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CHALLENGING DRIVE

And so we traveled very, very high, Our destination seemingly to reach The gathering mist and Dreary grey sky. The path rather track that we took, Could have been misunderstood, For a stairway to heaven. Are you going right to the top, Are you mad to go, Asked a kind old man with a mop Of pure white hair, walking his dog. He seemed to think so. At every curve we went higher, I feared we could not travel further, As the track became even curvier, Our altitude terrifying, But still we kept climbing. I did not utter a sound, Just accepted that we might die, And might shortly be heaven bound. No alternative to be found, We had to face this rocky terrain. The mist arrived, low and blanket like, It was recommended that this Area was good for a hike, Or mountain biking, Perhaps even cycling, And what about the mist, Pray tell, I Insist. We finally reached our rustic Holiday accommodation, And destination, Off the grid, With feelings of trepidation, Not a property For which I would bid. What a magnificent sight to behold, We avoided little mounds of sand, When walking on a gravel path, Towards our wood cabin, Cows munched grass outside our door, A worker, hired as a farm hand, Covered cow dung with this sand, Thank God for small mercies, Hallelujah, hubby said. The Natal midlands, we will Visit again, but will stay on lower Terra Firma So that we may Live. to see another day.

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Date: 10/19/2024 11:23:00 AM
I really enjoyed this one. A bit frightening like Stephen King's tale The Mist.
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Date: 10/12/2024 12:22:00 AM
Your journey sounded so very scary and equally adventurous. But the scenery at the top was worth taking the trouble ...I believe . With the spirit of young hikers, you covered every bend and crossed every hurdle. It was with bated breath that l read your description. Mountainous terrains are prone to accidents. Thank God, you reached your destination safe. Beautiful narration, dear Jenny. Greatly enjoyed.
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Date: 9/29/2024 8:42:00 AM
Ha!!Ha!! I would think that would be a wonderful place minus the drive up a mountain plus if one goes up, they have to come down. LOL..Thanks for sharing. Sara K
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Date: 9/29/2024 8:42:00 AM
You have lost none of your narrative talent, Jenny! I truly enjoyed this. Curiosity got the best of me and I checked out the Natal midlands ... mountains, beautiful scenery and game reserves. I bet that once you settled in you all had a lovely time. ~ Warm regards and hugs my friend. // paul
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Date: 9/28/2024 6:50:00 PM
What a scary journey you and hubby had, Jennifer, do hope you enjoyed the stay and that the journey back wasn’t too bad. Hugs, Beryl
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Date: 9/11/2024 10:23:00 AM
Hi Jennifer! Not only is this a story of your journey but a beautifully written metaphor for the journey of one of God's pilgrims. It reminds me of Pilgrim's Progress. Wonderfully crafted and skillfully written, dear friend. Thank you for your visits to my page. They are always special blessings and I love reading your feedback. As you come into spring, sending you many blessings, dear friend!
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Date: 9/9/2024 12:50:00 PM
Jennifer, I think it's great you get to explore your own country. Sounds like the trip up there was a bit scary. Driving on mountain roads requires care, and we're all glad you made it OK! Sometimes, it gets close when traffic is heading in the opposite direction. Your description has some humor and creates images that make me smile!
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Date: 9/9/2024 1:16:00 AM
Oh how I dream to be with you, up on high where the breeze is refreshing and nature is splendid. Yes, do return to terra firma. Not that it's safer down here, with all these nasty drivers.
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Date: 9/8/2024 8:19:00 AM
Dearest Jennifer, my soulful friend, I was captivated by your engaging poem and death-defying ride up the mountain. Your verse "Hallelujah, hubby said" made me smile with relief and giggle at the sand piles. What an amazing yet terrifying journey to your Holiday destination. Going back down must have been even more terrifying. I would definitely be staying "on lower Terra Firma" lol as I'm not a fan of heights (though I'm sure it was beautiful!). It's great to see you my dear poetry sis. I hope all is well with you and your lovely family. Warmest wishes, love and hugs sent from across the waves.. ~Susan
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Date: 9/7/2024 8:47:00 AM
You take the reader on an incredible journey Jennifer, glad you back safely to lower ground. Hope you and your family are keeping well. Tom
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Date: 9/7/2024 6:33:00 AM
What an interesting little tale of a wondrous journey. We'll be heading for the mountains soon ourselves for some peace and quiet
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