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choosing what to do next

this way of feeling scattered from a glance I am the edge ~ cornered speaking eyes express disappointment all motivation drains I will lay here to forget myself ungathered, not part of the troops switched off

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Craig Cornish

Date: 12/16/2023 12:00:00 PM

No sale here - you're never switched off! Who wants to be part of "the troops", screw that, poetry is a solo sail, where you wave at the other sloops and say "Great day!" While setting your spinnaker and leave them wishing for air...while waving and smiling somewhat insincerely, knowing that you're not "on the edge", but have it! You incited thought - the purpose...

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/17/2023 6:40:00 AM

Lol - A toast to good writing! - Beats the heck out of "Now listen you jerks, I'm tired of your STUPID comments!" snicker

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/17/2023 5:00:00 AM

Haha perhaps my reply hinted I'd been consuming beverages containing alcohol... True :)

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/16/2023 7:07:00 PM

Sleep tight 8-)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/16/2023 3:16:00 PM

And is that why I love you? Yes, yes it is :)

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/15/2023 5:37:00 PM

Beautiful, intricate poem of isolation. Periods of singularity can be healing.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/17/2023 5:01:00 AM

Thank you Hilda, I write very much in the moment and in that particular moment I was ever so slightly in a mood :)

Mat Ignacio

Date: 12/15/2023 3:10:00 PM

angular and off-balance, i like the way this poetically hits

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/17/2023 5:02:00 AM

Thanks Mat, I love to write as emotions hit and feel how I try and counter them. It's like bottling a feeling. Thanks for your kind words

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/15/2023 2:22:00 PM

I sometimes feel the say way...switched off, scattered, and edgy. Well said! This poem resonated with me. Wishing you a pleasant evening, hugs, Sara

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/17/2023 5:03:00 AM

Thank you Sara, luckily these moods pass as quick as they arrive mostly. I appreciate your comment x