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For Emile Pinet's Ottava Rima poetry contest.

The Ottava Rima is a unique and captivating form of poetry composed of eight eleven-syllable lines with an a-b-a-b-a-b-c-c rhyme scheme. It was developed by Tuscan poets in the late thirteenth and early fourteenth centuries,

Children of summer yearn for Gemini moon. To gaze at porcelain light beaming from high. As twilight kisses stars in mild midnight June, stalwart sun-kissed blooms soar towards sable sky. Soul's at peace, fusing with nature's mellow tune, but knowing scents will fade, brings tears to the eye. Fate seems fragile for blossoming butterflies, who crave to migrate where seasons harmonise.

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Emile Pinet

Date: 6/30/2024 11:13:00 AM

Congratulations Silent One! Your charming poem "Children of Summer", has earned you a distinguished placement in my poetry contest. I was strict, but your poem easily earned you a spot on the winner’s list. Very well done, my friend.

Tonye George

Date: 6/22/2024 5:06:00 AM

I hate to know that everything goes away in the end, and most times even before the end. Love is so beautiful when you share it with the right person. Someone who never lets you sink in your vulnerabilities. Someone whose intimacy you adore because they make you safe in their arms. "but knowing scents will fade, brings tears to the eye." Always. Hurts to know and let go. Great write, always Silent.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/13/2024 1:11:00 PM

this is very pretty. I recently wrote a poem that has references to some of these same ideas of June, just not posted yet.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 6/13/2024 11:04:00 AM

SO, interesting how you capture the yearning, the experience, and the anticipation of loss so skillfully. The butterflies may be lucky enough to follow the climate they like through migration, but we're not doing that generally. Hopefully, we can accept that we may see the cycle repeat and feel good about all the signs that indicate the transitions.

Paige Hind

Date: 6/11/2024 3:30:00 PM

Gorgeous writing, you did this form justice :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/11/2024 12:11:00 PM

Climate determines butterflies fate, 'who crave to migrate where seasons harmonise'. I think we would all want what butterflies crave, what a perfect season it would be. Wonderful Poem I love it. Happy Birthday Silent One, hope it was a great day. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Maria Williams

Date: 6/11/2024 4:08:00 AM

You are indeed a Master of all these forms , I am truly impressed. I love these lines …Fate seems fragile for blossoming butterflies, who crave to migrate where seasons harmonise. Best of luck for the contest S1...Hugs

Sally Eslinger

Date: 6/10/2024 7:48:00 PM

Wow Silent, ii refrain from usually saying i find something beautiful, but i will say it here for your images as described in this well writte new to me form of poetry, i found exquisite. Truly enjoyed this poem you wrote. Sorry for rambling. Best wishesfor the contest.

Yann Rolland

Date: 6/10/2024 4:16:00 PM

so delicious, just a great music for the heart and ears, thanks poet

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 6/10/2024 9:58:00 AM

A lovely Ottava Rima Silent One, summer is the best time for children and of course the Gemini moon always make one’s heart swoon… Beryl

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/10/2024 2:28:00 AM

Butterflies have a short life and then bite the dust like everyone else.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 6/9/2024 6:26:00 PM

I often ponder on the fate of butterflies, how they live how they die where they go?

Joe Dimino

Date: 6/9/2024 2:08:00 PM

"Fate seems fragile for blossoming butterflies," -- Love that imagery! Happy birthday my friend!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/9/2024 1:47:00 PM

By the way, is today your birthday. You have a great birth month. Happy birthday

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/9/2024 1:45:00 PM

Very lovely, Silent One. I am sure it will be a winner

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/9/2024 11:17:00 AM

Those butterflies are strong little insects despite their size especially those Monarchs who travel for such long distances in their migration. I often think about them and how do they make it. Thanks for sharing this one with us. It reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for dropping by my page. Sara K

Jim Slaughter

Date: 6/9/2024 9:57:00 AM

Very beautiful, S O, and BOL in the contest.

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/9/2024 9:30:00 AM

The language used is both fascinating and appropriate for the summer season. I really adore the introductory lines. You have expressed profound feelings in a creative manner. Occasionally, the passing of time might evoke a variety of emotions inside us. I must express that this is yet another amazing piece of poetry from you.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/9/2024 9:20:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Children of Summer" write. What a story in just 8 lines. Great ending/butterflies are fragile... "Good Luck" Have A Blessed Day Writing Away...........

Ink Empress

Date: 6/9/2024 8:16:00 AM

So beautiful and soul warming! I love how youv written about children of summer! Now this is poetry at its finest: so very well woven, in a soulful manner with exquisite rhymes. So captivating and fitting diction for summer too! I need to try this form but mine wont look anything like this! I love especially the opening lines here “ Children of summer yearn for Gemini moon. To gaze at porcelain light beaming from high. As twilight kisses stars in mild midnight June” beautiful! Moon and june! Such clever rhymes! “ but knowing scents will fade, brings tears to the eye. Fate seems fragile for blossoming butterflies,” how poignant! And how creatively youv phrased such deep emotions! Sometimes, fleeting time does make us feel all sort of ways. I must say this is another one of my faves from you! Absolutely love this poem! Best wishes