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Brooding Skies

As dark brooding skies weep with mournful rain, I tread to hide tears of heartache and grief, trying to staunch my lament, but in vain. From love now lost, I've not yet found relief. On cloudless days I scan harbor and shore, distant horizons, for signs of a gale. But I hear no rumbling of thunder's roar, no hint of a downpour, lightning nor hail. One day soon, I hope my sad heart shall heal and I'll welcome the sun's warmth on my face. Then, I shall no longer have to conceal teardrops from missing my lover's embrace. I shall be freed from sadness, freed from pain as dark brooding skies weep with mournful rain. ~ May 27th, 2022 ~ Orphan Sonnet Poetry Contest Sponsored by Emile Pinet

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Hilo Poet

Date: 8/16/2022 9:48:00 AM

In search of an orphan sonnet writeup, I found this gem, Cheers, Jenna, brilliant pensive penning, and a trophy win to boot, amen! Aloha~William

Anton Bradinger

Date: 6/30/2022 11:41:00 PM

Thank you very much for this poem, Jenna, this is absolutely marvelous. I´m letting go an unaccessible love in the moment. All the best! Tony

Jenna Logan
Date: 7/1/2022 3:42:00 AM

May your heart heal, Anton. Thank you for your kind thoughts.

Charles Reese

Date: 6/5/2022 11:45:00 AM

This is a very finely crafted sonnet. I see why it done so well in it. I could almost feel the pain.

Jenna Logan
Date: 6/7/2022 8:02:00 PM

Thank you ever so kindly, Charles.

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 6/1/2022 5:49:00 AM

Back to congratulate you on your 1st place win in the contest. Well deserved! :)Paulette

Jenna Logan
Date: 6/1/2022 6:25:00 AM

Thank you very much for your recognition, Paulette.

John Watt

Date: 5/31/2022 4:11:00 PM

Jenna, the connection between weather and sorrow over lost love is so palpable in this orphan sonnet. The image and quote set the tone, then from the first line on the reader feels soaked with grief and emptiness with all the brooding imagery. I really liked the second stanza where the subject is seeking out a sympathetic storm and finds none, only reinforcing the aloneness. Then, hope starts to emerge that there will be sunshine in the future, both literal and metaphorical. Another poetic gem, kudos for your trophy win! ~ John

Jenna Logan
Date: 6/1/2022 6:25:00 AM

John, your detailed critique' of everyone's poetry is a treasure to all of us. I have to read yours more than once to absorb all the merits you bestow upon our efforts. I'm always delighted by your commentary for it offers me sincere support and encouragement. Thank you for your time and kind thoughts.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/31/2022 7:54:00 AM

Congrats on your winning work. Way to go. Sara

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/31/2022 8:00:00 AM

Thanks for your kindness, Sara.

Robert James Liguori

Date: 5/30/2022 9:42:00 PM

wonderful poem. congrats on first place.

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/31/2022 7:59:00 AM

Thanks so much, Robert.

Terry Miller

Date: 5/30/2022 2:36:00 PM

A huge congratulations on a well-deserved first place.

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/31/2022 7:59:00 AM

Thank you, Terry. I appreciate your comment.

Jeff Kyser

Date: 5/30/2022 11:50:00 AM

Super. Really nice use of the first/last line in the "orphan" format. Congrats!

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/30/2022 12:17:00 PM

Thanks very much for your congrats and kind thoughts, Jeff. Yours made the list as well, and I'll visit you in a bit.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/30/2022 11:31:00 AM

How wonderful that your emotive poem won the trophy. I am very happy for you Jenna. Congratulations dear poet. Blessings xxoo

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/30/2022 12:15:00 PM

Thanks an awful lot, Connie. I see yours is on the winning list, too. I thought it would be, and I'll comment on yours again in just a few minutes.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 5/30/2022 10:23:00 AM

Jenna, I'm not at all surprised your poem "Brooding Skies" earned the trophy in Emile's contest. Beautifully expressed and exceptionally well written. I'm back to say CONGRATULATIONS!!!!

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/30/2022 12:14:00 PM

How kind you are always to my poetry, Milt. Thanks are in order for your entry, as well. It seems Emile has smiled upon both of us with a nod in his contest. Congratulations to you, too. I'll comment again on your poem in just a bit.

Emile Pinet

Date: 5/30/2022 10:18:00 AM

Congratulations Jenna! Your poem earned "First" place in my contest, this contest had 39 poems entered and yet your poem rose to the top, you should be proud of your placing, well done my friend, Emile.

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/30/2022 11:16:00 AM

That’s quite an honor, and very much appreciated, Emile. I hadn’t thought about entering until a few days ago when I started feeling better. I’m delighted that I did and thrilled with the news! I’ve sent you mail.

Mike Bayles

Date: 5/30/2022 9:40:00 AM

Very nice, rhythm and rhyme, Jenna.

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/30/2022 11:12:00 AM

Thanks so much, Mike.

Valsa George

Date: 5/28/2022 11:36:00 PM

Feeling defeated in love makes one's heart miserable ! The wound may heal in time, but the scar will be there until the lost love is restored or another person comes into life..... ! Very poignant and touching sonnet, Jenna !

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/29/2022 1:41:00 AM

Hi Valsa. I appreciate your time for reading and leaving such grand comments.

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 5/28/2022 10:38:00 AM

Wow Jenna, this is a fav for me! I love how you express your sadness through the "mournful rain" ...Good luck in the contest. :)Paulette

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/29/2022 1:40:00 AM

Thanks so very much for the kind comments and favor, Paulette.

Mike Gentile

Date: 5/28/2022 4:23:00 AM

Jenna, you have perfectly captured the dark, brooding mood of a lonely lover's sadness! I think many of us have experienced this feeling in our lives, for me, you have made this truly relatable with your fine writing! That said, Happy Saturday!!! xxoo

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/28/2022 6:20:00 AM

Hi Mike. I am honored by your detailed remarks. Happy Saturday and Sunday to you and yours!

L Milton Hankins

Date: 5/27/2022 5:19:00 PM

This is fine, fine writing, Jenna. I particularly like the inspiration for it, crying in the rain. One never gets over the loss of a true love, and that grief is very hard, if not impossible, to conceal. Best wishes in Emile's contest.

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/28/2022 6:19:00 AM

You are absolutely correct, Milt. Thank you for your thoughtful comments and wishes for the contest.

John Lawless

Date: 5/27/2022 5:19:00 PM

Beautifully done Jenna I shall think of this poem when I walk in the rain.

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/28/2022 6:18:00 AM

Thank you, John. I love walking in a 'gentle' rain... sans tears.

David Kavanagh

Date: 5/27/2022 3:00:00 PM

Extremely moving sonnet Jenna, the emotion is palpable, and personified through the bleak weather imagery, powerful writing, cheers David

Jenna Logan
Date: 5/27/2022 3:01:00 PM

Thanks so much for your lovely commentary, David.