Click Clack

Tiny morning star shining against gray
Just above the eastern horizon's dawn
A dawn of dull lavender not party gay
And constant click-clack of sprinkler on the lawn

Cool, dry air penetrates every muscle
Chilling thoughts within my brain's deepest ruts
No animal stirs with a faint rustle
Quiet from the haute zone and lowest hut

War rages on in distant foreign lands
Young men and women die once again
Children blasted while rich eat haute meals grand
And men speak of what they want to gain

Click-clack around the sprinkler goes and goes
Where all will end no on really knows

Finis'
Wednesday, July 30, 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/6/2014 10:29:00 PM
SARA,, Congrats, on your win.... LINDA
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Date: 8/4/2014 10:54:00 PM
Yeh enjoyed this one too, well done Sara
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Date: 8/4/2014 3:07:00 PM
Enjoyed this click clack very much, grats on your win ;)
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Date: 8/2/2014 10:08:00 AM
Love this..so rich with imagery...simplicity reacting to complexity...congrats Tim
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Date: 8/2/2014 4:54:00 AM
This is a beautiful and deep-searching sonnet, Sara. Love the sprinkler's sound that echoes that of war. Congrats on originality of take and lovely win. // paul
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Date: 8/2/2014 1:58:00 AM
wow, the contrast here really gets your message across. A very intelligent poem with great images,dear. Congrats.
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Date: 8/2/2014 1:14:00 AM
Very different take,, love the click clack that i wonder will ever end Sara ? congrats on win!
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Date: 8/1/2014 7:07:00 PM
Glad you finished it, Sara. Yes, where will it all end, but that sprinkler keeps going round on it's destructive path. I liked it, my friend.... Robert.
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Date: 8/1/2014 7:01:00 PM
The background of click clack of sprinkler is unique and interesting. Very well written Sara. Love, Joyce
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Date: 8/1/2014 5:56:00 PM
Sara, a top rate write. I loved how you took such a simple gadget as the lawn sprinkler and placed the heartaches of the world on its arms. Congratulations.
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Date: 8/1/2014 5:31:00 PM
There is so much encapsulated in this wonderful poem........in just the click of a clock, so much is happening.... you are so gifted!
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Date: 8/1/2014 5:30:00 PM
your poems have a strange effect on me, in that the more I read them, the more they grow on me! so they have a way of gradually inching further and further up the winners' list with each reading! I loved "a dawn of dull lavender"...this poem deals with a serious subject in a unique way, lots to think about...congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 7/30/2014 8:39:00 AM
Finish it already
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Date: 7/30/2014 8:33:00 AM
Pick up your pen and finish it Sara the imagery is beautiful:-) Hugs jan xxx
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Date: 7/30/2014 9:59:00 AM
I'm so pleased you finished it Sara. Love the imagery. Also the contrast of the war against the tranquility of the water sprinkler but the click clack could also refer to the noise of the bullets. Hugs jan xxxx
Date: 7/30/2014 8:29:00 AM
Very nice picture, Sara. Clearly there is more and I wonder if you have left it up to the reader to finish. Different and interesting, my friend..... Robert.
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Date: 7/30/2014 6:22:00 AM
Hi Sara...FINISH IT! :) You have such a way to describe nature...really..one can feel the approaching dawn. Lovely. Hugs
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