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Christmas Windows - Tanka

supermarket bells their strange clangor in the cold the red-faced ringer feet stamping one the other while coins hit brittle like ice

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/8/2016 6:17:00 PM

LOVING this one again. I came all the way back to the beginning and one of first times I read your Xmas poetry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2010 8:20:00 AM

EXCELLENT TANKA! Hmm, looks like you have SEVERAL more windows poems!

Amy Swanson

Date: 12/26/2008 10:34:00 AM

I thought you captured this perfectly! Gives the sensation of hearing them ring their bells, out shopping in the cold, great imagery. Just wanted to say thanks so much for your congrats. God bless and hope you had a nice holiday! :) Amy P.S. Hope your kitty cats got a nice gift this year (and didn't leave any undesired ones!) hehe ;) Our cat tried to climb the tree and broke an ornament! LOL >^..^<

Michael Jordan

Date: 12/21/2008 2:47:00 PM

Daver - Merry Christmas - Great poem - God Bless, MJ

Jim Wilson

Date: 12/20/2008 5:47:00 PM

I like the way the last two lines break up, it communicates nicely the feeling of someone ringing a bell in the cold.

Carrie Richards

Date: 12/20/2008 5:34:00 PM

They are at every door....and yes...they are stamping feet in tune with the jingle! Bless them! ~ Lovely, and so well describes another scene of Christmas! Happy Holidays, Daver! ~ Love, Carrie

Sharon Winter

Date: 12/20/2008 3:41:00 PM

A sight and sound all part of the Christmas spirit. Such kind souls standing out in the cold for the cause of others. More Christmas windows I so enjoy looking through. Love, Shar

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 12/20/2008 11:28:00 AM

Awesome Daver! The last 2 lines really drive it home. amazing write, moremoremore! Love, Kristin as for my write, yes, two minds...

Date: 12/20/2008 10:58:00 AM

There can be more than one interpretation of this poem--an asset giving the reader pause and wanting to read it again. The vivid imagery conveys your thoughts in a creative way. Have a wonderful Christmas! Karen

Elaine George

Date: 12/20/2008 7:47:00 AM

Their dedication to help others in amazing. Standing for hours - freezing so a homeless person can be warm. And so this is Christmas. Sensational writing, Daver. Love Lainie

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 12/20/2008 6:29:00 AM

Lovely imagery and word choices... neat alliteration and atmosphere. Well done Daver! Best wishes, Keith

Christopher Higgins

Date: 12/20/2008 6:28:00 AM

You captured this wonderfully Daver. I can see it all unfolding.