thank you so much, Sonia. Your comments are much appreciated. Elaine.

Wendy Rycroft Date: 12/1/2016 2:49:00 PM Well-done, Elaine congrats xxx Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 12/1/2016 4:15:00 PM Thank you so much, Wendy. Elaine

Alexis Y. Date: 12/1/2016 8:21:00 AM Hi Elaine, Congratulations on your win in the"Creep" contest. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 12/1/2016 4:16:00 PM Thank you so much, Alexis. Elaine

Carrie Richards Date: 11/30/2016 9:24:00 AM You always amaze me, Elaine! I love the metaphoric twist you gave this contest !!! Well done !! Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 12/1/2016 4:19:00 PM Thanks dear Carrie.

Scott Williams Date: 11/30/2016 8:54:00 AM Wow! Really cool Elaine. Very beautifully written. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Login to Reply

Balveen Cheema Date: 11/26/2016 5:09:00 AM Love your emphathy, Elaine! Good luck! Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/28/2016 9:26:00 AM Thank you for stopping by, Balveen, and for your comments. Elaine

Elaine George Date: 11/21/2016 1:54:00 PM Yes! I wrote it for the contest CREEP. Thanks for stopping by Richard. Elaine Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/19/2016 10:54:00 AM This brought to mind the song of the same name. Well expressed. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/21/2016 1:55:00 PM Yes! I wrote it for the contest CREEP. Thanks for stopping by Richard. Elaine

Joseph May Date: 11/19/2016 5:25:00 AM Beautifully penned Elaine...I especially liked the third stanza... Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/21/2016 1:51:00 PM Thank you so much, Joseph. Elaine

Francis J Grasso Date: 11/16/2016 12:42:00 AM I like it, Lainey! Beautiful write! ...Fran Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/18/2016 3:03:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Francis, and for your kind comments. Elaine

Beverly Read Date: 11/15/2016 2:07:00 PM I came back to this poem and read it more than once. Quite a punch, very descriptive. Beverly Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/18/2016 3:04:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Beverly, and for your kind comments. Elaine

Wendy Rycroft Date: 11/15/2016 12:18:00 PM Great poem well-done x Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/18/2016 3:04:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Wendy, and for your kind comments. Elaine

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 11/15/2016 11:15:00 AM Elaine, when this contest ends, I would end this beautiful poem just before A Creep. I know you needed to include that part for the contest but it takes away from the lovely serene connection between you and the rose. Just my observation. Outstanding! 7 ; ) Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/18/2016 3:06:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Connie, and for your kind comments. I might just do that. Elaine

Chris Green Date: 11/15/2016 10:58:00 AM Everyone sees things differently and that goes for people as well as flowers. It doesn't mean what they see is the absolute truth because they don't always view things with absolute truth, often it is based off of a preconceived idea that is anything but true. Loved you poem Lainey, this was very well written. The message is clear and hits hard. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/18/2016 3:06:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Chriss, and for your kind comments. Elaine

Ovidiu Bocsa Date: 11/15/2016 9:52:00 AM A mirror...You are so beautiful, today! I am ready to say no moment stay... Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 11/18/2016 3:07:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Ovidiu, and for your kind comments. Elaine