Caged

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in the dusk i cannot breathe before tomorrow’s sun has had a chance to rise the whispers stirring nibble at my sleepy ears enticing and beguiling calling out and beckoning come play be free a gentle tug at the door to my cage it swings open as in a dream releasing me into a gentle mist in perfect harmony i roam till sunrise AP: Honorable Mention 2020 Submitted on June 7, 2020 for contest I CAN'T BREATHE sponsored by RICHARD LAMOUREUX

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/17/2020 7:57:00 PM

Absolutely love your take on 'I Can't Breathe.' A true winner, Line. Bravo! Warmest wishes, Gershon

Line Gauthier
Date: 6/17/2020 10:28:00 PM

Thank you so much, Gershon. I was late on the news otherwise I would have written a more timely piece.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/16/2020 1:44:00 PM

CAGED how true this word sounds to persons that have always been targeted due to racism. And how wonderful a door to your cage swings open and you could roam till sunrise as free as a bird. A lovely different kind of write Line Well done and congrats. Blessings, Jennifer.

Line Gauthier
Date: 6/16/2020 7:08:00 PM

Thanks for your most appreciated visit and comment, Jennifer.

John Watt

Date: 6/15/2020 11:11:00 PM

"Caged" is a good image for the theme. Well done, Line, these are good words to ponder ~ John

Line Gauthier
Date: 6/15/2020 11:57:00 PM

Thanks, John. Most appreciated.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/14/2020 11:25:00 AM

An interesting perspective, congrats on your win.

Line Gauthier
Date: 6/14/2020 12:23:00 PM

Thank you very much, Richard. In hindsight I wish I had gone with the current news interpretation of the prompt... the idea is still hovering in my brain.