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I dawn my black clericus hat, with silver buckle and matching coachman’s cape, onto the cold misty moor, once again with one of my favorite distractions; a black Raven called Silence. I tried, to teach him to speak but he will not utter a word; then again, he is very useful and sets, watching over my shoulder. I travel aways, in the dark silence and finally a light; a beacon drawing me closer, until a see a young damsel, by fire light of the parlour.
I ponder Lenore, as she reads all alone,
so cozy by the fire and stones
A few crumbs upon the window pane,
while Silence begins to eat.
I wonder will she say my name?
I have been here before and quickly move to the side door; with my pick, I open and slip inside. She is looking at silence, in the dark. Startling her to floor; I whisper my name in her ear; She sheds a tear and says, Nevermore. I calmly reply, indeed. I dawn my black clericus hat, with silver buckle and matching coachman’s cape, onto the cold misty moor once again, with one of my favorite distractions; a black Raven called Silence.

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Date: 12/10/2016 8:29:00 PM
Ah, I see more now, John - thanks for the explanation. I guess that along with the raven, some of the story just flew over my head. ; )
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/10/2016 10:17:00 PM
John, I think I lost my way in some of the contests, not realizing that the poem didn't have to be titled as the contest - which is true for some of them....
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John Beam
Date: 12/10/2016 8:29:00 PM
7) Thanks again and my advice on your titles, put just as much thought to them, as you did the body, in which I enjoyed reading but a title is the title.
Date: 12/10/2016 6:05:00 PM
John, right away I had to see just what a "clericus hat" is. Not sure - something to do with the Anglican church? Uncle Google wasn't much help at all. I thought about possible significance for the silver buckle, and got nowhere. No big deal - you set the scene pretty well. I would rate this in the middle. It's a good idea with some good things in it already, but could be more - needs some clarifications and expansion.
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John Beam
Date: 12/10/2016 8:21:00 PM
6) The past lover idea was and intentional distraction or not. I was trying, to get you imagination take you, where you wanted it to go.
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John Beam
Date: 12/10/2016 8:17:00 PM
5) The Raven/jack the ripper thriller poem. I was trying to stay away from the "Poelish" style of The Raven with just hints. Silence never speaks in my poem you got that from the Raven.The unhappy master uses Silence as a distraction feeding bread crumbs on the window seal to lure them to the windows away from doors. The crumbs are reminiscent of Hansel and Gretel
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John Beam
Date: 12/10/2016 8:02:00 PM
4) In my mind, I was trying to show a connection with the death of Lenore and the Narrator of the Raven, the Raven and this new Character the unhappy master. Who is actually a serial killer and Silence/Raven is a would be hero.
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John Beam
Date: 12/10/2016 7:54:00 PM
Before I go on, thank you very much.
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John Beam
Date: 12/10/2016 7:50:00 PM
3) You picked upon the clues but maybe I need to clarify and expands some where. Silence is the raven in Poe's Raven. He does not speak to my narrator/character, The unhappy or cruel master but he does to those that Silence is trying to warn. So Poe's narrator received the wrong message.
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John Beam
Date: 12/10/2016 7:40:00 PM
2) Clericus hat by Loyd's of London, just to add mystery and sense of time A very contemplative, sedate, pious-looking Hat, much worn by Police-Officers, Quack-Doctors, and Clergymen; this, it may be said, is a strange assemblage of characters to bring under one head,
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John Beam
Date: 12/10/2016 7:33:00 PM
1) Idea was based on the Raven and all the speculations, of what happened to the narrator, at the end of the Raven.(The narrator reasons that the bird learned the word "Nevermore" from some "unhappy master" and that it is the only word it knows.)
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/10/2016 6:10:00 PM
2.) A young woman (girl?) is visited by our narrator, who is apparently the shade of somebody with whom she had a relationship, somebody who knows the house. He brings his buddy, a silent crow, along with him. The narrator whispers his name (though he is never identified as necessarily male) in the woman's/girl's ear. She says, "Nevermore," and the narrator replies to her, "Indeed."
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/10/2016 6:09:00 PM
3.) The narrator leaves with the crow. Analysis: I read the tale through a few times, because some things are confusing or at least not clearly delineated. The crow will not utter a word, but the comment after the poem says it knows the one word, "Nevermore." The crow is "very useful" - okay, why is this? "A few crumbs upon the window pane, while silence begins to eat" = Nice.
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/10/2016 6:08:00 PM
4.) I like the idea of silence eating into something. Surely, and for the sake of the story, there is more to it than that - I couldn't figure out what the crumbs symbolize, if anything. The narrator sleeps, what does this mean, and why say that? "Startling her to floor" - this was confusing to me. I first thought of the bird being scared off a perch, going down to the floor, but the bird is male.
Date: 11/29/2016 7:21:00 PM
A tribute to Poe based on the raven The narrator reasons that the bird learned the word "Nevermore" from some "unhappy master" and that it is the only word it knows.
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