Premiere Contest WinnerCoconuts Trophy Win

The pink sand makes my soft bed,
a cool breeze covers me like a blanket.
The palm trees are swaying,
swaying to the sound of the blue waves.
As I lay here daydreaming,
I find shapes in the clouds.
I see a coconut with a tall straw,
a cooling coconut drink.
 
I awake to a loud thud,
coconuts are everywhere.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Volumes Avatar
October 23, 2023 at 10:17 AM
Loved your "coconuts" Paula. Congrats
Goldsmith Avatar
October 23, 2023 at 12:30 PM
Thank You for your note and for your congratulations. Glad you love my fun "Coconuts" write. I enjoyed writing it. Have a great/fun day..................
Porto Avatar
October 22, 2023 at 2:37 PM
I want to thank you for reading, enjoying and commenting on my writing I love when I hear that people enjoy my writing. I also read quite a few of yours and I enjoyed reading yours. I am looking forward to reading more in the near future. Please look for more to come from me also, I am always writing something just not always posting them right away. My book has a lot that I have not posted perhaps I will begin to add them soon or just what I have been recently inspired to write.
Goldsmith Avatar
October 23, 2023 at 9:41 AM
Thank You for your note. Glad you are enjoying my fun "Coconuts" write. Have a great/fun day..................
Barry-Nishanian Avatar
October 21, 2023 at 4:07 PM
Whimsical and so perfect for your trophy win. Grab that coconut with a straw and celebrate!
Goldsmith Avatar
October 23, 2023 at 9:40 AM
Thank You for your note and for your congratulations. Glad you found my fun "Coconuts" write to be whimsical. This Trophy is a Dream Come True... Have a great/fun day..................
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
October 21, 2023 at 9:37 AM
"They put milk in the coconut and mix it all up...", it's a great drink and Free Verse you've written, Paula! My compliments on your trophy win, my friend! Aloha, William
Goldsmith Avatar
October 23, 2023 at 9:37 AM
Thank You for your note and for your congratulations.  Glad you are enjoying my fun "Coconuts" write. Your drink sounds heavenly. This Trophy is a Dream Come True... Have a great/fun day..................
Andresen Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 10:33 AM
- Congratulations on your trophy win in the contest, Paula :) - So happy for you :) - (I did not participate in this contest) - hugs
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 12:02 PM
Thank You for your note and for your congratulations. It is always good to see you here. Glad you are enjoying my fun "Coconuts" write again. This Trophy is a Dream Come True... Sorry you missed out on this one. Hugs.... Have a great/fun day..................
Ashley Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 9:44 AM
Dear Paula, I adore your charming personification of this wonderful coconut. Whimsical and beautiful imagery. Your poetic artistry shines my friend! Congratulations for your excellent trophy win with this fun and fabulous poem. Warmest wishes my sweet friend.. ~Susan
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 12:00 PM
Thank You for your note, kind words, and for your congratulations. I am glad you enjoyed my fun/whimsical "Coconuts" write. This Trophy is a Dream Come True... Have a great/fun day..................
Rodrigues Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 4:03 AM
Congratulations on your win!
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:54 AM
Thank You for your note and for your congratulations. Glad you like my fun "Coconuts" write. Have a great/fun day.................
Agustin Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 12:31 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
Jones Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 9:16 PM
Back to say congrats on your 1st place win!!!
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:52 AM
Thank You for your note and for your congratulations. It is always good to see you here. Glad you like my fun "Coconuts" write. Have a great/fun day.................
Bangalee Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 9:10 PM
just great write; superb poetic expression on coconuts; enjoyed fully
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:50 AM
Thanks for your note. Glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write. I enjoyed writing. Have a great/fun day..................
George Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 8:57 PM
Wow.... I feel so happy for you.... dear Paula. Back to your sweet poem to congratulate you on your trophy win.
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:48 AM
Thank You for your note and for your congratulations. It is always good to see you here. Glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write again. It was fun to write. This Trophy is a Dream Come True... Have a great/fun day..................
Sambourne Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 6:29 PM
Congratulations, Paula, on a most creative write that is a small but perfect image of coconut paradise. Be well. Sincerest regards, Brian
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:44 AM
Thanks for your note and for your congratulations. Glad you found my fun "Coconuts" write to be creative. I wish I was on that coconut paradise beach. Have a great/fun day..................
Gasun Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 4:58 PM
Coming back to enjoy again this superb poem of yours my dearest friend and to Congratulate you on your well-deserved trophy win! Many hugs. Blessings to you always and your writings.
