Andrea Dietrich Poet Rhyme

Christmas Mourning

Her loved tree trembled; red drops spilled
that Christmas morning she was killed.
The daughter they would not see grow
left crimson blossoms on the snow.

What horror that their girl could be
slain senselessly beneath that tree
where every spring she loved to go
and blossoms fell, but not on snow.

The tree of which she’d grown so fond
dropped pearl white petals on a pond.
They mourn and think of long ago
before red blossoms fell on snow!

Her loved tree trembled; red drops spilled
like cherry blossoms on the snow.

Nov. 27, 2018
For the "Christmas Mourning" Poetry Contest of  P.S. AWTRY

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Edward Ibeh December 14, 2018 at 8:53 PM Magnificent poem, Andrea!:-) It flows like a peaceful river.

Carolyn Devonshire December 14, 2018 at 11:54 AM Just stopping back with congratulations on your win in Brian's contest, Andrea. Hugs, carolyn

Dale Gregory Cozart December 14, 2018 at 10:19 AM This is beautiful, Andrea. I can see why you won.

Kim Rodrigues December 4, 2018 at 9:34 PM Back for congratulations, dear Andrea!

Sandra Haight December 4, 2018 at 7:31 PM Such sad, heart-wrenching imagery in your well-written poem, Andrea. I too am relieved that it is fiction. Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison December 4, 2018 at 2:57 PM so glad to read its fiction Andrea, I struggled at the weekend as it was the 4th anniversary of jacques and Torin's deaths and their parents had a fundraiser and I read one of my poems . Congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Wendy Watson December 4, 2018 at 2:04 AM Andrea, the theme of the loss of a child has filled my mind this morning, reading through the winners list in this contest. You have expressed albeit such a sad scenario in a beautiful way.

Curtis Moorman December 4, 2018 at 1:51 AM Andrea, you know my heart as well as anyone on Soup. Our friendship over the years has been a Blessing to me. You have penned a very sad account in your poem. But, as always, beautifully written. Congratulations on your well deserved win.

Janice Canerdy December 3, 2018 at 11:53 PM CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice

P.S. Awtry December 3, 2018 at 11:31 PM Andrea, this is an amazing poem. Thank you for entering it in the contest. Congratulations on your well deserved honors.

Jennifer Proxenos November 29, 2018 at 12:10 PM Wow Andrea, What a powerful Poem! Such an awesome but desperately sad write. It brought a tear to my eye but enjoyed it tremendously Well done! xoxo Jennifer.

Jack Horne November 29, 2018 at 9:21 AM beautiful poem for the contest - a sure winner

Therese Bacha November 29, 2018 at 5:52 AM Hi Andrea, i missed being on poetry soup, we had a beautiful friendship, which is not lost. This poem as usual is so well written, the title and poem is sad, especially on Christmas to loose a child. You are amazing. I pray you are doing very good, our strong lady. Love Terry xoxo

Harry Horsman November 28, 2018 at 10:53 AM Wow, this is so heartfelt, so tragic. but a winner i'm sure, in the contest.

Constance La France November 28, 2018 at 9:48 AM Andrea, your poem is so emotional and beautifully penned for the contest, best of luck, and thanks for the compliment on my writing, yes indeed, my MUSE is on fire ~

Sara Kendrick November 28, 2018 at 6:30 AM Reads like a good contender. Sad that something like this could happen. Very descriptive and expressive work. Thanks for dropping by. Sara

Mystic Rose Rose November 28, 2018 at 5:10 AM This is so sad, it makes my heart weep, A well written poem of sorrow and loss Andrea, Good luck in the contest,

Arthur Vaso November 28, 2018 at 3:18 AM Well written I was almost afraid to read as I know I was gonna be sad!!! :)

Caren Krutsinger November 27, 2018 at 10:44 PM I had read this prior, but could not yet comment. Was not ready. Now that I see it is made up, I can. Nicely done, Andrea. The color red brought in imagery like no other word could have possibly done. Good luck in the contest, my friend.

Kim Rodrigues November 27, 2018 at 9:12 PM A sad one! Color used to emphasize innocence and horror. Nice one...sad one

Chris Green November 27, 2018 at 4:11 PM Such a sad but beautifully written poem Andrea. Not sure if this was fiction or fact but it read like I was standing there watching it all. Wow, this was powerful my friend. Best of luck in the contest Andrea Dietrich November 27, 2018 at 5:47 PM thanks, Chris. Though fictional, I am sure it has happened to some family somewhere in this world

Vijay Pandit November 27, 2018 at 3:24 PM Life events shake the foundation unannounced..you described one such that shook a family. ..sad anytime, but especially devastating during Christmas. Best for a win, Andrea.

Carolyn Devonshire November 27, 2018 at 3:12 PM Such a vivid memory you describe, Andrea. How sad it must have been for those who knew this girl. I know you lost a loved one in an accident, but perhaps this was a girl you knew. But for the last lines, it read like a sonnet. Beautiful rhyme! Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn XX Andrea Dietrich November 27, 2018 at 5:48 PM It's a sonnet kyrielle. Thanks, Carolyn, and this is made up.