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Choking On Smoke

I am surprised you are so ambivalent 
For me I wish to be familiar with the arcane
Knowledge can indeed be bittersweet
Let me taste of these luscious notations
Lines scribed inspired by our intercessor 

It is not necessary to be quiescent 
So I choose to be a flamboyant protestor 
You sit there and silently witness my immolation 
Tactile threads of my thoughts reduced to ashes
I fear you will choke as you inhale my quintessence

For John Hamilton's ten word Challenge.

To add a bit of difficulty I limited myself to ten lines and used the words in the same order they were provided.

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Tania Horne

Date: 12/31/2017 7:30:00 PM

Wow!

David Scott

Date: 1/26/2017 11:48:00 AM

like the pattern simler to one I wrote few years back called smoker jack though I quite for while started again bad I know nice write davidscott

Paul Callus

Date: 12/5/2016 9:31:00 AM

Inserting those 10 words was hard and tricky enough, Richard (I shy away from such challenges), but you tackled it with gusto! // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/2/2016 5:06:00 PM

Was sure I commented, loved this one, If you didn't tell me you had you use those 10 words I wouldn't have guessed, poem flows so well! :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/2/2016 5:33:00 PM

Thanks Arthur. ;0)

Eve Roper

Date: 11/27/2016 8:54:00 PM

Richard, back to congratulate you on your win ! :) Hugs Eve

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/2/2016 5:31:00 PM

Thanks Ev.

Constance La France

Date: 11/26/2016 1:56:00 PM

Richard nicely done and congratulations on your win in the contest

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2016 9:55:00 AM

Thanks Constance.;)

John Hamilton

Date: 11/25/2016 1:41:00 PM

I had to laugh when I saw the note at the end, only you Richard would want to make this more difficult. Unfortunately 10 lines was a little long for a top 3 this time, but a fine placement after all! Great job!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2016 9:57:00 AM

Ha ha, I thought I was doing this with less lines by only using 10. I can be a bit verbose at times. Thanks for the placement John.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/22/2016 1:03:00 PM

well crafted with such poetic substance, rich... fine write, rich.. huggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2016 9:57:00 AM

Thanks, I enjoyed the challenge. Hugs back to you Nette.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 11/20/2016 5:55:00 PM

Sincerely, this is a great write. i love how it was constructed. Meautiful imagery.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/27/2016 9:58:00 AM

Thanks A.M. Much appreciated.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/20/2016 6:46:00 AM

You added a challenge on an already tough challenge and executed it perfectly, Richard:) a 7:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/20/2016 9:25:00 AM

Thanks Jo. ;0)

Rhoda Galgiani

Date: 11/19/2016 9:34:00 AM

Quite a challenge that you handled head on! Interesting to read - way to go on this one. A BIG 7, for sure!!!...rg

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/20/2016 9:26:00 AM

Thanks Rhoda, I appreciate the visit and 7.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/18/2016 11:52:00 PM

WOW! That's some challenge. I don't think I could do it. It's hard to imagine you as a flamboyant protester. :) I've missed your writes and you! Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2016 8:36:00 AM

Ha ha, that probably would be hard to imagine. Hugs Rick.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/18/2016 3:00:00 PM

- An impressive write, Richard - Good luck in the contest - Best wishes for a peaceful and lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2016 8:47:00 AM

Thanks Anne-Lise. ;0)

Casarah Nance

Date: 11/17/2016 5:23:00 PM

I think the bigger words make the reading and I'm sure the writing more difficult, but you have pulled off a challenge in the manner you do best, which is impressive.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2016 8:47:00 AM

Ahh, thanks Casarah.

Dalia Shahein

Date: 11/15/2016 6:38:00 PM

Very powerful and difficult but strong in the same time , you nailed it my dear , I'm sure your gonna win , hugs / / :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2016 8:48:00 AM

I hope you are right Dalia.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/15/2016 8:02:00 AM

Excellent poem, Richard. Add to the cost the degree of difficulty and you really produced a masterfully penned poem. Kudos to you. Very thought provoking as well. Great write, my poetic friend. Love always to you and yours.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2016 8:48:00 AM

Thanks my kind hearted friend.

Becca Teagan

Date: 11/14/2016 8:47:00 AM

It makes me smile to read that you had to add a bit of difficulty to an already difficult challenge! lol You are just that good. :) I enjoyed reading this.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/14/2016 9:36:00 AM

It warms my heart to know you are smiling. I hope you are well.

James Peranteau

Date: 11/13/2016 6:34:00 PM

Oh yesss, you knows I like this write dear poet! Nice to prance by(certainly not with even the slightest of arrogance by the way Rich) and catch a look-see at your latest....great lexilogical ! Wowsers, I knows ya got some cerebrals twisting ! Have a great week sir....much love, james

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/13/2016 6:48:00 PM

If I could favourite a comment this would certainly qualify.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/13/2016 6:38:00 AM

Great job on a very difficult challenge. You wrote an excellent poem my friend.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/13/2016 6:47:00 PM

Thanks Armand.

Viv Wigley

Date: 11/13/2016 2:06:00 AM

Having done so in the past with as few lines as possible, I can appreciate the effort you put in with such a difficult selection of words, Richard. Jolly well done,.Regards, Viv

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/13/2016 6:46:00 PM

Thanks my friend.