Elaine George Poet Personification

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Contest Description

I want you to have a look at the lyrics below.  The song is creep by Radio head.  However, if you are going to find the song and have a listen, I would prefer you to listen to the two links I have provided, as I prefer those two covers.  That is the tone I want to set for your poem.  Deep and dark and full of emotion..

Think about the lyrics, what do they mean to you?  Think outside the box..

Any form is fine.. You can do lyric if you like, but not important.

Creep

Contest Judged:  11/30/2016 5:30:00 AM
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	Place	PoemTitle	Poet
	1	CREEP	Elaine George

Creep

Here...
In my garden
Upon the break of dawn
I see you there
And know  
That something's wrong

That look upon your face
I am sure
No amount of time
Will dare erase
As I peer into 
Those frozen crystal tears
Where my own reflection
Now appears...

How *****?

There you stand above 
Those thorns
Of bitterness
So sharp and green
With envy
Of your loveliness
Held within
The grip of winter's breath
A  scarlet Goddess
In the throws of death 

I look at you
And feel your pain
As your scarlet petals 
Wither  in the frozen rain
And fall like drops of blood upon
the snowy mantle white
The sacrifice you made
To know 
This thing called life

       ~~~

Where Others look at you
And see a rose
I look at you and see
What I suppose

    ~~~

Others look at me 
And see
  
A CREEP!

A WEIRDO!

Which causes me
To reflect
Upon myself
In deep repose  
And ask myself...


WHAT THE HELL
AM I DOING HERE
ANYHOW?



For:   Creep contest

 AWARDED: FIRST PLACE

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Sara Kendrick November 30, 2020 at 4:13 AM Interesting work. I am not exactly sure about whom you are speaking. It would seem someone not invited is your garden but then not really sure? Thanks for dropping by my page. A guess it leaves me with questions. Sara

Andrea Dietrich January 18, 2018 at 7:40 PM Did this recently win another contest. I see a new congrats on it . Newer than the one I gave you some two years ago! I sure do wish you would write a lot more because you are so dang good. Elaine George January 27, 2018 at 9:39 AM Hi Andrea, No, I only entered it in one contest. Thanks for your support. These days I am spending all my spare time trying to complete two novels which I have been working on for a long time. My memoir, which is a series of short stories, one of which Is posted recently as a narrative, 'Through the Heart', here on poetry soup, and the other novel, completely fictional, 'Out of the Darkness'.

Kai Michael Neumann February 28, 2017 at 1:46 AM Elaine, this is great. A real creep and meaningful read. Congratulations, Kai Elaine George February 28, 2017 at 2:25 PM Thank you for stopping by, Kai, and for your most appreciated comments. Elaine.

Eve Roper February 26, 2017 at 6:20 PM I love the emotions and the imagery you applied to this piece great work. I see it was a winner in a contest well deserved... Thank you for reading my poem... Hugs Eve Elaine George February 28, 2017 at 2:38 PM Thank you for stopping by, Eve, and for your most appreciated comments. Elaine

Daver Austin January 18, 2017 at 8:38 AM Love it. Your finish suggests a belief in eternal soul. Amazing to me that many do not believe in eternal soul. Love, daver

Francis J Grasso December 10, 2016 at 7:36 AM Beautiful, Lainey. I love this one! A winner in any contest. Congratulations! ...Fran Elaine George December 10, 2016 at 7:45 AM Thank you so much, Fran. Your comments are always much appreciated. Elaine

Andrea Dietrich December 4, 2016 at 4:15 PM My gosh, Elaine, you really went all out with this one. BIG congrats to you. It ended so differently from how it started and showed great creativity. Elaine George December 10, 2016 at 7:40 AM Thank you, Andrea.

Afolabi Muideen December 4, 2016 at 2:39 PM Congratulations on your post my friend. You penned this so great and excellent. A deep written poem..........A.M. Elaine George December 10, 2016 at 7:32 AM Thank you for your very welcome, appreciated comments , Afolabi.