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:40 AM
Thank You for your note, trophy and for your congratulations. It is always good to see you here. Glad you are enjoying my fun "Coconuts" write again. It was fun to write. Have a great/fun day..................
Ray Choudhury Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 3:34 PM
Congratulations on your trophy win, Paula. A stunning poem! Love ~ Mala
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:37 AM
Thank You for your note, trophy and for your congratulations. Glad you found my fun "Coconuts" write to be stunning. It was fun to write. Have a great/fun day..................
Mcintosh Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 12:30 PM
Congrats on your win, sweet lady. God bless you, love, Gina
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:33 AM
Thanks for your note and for your congratulations. Glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write. Have a great/fun day..................
Fowler Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 12:20 PM
Love this great coconut dream dear Paula. Congratulations! :)
Goldsmith Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:32 AM
Thanks for your note and for your congratulations. Glad you love my "Coconuts" dream/write. Have a great/fun day..................
Liguori Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 11:09 AM
I love the imagery in your poem. I’m so pleased to be able to award you the trophy. Keep up the excellent writing!
Goldsmith Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 11:27 AM
Thank You for your note, trophy, kind words, and for your congratulations. You have filled my day with happiness. I am glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write. Thanks for having your fun coconut contest. This Trophy is a Dream Come True... Have a great/fun day..................
Poet Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 10:58 AM
Paula, hearty congratulations on your trophy contest win, very well deserved with your lovely poem
Goldsmith Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 11:05 AM
Thanks for your note and for your congratulations. Glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write. I love coconuts so it was fun to write about them. I would love to be on a beach writing away. Dreams Can Come True??? Have a great/fun day..................
Goldsmith Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 10:22 AM
"1 Place ~ Trophy" Coconuts~Date Written: 10/9/2023
Empress Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 9:59 AM
A very well crafted poetic take on coconuts! Congratulations on your trophy win! Well deserved so happy for you
Goldsmith Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 10:17 AM
Thanks for your note, kind words and for your congratulations. This has made me very happy. Glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write. I enjoyed writing it. Sure wish I was on a pink sand beach with a cooling coconut drink. For now, I will dream. Have a great/fun day..................
Kingston Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 8:22 PM
"Coconut" What a fun word to say! This poem made me smile & thirsty. It's fun to see pictures in the clouds. Cumulus clouds hide so many things, don't they? Your last 6 lines are my favorite. Your cool coconut drink with a fun straw sounds so refreshing. Maybe you'll see a blueberry lemonade next. I'll look for one. sip, sip..
Goldsmith Avatar
October 18, 2023 at 10:12 AM
Thanks for your note. Glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write. I would love a coconut drink on the beach. Guess I can dream about it. Never know, maybe blueberry/lemonade will be next.  "Smile" Have a great/fun day..................
Radhakrishna Avatar
October 14, 2023 at 7:13 PM
Nice descriptive poem, Paula! I have been on such a beach!
Goldsmith Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 9:34 AM
Thanks for your note. Glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write. I wish I was on a beach. Guess I will just dream. Have a great/fun day..................
Gasun Avatar
October 14, 2023 at 8:20 AM
A beautiful image and scene from your golden pen my dear friend Paula. I love it a lot and the surprising twist at the end. Thank you so much for sharing.Best wishes in the contest my dearest poet friend. Btw, it happened that I've also written a coco poem a while ago. If you've time, please go and read it. Thank you so much again. I'll be back to read more from you tomorrow. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
Goldsmith Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 9:32 AM
Thanks for your note and for your best wishes. Glad you enjoyed my fun "Coconuts" write. I will check out your coconut write. Hugs... Have a great/fun day.................
Babcock Avatar
October 13, 2023 at 12:54 PM
Wish I was on that beach with coconuts around me as autumn is turning colder. Nice one. love phyl
Goldsmith Avatar
October 13, 2023 at 2:03 PM
Thanks for your note. Glad you enjoyed my fun write. I welcome in autumn with cooler weather. The beach would be a great place to be. I can dream about it. Have a great/fun weekend..................
Kauffman Avatar
October 13, 2023 at 11:43 AM
Very sensory, Paula with a delightful, humorous twist to wake us up in your final lines. :D Best wishes for the contest! Blessings of autumn joy to you!
Goldsmith Avatar
October 13, 2023 at 2:00 PM
Thanks for your note and for your best wishes. Glad you like my delightful/humorous "Coconuts" write. I wish I was on that beach with a coconut drink in hand. Autumn joy to you... Have a great/fun weekend..................
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