Canary

Yellow bird looks out Beating heart longs to fly Sorrowful song soars

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Date: 12/7/2008 11:20:00 AM

Nice use of imagery and alliteration in this concise poem. Good message. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for your kind words regarding my poem. Have a wonderful holiday season. Karen

John Heck

Date: 12/7/2008 9:24:00 AM

A very poignant haiku - but once that bird flaps it's wings and flies - it will sing a song so sweetly. Hope you're having a great weekend. Peace and happiness always, John

Sharon Winter

Date: 12/3/2008 12:41:00 PM

Perhaps a metaphor here. How the caged bird sings indeed. Wonderful write. Love, Shar

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 12/3/2008 7:04:00 AM

Super alliteration! You capture the anguish so well... BRAVO BG!! Love, Keith

Nigel Fawcett

Date: 12/3/2008 1:25:00 AM

Aw, poor little thing. Methinks this beautiful Haiku runs a lot deeper. Love, Nigel

Amy Swanson

Date: 12/2/2008 7:30:00 AM

This is so lovely, but sad, poor bird... we can learn a lesson from him though... his heart is longing to be free, but still he sings. Beautiful writing. God bless and thanks for the kind comments on my haiku. :) Amy

Carrie Richards

Date: 12/2/2008 6:58:00 AM

Poor little thing wants to be free. A sad haiku,...well done. ~ Carrie

Elaine George

Date: 12/2/2008 2:30:00 AM

Very heartwrenching Haiku, Barbara. Lainie