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Captured By a Mind Unhinged

Surrounded by the chaos of a mind unhinged, She sought out a kind of refuge in A corner of the gray concrete she found herself Surrounded by. The coldness of the bricks startled her At first, but she Realized he meant to keep her there Until his thoughts went a new direction She sat down and began to wait, Visualizing her nice warm and toasty bed With its fluffy comforter, and her lively room. The hair on her arms began to rise, As she carefully began to plan another escape. It was turning cold out now, and this room was not heated. She would not last long If she did not get away on her next Escape attempt. The moveable brick made a horrible scraping Sound as he peered inside. Loud laughter came out of his stomach soul. Are you okay? He asked. Cold and hungry she thought. Miraculously, a dirty brown towel was thrust into the space and a half eaten sandwich. Grateful, she began to eat.

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Date: 8/8/2018 1:57:00 PM
wow, you really told it well. This situation occurs more than people might know. I like how you patterned it out too, Caren.
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 8/8/2018 6:59:00 PM
Thank you Andrea. I am glad you recognized that this one took several re-writes, until I got it the way I really wanted it.
Date: 8/8/2018 1:57:00 PM
I saw the movie Ilene mentioned. So good
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Date: 8/8/2018 8:25:00 AM
you've totally drawn me into this story, caren! it reminds me of the novel (and also movie) "room," which was horrifying. well done, indeed!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 8/8/2018 7:00:00 PM
I need to read that novel, Ilene, and I will. Thank you.

Book: Shattered Sighs