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Vie's 'Finish My Poem Contest'...  April 9, 2025

As she drinks nectar from a flower, sweetness from heaven falls like dew anointed with a gentle rain amidst sun showers she appears as if on cue Lifting her wings she lands on a Zinnia beneath a tinted sky of April blue flight of fancy fanning fast, fabulous marvel, she is beauty true on true She flitted from flower to flower, and I thought she'd landed in my hair Perhaps the sweet-scented spray attracted her, this lady butterfly, so fair Then, she flew to suckle the white jasmine blooms, on delicate wings I was mesmerized and felt my heart beats as if they were flutterings Quite still I stood as she hovered before gently landing upon my finger Each flap of her beautiful velvety wings made me wish she would linger Upon the morning's breeze she was carried until resting on a marigold I chased away a bumblebee who got near to her. I thought, "How bold!" I watched the Monarch lay her eggs, each tinier than a mustard seed upon her well-chosen birthing place, a tender green leaf of milkweed She hovered for a while longer, as if she pondered about her decision to leave her precious offspring, but she'd given them new life's provision Food to eat when into little caterpillars they'd develop when hatched She'd done all she could to assure her eggs had been firmly attached It was very intoxicating for me and of the experience I had to write about watching a butterfly do flyovers in my yard before taking flight I admit having watched her as if she were dancing around me today kept me on the lookout for predators that might steal her eggs away

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Date: 4/22/2025 7:30:00 AM
Big congrats Lin. Quite a finish there. Congratulations! :)
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Date: 4/22/2025 7:33:00 AM
Hi, Linda. Thanks very much.
Date: 4/17/2025 2:06:00 AM
many congrats Lin so happy this gem got the top spot! hugs jan xx
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Date: 4/17/2025 2:32:00 AM
Thanks, Jan.
Date: 4/16/2025 8:58:00 PM
A well deserved win Lin, congratulations. Tom
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Date: 4/16/2025 9:09:00 PM
Thank you very much, Tom.
Date: 4/16/2025 6:10:00 PM
Thankyou for finishing my poem dear poets. It was a pleasure reading your poem. A big congrats to all my ten winners. I'm proud of all of you !
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Date: 4/16/2025 9:08:00 PM
Thank you, Vie.
Date: 4/12/2025 5:41:00 AM
Butterflies are sure mesmerizing. I love them too - and birds - and rain and so much more from His hand. Our Creator sure knew how to keep us entertained. Lovely writing. God bless you always, love, Gina
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Date: 4/16/2025 3:03:00 AM
Sorry, I'm just seeing your kind comments, Gina. He's provided many more beautiful things in our world than we sometimes deserve. Thank you, Gina.
Date: 4/9/2025 11:53:00 AM
Thanks for this story Lin. You did a beautiful job describing how wonderful these creatures can make us feel. They go on an amazing journey every year. Simply a shame it's being gradually eroded away.
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Date: 4/9/2025 12:30:00 PM
They're such fragile little beings. I've really enjoyed helping my daughter care for those eggs and caterpillars she's taken in and protected until they were ready to be released.
Date: 4/9/2025 8:21:00 AM
Beautiful creatures they are too Lin, love to see them in summertime. Tom
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Date: 4/9/2025 8:40:00 AM
Yes, they are, Tom. A bit messy to clean up after but worth it when they quickly emerge and I get to see it. Few survive from egg to adult. Thank you.
Date: 4/9/2025 7:09:00 AM
Lin Lane, your poem carries a deep respect for the natural world. There’s a profound tenderness in the Monarch butterfly's journey and your own emotions that caused me to pause and marvel. Beautiful... -Mickey G :)
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Date: 4/9/2025 7:17:00 AM
Thank you so very much for your kind thoughts, Mickey. My daughter collects their eggs when the weather turns cold and grows milkweed to nurture them until they hang from a chrysalis. It's educational as well as amazing to watch the process and have them land on you as you release them. It's kind of like they're saying, "Thank you, and now I have to go." ;-)

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