Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

Cradled In the Arms of Midnight

Aloft, the gem was mounted in black velvet skies
A refulgent pearl, surrounded by glistening stars
Cradled in the arms of midnight, it hung as a prize,
as exquisite as a painting, credited as one of Renoir's

Framed by arching branches of a leafless oak,
a sultry mist bowed before the majestic moon
She was partly veiled by clouds serving as a cloak
Her beauty serenaded by the somber song of a loon

Its tune a haunting trill, a funeral chant of death,
for Luna was wounded, splattered in crimson blood
like that spilled by Duncan in Act 5 of Macbeth,
or a rose pricked by its thorns, a hemorrhaging bud

A sudden stillness enshrouded the atmosphere
Swift currents of reticence flowed in a cryptic river
Pensively I gazed, transfixed on the moon in fear
Impressions of her demise gave me cause to shiver

Such nebulous notions clouded my brooding mind,
for the moon was merely blushing while in eclipse
As dusk darkens shadows of night's morrow, I'll find
a golden orb on high, without sign of an apocalypse



July 22, 2022
2022 Marathon Mile 9 Contest
Sponsor: Mark Toney

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Gary Radice July 29, 2022 at 3:26 PM I know you left PS some time back Lin but I'm glad it was just a temporary thing. Great writing and congratulations on your win in Mark's contest...and now I have to go and read act 5 of Macbeth :) Cheers - Gary Lin Lane August 3, 2022 at 3:38 PM Hi, Gary. Please forgive me for not replying sooner. I'm not often on the site, but I do want to thank you for your sweet comments. I'm late for the marathon party, but I'm having fun just taking part.

Anitha Jayasankar July 29, 2022 at 3:58 AM Excellent write Lin... Great many imageries throughout that with their dainty steps elegantly move and sway from one thought process to that of another of the poet's mind as she gazes the moon... Congratulations on your great win in the contest... Hugs... ~ Ani Lin Lane July 29, 2022 at 7:21 AM Your kind remarks serve as such encouragement to me, Anitha. Thank you.

Paula Goldsmith July 27, 2022 at 1:41 PM Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a write/story. Love your ending, "As dusk darkens shadows of night's morrow, I'll find a golden orb on high, without sign of an apocalypse." Hope you are OK. Have a great/blessed day writing away........ Lin Lane July 28, 2022 at 9:12 AM Thank you ever so much, Paula for liking this write. I'm fine and hope you are, too!

Mark Toney July 27, 2022 at 11:06 AM Lin, your poetry is exquisite, and your use of metaphors & similes is brilliant. First, you paint the beautiful scene ending with a "serenade by the somber song of a loon". Next, you change the serenade into a "funeral chant of death" signaling an apocalypse. Last, you explain it all. "The moon was merely blushing in eclipse." Brilliant! A fave for me. Congratulations on your podium finish on Mile 9 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 10 has already started! Lin Lane July 28, 2022 at 9:11 AM This poem took flight on its own, Mark. It was headed in a different direction, but somehow traversed into what has become one of my favorites. I'm delighted that you found a place for it on your mile 9 winning list. Thanks so much.

Susan Ashley July 27, 2022 at 9:59 AM Dear Lin, such dark dramatic beauty fills your brooding poem. I was transfixed by the moody tone that then rose to elation in the grand finale of your last line. I admire the potent artistry that flows through your pen capturing emotions in stunning metaphors with graceful ease; "Her beauty serenaded by the somber song of a loon" and "a rose pricked by its thorns, a hemorrhaging bud" - wow! Just a few examples of your poetic prowess and finesse. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest, I'm glad you're running the race! Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan Lin Lane July 28, 2022 at 9:09 AM I am always so encouraged by your fantastic comments, Susan, and appreciate certain lines or phrases you liked best. Thank you for acknowledging my poem in such a way that few like you can.

Darlene De Beaulieu November 7, 2018 at 8:54 PM Hello Lin, reading this poem made me feel like i was watching a scene from a movie. have a nice evening my friend. Lin Lane November 13, 2018 at 3:15 AM Thanks ever so much, Darlene.

Kim Rodrigues October 26, 2018 at 1:18 PM A fave, Line! Wonderful imagery! ...for the moon was merely blushing while in eclipse. Congrats on POTD! Lin Lane October 26, 2018 at 5:46 PM Much appreciated, Kim.

Joanna Daniel October 25, 2018 at 8:42 AM Beautiful and splendid, Lin:) good to read you again:) congratulations on your POTD:) Lin Lane October 26, 2018 at 5:43 PM Thank you dear Jo. Nice to have you visit.

