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I shield my heart with both of my eyes under shroud of dimness. Yearning tossed its anchors all around, under shroud of dimness. Moans have been splotches in evening time; the curtain is moved up. New agony has arisen under a shroud of dimness. My house is hotter, with new scents at the windows of my heart. I manage how to miss the typhoon under shroud of dimness. I wish to be securely covered somewhere inside your heart. To bloom in the springtime, yet, not under a shroud of dimness. Witch lady that strolls, takes off, and sends verse from the favored realm? A radiant born that shines teases under shroud of dimness. And her perfumes bind me to her spectrums, which hypnotize me. So her storm could blow me away under a shroud of dimness. Furthermore, to suffer grievances, love, grins, and anguish. Also, compliance and delight moan under shroud of dimness. Dubious loss, significant birth has occurred the same time. Irate hurls let the incense consume under shroud of dimness. Hits for striking hits for restoring and hits for reviving. Thunder made the letter sound blessed under a shroud of dimness. If not you, who is chosen of country's heavenly kindness? Image is covered in word and sound, under shroud of dimness. Written: April 3rd 2021 This or That, Vol 1 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 4/13/2021 9:04:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a story/write with beautiful picture. Have a blessed day writing away...................
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Date: 4/13/2021 5:50:00 PM
Thanks Paula, for reading and commenting, have a wonderful evening..// Las
Date: 4/10/2021 6:32:00 PM
Hi Lasaad, You penned such a well-written poem. Your content and imagery was amazing. Congratulations on your winning write. Have a good evening:-) Alexis
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Date: 4/10/2021 7:02:00 PM
Thanks you so much Alexis, that’s really so nice from you, and I hope you get too many wins in future contests, have a blessed evening
Date: 4/10/2021 5:08:00 PM
Truly an amazing Ghazal poem, Lasaad:-) Well-done! Congratulations on your win in my contest!
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Date: 4/10/2021 5:13:00 PM
Oh Thanks Edward, I didn’t know it was a win, but I’m glad to hear it from the sponsor himself, I won’t miss any of your future contests hopefully. Have a wonderful night Edward
Date: 4/5/2021 2:01:00 PM
- I read this almost like Norse Mythology, Las ... goddess of birth - the strength and passion of poetry - Beautiful illustrations in your lines :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/5/2021 2:10:00 PM
I'm glad you like this poem, actually, this form ( Ghazal) is not easy to pen. Thanks for commenting Anne-Lise, Warm hugs to you.
Date: 4/5/2021 7:36:00 AM
In the penultimate line, you should include your name as far as I know. However ghazals are so varied. Your poem is great. So much imagery and romance.
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Date: 4/5/2021 9:39:00 AM
If not you, who( that’s how I resolved the issue of name to be able to have a 15 syllable in that verse, thanks so much Victor appreciate every word you said.
Date: 4/4/2021 1:11:00 PM
Fascinating imagery in these couplets, Lasaad. I enjoyed reading your thoughts.
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Date: 4/4/2021 2:23:00 PM
I'm so glad you like it, it's not an easy form, but I like it; thanks for reading and commenting, dear friend Milton. Have a blessed day.

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