Cleo and Me and You

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It was me, Cleo and you.
Occasionally hugging, occasionally kissing.
Along the promenade we walked, 
Enjoying the light breeze from the sea,
As the crimson sun began its silent descent. 
Arm in arm all three, elated, we approached 
The ancient tavern at the end of the stroll. 
People watched, and people wondered.
They formed their judgement as was their wont.
We cared not.

We found a cosy corner in the tavern,
Me, Cleo and you.
Strange but we all liked the same food.
So accordingly, we placed our orders.
Music wafted in the room,
Pleasant as soft dancing music should be.
People watched, and people wondered.
They formed their judgement as was their wont.
We cared not.

As night was lit by flashy all aglow neon signs,
We betook ourselves to our favourite disco,
Where music was varied and enchanting.
All three of us danced together,
It was a natural thing to do.
People watched, and people wondered.
They formed their judgement as was their wont.
We cared not.

Then a friend approached and gently asked
“May I borrow your sister?”
Cleo smiled and departed willingly
As all four of us whirled and swung merrily.
I held my love tight and kissed her sweet lips.
People watched, and people wondered.
And all lost any further interest.
We cared not.

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10 August 2021

'Your Favorite August 2021 Poem-' Contest Info
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 9/2/2021 2:35:00 PM
Victor, wonderful and congratulations on your win in my contest ~ peace and tranquility _ Constance
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Date: 8/15/2021 8:36:00 AM
LOL! I knew there would be a twist! Love it! Your refrain was fun ;)
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Date: 8/12/2021 8:12:00 PM
wow, this is SO clever. I thought for sure it was a threesome!! And not the sisterly kind. It reminded me of this old movie called Summer Lovers. The actor in it was so cute, and he had two ladies and they shared him!~!
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Date: 8/10/2021 1:07:00 PM
Masterful write. Outstanding. Bravo.
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Date: 8/10/2021 11:47:00 AM
Your poetic tale of family, love, dancing and fun is charming and enjoyable, Victor. Well done! :)
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Date: 8/10/2021 9:36:00 AM
Victor, you've written a wonderful poem, about a lovely night, with a pleasant surprise at the conclusion. The poem's repeated lines helped to bring it to a satisfactory ending. Blessings and kindest thoughts
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Date: 8/10/2021 9:00:00 AM
People are jealous, but good to have a great relationship with a siblings. Great write . Hugs Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/10/2021 8:05:00 AM
Folks are quick to misjudge the situation, love the twist at the end. Tom
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Date: 8/10/2021 6:06:00 AM
- the end ... so sweet, Victor ... lovely written :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/10/2021 5:42:00 AM
You know how to spin a story brilliantly, Victor--holding my attention from start to finish. Most people can relate to the essence of your write.
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Date: 8/10/2021 3:41:00 AM
Oh, how I remember my days of dancing to that rhythmic disco music. People place judgement on others even though they know nothing what's going on. Just this past week I danced with my sister and two other woman at the same time at a HS Re-union. (lol) Okay, one was my girlfriend and the other was her best friend...but still, I got looks. Great write, Victor. Hope all is well my friend. Charlie
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 8/10/2021 3:50:00 AM
Not much, but then I'm old.
Date: 8/10/2021 2:30:00 AM
A lovely write Victor of a lovely night that came to a beautiful ending… Belle
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Date: 8/10/2021 2:03:00 AM
This poem is rounded off so well with the repeating lines and the twist that comes at the end...Delice
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Date: 8/10/2021 1:46:00 AM
love the twist at the end, this is delightful Victor:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/10/2021 1:38:00 AM
Great surprise in the end, loved the use of repeating lines, Victor:)
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