John Hamilton October 24, 2018 at 11:04 AM Amazing write Lin, congrats on a worthy POTD! Lin Lane October 25, 2018 at 5:58 AM Thanks ever so much, John.

Ibohal Kshetrimayum October 24, 2018 at 4:53 AM Gorgeous Lin Lane October 25, 2018 at 5:58 AM Thank you.

Robert Lindley October 20, 2018 at 3:33 PM This my friend, awes in its depth, beauty and revelation of epic poetic talent.. Closing stanza is one of the best summations I ever read. As always your poetry shines in dazzling brilliance and soul of a true poet. A most well deserved POTD choice made.. A fav.. Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 5:04 PM Hi, dear Robert. It's great to read your encouraging words and inspirational critique. Your visits are warmly welcome. Thanks ever so much.

Anne-Lise Andresen October 20, 2018 at 2:58 PM - A wonderful poem, Lin :) - Congratulations so much on your well deserved p.o.t.d. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 5:01 PM I'm very happy to read your gracious comments. Thank you, Anne-Lise.

Mike Gentile October 20, 2018 at 2:30 PM This is just gorgeous Lin. A wonderfully crafted piece and a lovely selection for POTD.' Congratulations xxoo Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:46 PM Thank you most sincerely for your compliments, Mike.

M. L. Kiser October 20, 2018 at 2:11 PM Super poem! I love these lines: "As dusk darkens shadows of night's morrow, I'll find a golden orb on high, without sign of an apocalypse". Moon has inspired, uplifted, terrified and confused so many through the centuries; never second guess her. Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:46 PM How nice that you highlighted your favorite lines. That's appreciated by me, and thanks for the read and the comments you've left for me.

Quoth Theraven October 20, 2018 at 1:17 PM Mystical Macbeth, and lyrical,,,just like your name! Shakespeare would approve, I think. Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:44 PM Shakespeare is one of my favorites, and Macbeth came to mind with this one, so I hope he would approve. Thanks for the comments.

Connie Marcum Wong October 20, 2018 at 1:15 PM Yay Lin! This honor is so deserving! I am back to congratulate you. As you know I adored this poem and faved it! Wow, POTW now POTD! Congratulations my friend! I am very happy for you. : ) xxoo Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:43 PM lol Love your enthusiastic 'yay!' I always take pleasure in your wonderful comments, Connie. Thanks so very much for liking and faving this one.

Warren Doll October 20, 2018 at 9:53 AM Congratulations on POTD, Lin. So well written. A gem! Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:41 PM I appreciate your time and comments, Warren. Thanks!

Constance La France October 20, 2018 at 9:22 AM Lin, a big congratulations on POTD with this awesome writing, well done !! Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:41 PM And a big 'thank you' for the nice comments, Constance.

John Gondolf October 20, 2018 at 9:17 AM Exquisite poetry, Lin, and a beautiful tribute to the moon. Congrats for a well deserved POTD. John Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:40 PM The moon is deserving of tributes for the inspiration she gives to poets. She's a charmer that leaves us sighing with need. Thank you, John.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart October 20, 2018 at 7:53 AM Superb piece Lin! Congratulations on POTD :) xomo Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:38 PM Many thanks to you, Mo.

Vladislav Raven October 20, 2018 at 7:50 AM Hi Lin, wonderful poetry as always flows from your golden pen. Your creativity always sings. Dropping by with my congratulations on your poem of the day honour, Much deserved with this excellent piece. Have a wonderful weekend. Hugs....Mike. XX Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:37 PM Another visit from you is an honor, Mike. Thank you ever so much.

Charlie Smith October 20, 2018 at 7:34 AM You did not disappoint your fabulous title and ''twas certainly worthy of this honor, congratulations my dear... Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:37 PM Thank you so very much for your kind remarks, dear Charlie.

Joseph May October 20, 2018 at 7:14 AM So beautifully rendered Lin..A stellar write..Congrats on POTD.. Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 2:36 PM Thank you for your mention of "stellar," Joseph, as in the universe. I do so appreciate your for reading and leaving a lovely comment.

Winged Warrior October 20, 2018 at 4:46 AM Back to Congrats!!! my dear friend on your POTD!...even prouder! now...love & light...^WW^ Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 5:59 AM Merci de tout mon Coeur, my warrior in the North. I treasure your sweet comments.

Jan Allison October 20, 2018 at 4:44 AM Wow Lin many congrats on POTD and POTW too, you must be overjoyed my friend! Have an awesome weekend:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane October 20, 2018 at 5:58 AM I'm happy to know so many kind poets have left their encouraging remarks for both of my latest writes. Thanks ever so much, Jan.

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