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Children of Oblivion

They drop, unmoored, into the wind of oblivion Breathing the rusty dust Of charcoal coated days Burned by the bleeding heat Of icy nights, in cement tents With the drum of diesel wheels Their lone lullaby In the fangs of feral shadows They scrape their survival Off the ground of disregard Yesterday's washed away In acid rain Tomorrow's as thin As cellophane. 10/04/19

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Date: 10/20/2019 11:11:00 PM
Poor Babies! What a terrible existence for them. A fine write and an important message to us all. Congrats. God Bless, JB
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Date: 10/20/2019 10:19:00 AM
strong inagery, beautifully penned.
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Date: 10/19/2019 2:49:00 PM
This has become a sad reality worldwide my friend - I see that congratulations are in order - this was an intense write and a truly deserved win. Hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 10/14/2019 11:47:00 AM
'Michelle, Congratulations on your first place win! Excellent wording. David'
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Date: 10/12/2019 7:42:00 PM
Heart wrenching words, well written imagery. Congrats on your top win Michelle.
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Date: 10/12/2019 12:27:00 PM
Michelle, congratulations on your deserving top win with this beautifully penned poem !
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Date: 10/12/2019 8:57:00 AM
I see that I was right. Congrats on your top spot.
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Date: 10/11/2019 11:24:00 AM
Wonderfully descriptive poetry. Congratulations on you top honor win!
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Date: 10/11/2019 9:26:00 AM
EXCELLENT......Beautifully done Michelle.
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Date: 10/11/2019 8:40:00 AM
Great write and win Michelle, Congrats
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Date: 10/10/2019 7:39:00 PM
I agree with Janis. Excellent writing. Big congrats on a well deserved win.
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Date: 10/10/2019 4:19:00 PM
This is an excellent write. Congratulations on your first place win.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/10/2019 5:44:00 PM
After reading your excellent entry, I am humbled and grateful for your touching comment, Janis!
Date: 10/10/2019 2:41:00 PM
Congrats Michelle on your win with this intriguing write!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/10/2019 5:43:00 PM
Thank you so much, John!
Date: 10/10/2019 1:12:00 PM
This is so well constructed, though sadly true to life in some cases, Michelle. I had missed it first time around but can well see why it was singled out! Congratulations.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/10/2019 5:42:00 PM
I actually didn't write this until almost the end of the most recent contest for this theme, but am very appreciative of your kind words, Wendy!
Date: 10/10/2019 1:06:00 PM
"the drum of diesel wheels their lone lullaby"--love that line. Well done! Congratulations on your distinguished placement!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/10/2019 5:40:00 PM
Thank you so kindly, PS!
Date: 10/10/2019 1:06:00 PM
An excellent poem finding its way to the top of my contest. Well done, Michelle!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/10/2019 5:38:00 PM
I am so flattered, thank you so much, Julia!
Date: 10/10/2019 11:35:00 AM
Superb write!!!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/10/2019 5:37:00 PM
Thank you, appreciate it...
Date: 10/9/2019 9:54:00 AM
Hi Michelle, 2nd episode of Pure Fantasy posted - thought as you were hooked you'd like to know. Hugs, Jennifer.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/10/2019 5:55:00 PM
Thanks for letting me know!
Date: 10/5/2019 11:22:00 PM
What a memorable depiction of neglected town waifs and imps you've penned, Michelle. Positively Dickensian, if not 'moreso.' And those last four lines are a double Wow! (Sure looks like your Muse is back in full swing!) See you in the winner's circle with this write. Warmest wishes, Gershon
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 10/10/2019 10:18:00 PM
I call my shots well these days: Congrats on a highly competitive, contested FIRST place finish, Michelle!! ~ Not to brag or anything... (LOL).
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/10/2019 5:55:00 PM
That means a lot, I really appreciate it, Gershon-
Date: 10/5/2019 3:49:00 PM
I agree the last line is the kicker, the rest lead you to it. Very well done!.....pat
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Date: 10/5/2019 11:04:00 AM
H Michelle, strangely I posted a poem The Unfortunates which is about the poor folk living under bridges in the rain whilst greedy wealthy people pass them in their Mercedes and Jaguars - destination a mansion! Terrific Michelle - very well written xx Hugs and blessings Jennifer.
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Date: 10/4/2019 5:43:00 PM
I like your take on the contest. For me I think this is one is destined for a win. Hugs Rick.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/4/2019 8:17:00 PM
Thank you, Rick, I really appreciate it!
Date: 10/4/2019 4:58:00 PM
You really stretch öld brainwaves with, "tomorrow's as thin as cellophane. Well done! Aloha! Rico
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/4/2019 7:45:00 PM
Thanks, it was one of those weird random thoughts that found its way into a poem!

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