Premiere Contest WinnerChristmas Mourning

I question Adam’s hymn, O’ Holy Night,
while I retreat upstairs on Christmas Eve
comparing his to mine to fill the night:

His was a quill that spilled of quelling leaves,
of grace contrived to save the petty thieves
once hung from twigs composed of disbelief
condemned to hell for causing others grief.
His notes were angels on a snowy plain.
His words were lowing, pure, and eloquent.
His song, when sung, reminds of cleansing rain;
a prayer of praise for God’s embodiment:
For unto us, a Son, the Father sent,
whose death would cleanse the hearts of guilty men
whose path through life was one composed of sin.

And now I question:  What’s defined as sin?
Is it to squeeze a heart that’s mostly innocent
and quell the rhythmic joy that beats within?
To steal my child, so pure and eloquent
and lock away my love’s embodiment?
A midnight hurr’cane sent to swell my pain
that leads to mourning Christmas once again?
Mine’s not a song it’s a SCREAM drenched in grief! 
Where is MY daughter, god?  Why did she leave?
My knees won’t budge for no more than a thief
who threatens damnation unless we believe!

But, there’s a     calmness      felt on Christmas Eve.
And when I’m back downstairs, it’s by His light
I pen this poem that I need to write.

Date:  11/24/2018
Contest:  CHRISTMAS MOURNING
Sponsor:  PS Awtry
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Hamilton Avatar
December 25, 2018 at 11:22 AM
This is soo good Phillip, congrats on another deserved win, little consolation considering...subject matter.
Garcia Avatar
December 25, 2018 at 4:29 PM
Eh, it's fictional which i think makes it a comedy by Shakespearean standards. :) Thanks John!
Rodrigues Avatar
December 4, 2018 at 9:42 PM
Congrats on your first place win, Phillip! Great emotion shown with questions and anger and in the end filled with calmness and light.
Haight Avatar
December 4, 2018 at 7:34 PM
So touching, inspirational, and well-written, Phillip. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win. Sandra
Allison Avatar
December 4, 2018 at 2:51 PM
such a touching poem Phillip - hope you get to see your little ones my friend:-) hugs Jan xx
Watson Avatar
December 4, 2018 at 1:53 AM
Philip, We readers never know when we are reading fiction or heart felt experience but this poem would move anyone who has ever known the pain of losing someone they love, especially at a tender age or even the thought of it happening. Thank you.
Barden Avatar
December 4, 2018 at 1:14 AM
This is absolutely gorgeous, Phillip, and the well-deserved trophy poem! Sincere congratulations for your win ... this touched my heart with its poignant message and exquisite phrasing, and your faith is presented in a very sweet, humble way. Superb, and going into my favorites!
Roper Avatar
December 3, 2018 at 11:34 PM
Marvelous write , Philip, I enjoyed reading your beautiful great inspirational write . Congratulations on your win.
Awtry Avatar
December 3, 2018 at 11:15 PM
Thank you so much for writing this beautiful poem. And for entering it in to this contest. Congratulations on your trophy win.
Warrior Avatar
November 27, 2018 at 1:41 PM
Excellent write my friend...ready for a win...love & light...^WW^
Horn Avatar
November 24, 2018 at 9:04 PM
If surfer should catch some ocean spray, Even though hair has been turning gray; More mature, Know for sure; Hope to soon go to heaven to God pray.
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