Connie Marcum Wong December 4, 2016 at 1:19 PM Congratulations Lainey. A very deserving placement. This is beautifully written! 7 ; )

Sonia Walker December 2, 2016 at 11:43 PM Elaine, congratulations on your win. All the best, Sonia. Elaine George December 10, 2016 at 7:25 AM Thank you so much, Sonia. Your comments are much appreciated. Elaine.

Wendy Rycroft December 1, 2016 at 2:49 PM Well-done, Elaine congrats xxx Elaine George December 1, 2016 at 4:15 PM Thank you so much, Wendy. Elaine

Alexis Y. December 1, 2016 at 8:21 AM Hi Elaine, Congratulations on your win in the"Creep" contest. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Elaine George December 1, 2016 at 4:16 PM Thank you so much, Alexis. Elaine

Carrie Richards November 30, 2016 at 9:24 AM You always amaze me, Elaine! I love the metaphoric twist you gave this contest !!! Well done !! Elaine George December 1, 2016 at 4:19 PM Thanks dear Carrie.

Scott Williams November 30, 2016 at 8:54 AM Wow! Really cool Elaine. Very beautifully written. Congratulations on your 1st place win.

Balveen Cheema November 26, 2016 at 5:09 AM Love your emphathy, Elaine! Good luck! Elaine George November 28, 2016 at 9:26 AM Thank you for stopping by, Balveen, and for your comments. Elaine

Elaine George November 21, 2016 at 1:54 PM Yes! I wrote it for the contest CREEP. Thanks for stopping by Richard. Elaine

Richard Lamoureux November 19, 2016 at 10:54 AM This brought to mind the song of the same name. Well expressed. Elaine George November 21, 2016 at 1:55 PM Yes! I wrote it for the contest CREEP. Thanks for stopping by Richard. Elaine

Joseph May November 19, 2016 at 5:25 AM Beautifully penned Elaine...I especially liked the third stanza... Elaine George November 21, 2016 at 1:51 PM Thank you so much, Joseph. Elaine

Francis J Grasso November 16, 2016 at 12:42 AM I like it, Lainey! Beautiful write! ...Fran Elaine George November 18, 2016 at 3:03 PM Thank you for stopping by, Francis, and for your kind comments. Elaine

Beverly Read November 15, 2016 at 2:07 PM I came back to this poem and read it more than once. Quite a punch, very descriptive. Beverly Elaine George November 18, 2016 at 3:04 PM Thank you for stopping by, Beverly, and for your kind comments. Elaine

Wendy Rycroft November 15, 2016 at 12:18 PM Great poem well-done x Elaine George November 18, 2016 at 3:04 PM Thank you for stopping by, Wendy, and for your kind comments. Elaine

Connie Marcum Wong November 15, 2016 at 11:15 AM Elaine, when this contest ends, I would end this beautiful poem just before A Creep. I know you needed to include that part for the contest but it takes away from the lovely serene connection between you and the rose. Just my observation. Outstanding! 7 ; ) Elaine George November 18, 2016 at 3:06 PM Thank you for stopping by, Connie, and for your kind comments. I might just do that. Elaine

Chris Green November 15, 2016 at 10:58 AM Everyone sees things differently and that goes for people as well as flowers. It doesn't mean what they see is the absolute truth because they don't always view things with absolute truth, often it is based off of a preconceived idea that is anything but true. Loved you poem Lainey, this was very well written. The message is clear and hits hard. Good luck in the contest. Elaine George November 18, 2016 at 3:06 PM Thank you for stopping by, Chriss, and for your kind comments. Elaine

Ovidiu Bocsa November 15, 2016 at 9:52 AM A mirror...You are so beautiful, today! I am ready to say no moment stay... Elaine George November 18, 2016 at 3:07 PM Thank you for stopping by, Ovidiu, and for your kind comments. Elaine