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Two impish girls by a ridge of the sea frolicked with wavelets lapping merrily as pink buckets swayed, in each little hand where clusters of moistened grains polished the sand bedecking castles on bright August skies; mermaids we dressed in ferns waiting to dry. Patty and I guarded the moats from the bad trolls with candles on gates as swooshing tides cajoled; a vignette we held in deep friendship’s mind when crests besieged our kingdom, how unkind as we fought the tides with shovels dug around, our legs standing firm to parry the roaring mound. But on our twelfth year, she caught a fever; Patty grew hazy, our beach empty right where all sandcastles dissolved from red to gray and no more turrets to chisel away . Now, summers without pails are a memory of two impish girls, on ridge of the sea. ……………………….. Memories of The Sea: Isaiah Zerbst’s Contest 5/14/2015

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Date: 5/31/2015 6:48:00 PM
Love the sea, love the write, and awesome win Nette,,,, thank you for coming to read my Cracked poem, I wrote it more than a year ago. Have a fab day :)
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Date: 5/18/2015 1:21:00 AM
Congratulations on this winner Nette..'
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Date: 5/17/2015 1:47:00 AM
A very captivating and downright enticing to read. Congratulations on winning this contest, Nette. (^_^) Noel.
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Date: 5/16/2015 2:45:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your Memory of the sea win. LUV LINDA
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Date: 5/16/2015 2:29:00 PM
You've captured the image well in your poetry Nette, nice one, and congratulations, James :) :)
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Date: 5/16/2015 10:20:00 AM
nice win Nette...... skat
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Date: 5/16/2015 2:05:00 AM
oh... what a wonderful scenery you have painted.. very nostalgic but the last part made me feel sad... congrats dear Nette... nad
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Date: 5/15/2015 11:08:00 PM
oh my , it ends so sadly, Nette. It is not true, is it? you really describe the building of the sand castle as if it were something you did personally. Love your ending couplet! Congrats for the win, I see!!
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Date: 5/15/2015 6:09:00 PM
Memories to remember of loving family, heartbreaking when Patty got sick. Congratulations on your win a 7 and hugs
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Date: 5/15/2015 12:25:00 PM
Very nice....I thoroughly enjoyed and Congratulations on your win...
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Date: 5/15/2015 12:09:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Nette:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/15/2015 9:42:00 AM
This is lovely!! All the best in the contest!! :D :D
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Date: 5/15/2015 7:51:00 AM
Reads like a winner..Creative way to maybe work real life story or happening into a poetic expression..I enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the honor of placing in your contest..Sara
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Date: 5/15/2015 1:29:00 AM
What a beautiful and interesting poem but sad touched....well penned, good luck for the contest.
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Date: 5/14/2015 8:00:00 PM
Beautiful, poignant write. I have come to recognize your poetry, Nette. The words always move with grace and gentleness. Thank you for placing my entry in the winner's list. Your contests provide the inspiration and opportunity for new poets to join with short poems. May your creative works continue to soar, both in contests and in the charts! Kim :-)
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Date: 5/14/2015 5:52:00 PM
nette, you have penned a sadly beautiful poem, great rhyming and phrasing within, 7, best of luck in the contest and thanks for my wonderful win in your Let Me Feel Your Lines Contest, I am so honoured
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Date: 5/14/2015 12:22:00 PM
Absolutely painful and wonderful. You do get your feelings and this memorable experience across very well. The haunting images are still on my mind, Nette.
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Date: 5/14/2015 3:12:00 AM
Delightful read. But what lingers long in the mind is the sad memory of Patty.7
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Date: 5/14/2015 2:08:00 AM
such charming imagery and the image is delightful - such a moving poem I found the twist at the end very emotional:-( good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx 7xx
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