But Not Mute

My foe, shivering
I drew my sword, glistening
Swooning dead away, he, hushed...
Over to him, ran
I, swashbuckling... Arising
he, screaming madly... Deaf, I
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Faulkner Avatar
June 28, 2019 at 11:44 PM
I like how the last line loops to connect the title, and makes it a circular thought, clever, gw!
Wolf Avatar
June 29, 2019 at 10:50 PM
I love it when you see more than I do in what I write...That's called 'success,' methinks. Your comment is hereby treasured! Best wishes, gw
Krutsinger Avatar
June 28, 2019 at 4:42 AM
It would be no fun at all to not hear the scream when you are swashbuckling. Trixie and I are horrified, thinking how sad this would be when a scream is what you truly yearn for.
Wolf Avatar
June 28, 2019 at 10:09 AM
Yes, we all scream for ice cream. :) gw
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