Broken themes

Golden meadows rising with the morning sun
Jogging with me, recalling broken themes
Writing, scratching, re-writing on the run
Thumping heart cheering swinging hands to dream
Like trying to draw water from a water-less stream.

August 6, 2017
English Quintain--sponsored by Sara Kendrick
Placed 7th

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Date: 2/22/2018 3:22:00 PM
Finally, I found an oldie I had not read of yours!! I love how you made the metaphor to writing with the waterless stream. So cool!! Also I love this poetry form you used.
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Date: 12/2/2017 9:46:00 AM
That's an impossible task given at the end of this very thoughtful poem, Vijay. I enjoyed reading this insightful poem. Love and joy always.
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Date: 8/27/2017 10:33:00 AM
I've been trying to convey the "writing, scratching, re-writing" process to my granddaughter. She wants it to be perfect when it leaves her pen.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/27/2017 11:38:00 AM
Thanks, Anita!
Date: 8/14/2017 5:17:00 PM
I was so delighted to read your poem..Thanks for the entry in my contest your participation was encouraging and uplifting to me..I have experienced the writing, scratching and the re-write many times..Congrats on your placement..Sara
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2017 5:33:00 PM
Delighted by your visit and love your feedback! Thank you.
Date: 8/13/2017 11:28:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Dreams are with what we live.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2017 6:25:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 8/12/2017 10:01:00 AM
A win for you as well Heidi--congrats! just found out where to look.
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/12/2017 10:24:00 AM
I was just about to show you were to look, and now I see you found it. Thank you as well :)
Date: 8/12/2017 9:37:00 AM
Hi Vijay. You placed 7th in the contest to write as if you are doing something in the moment :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/12/2017 9:52:00 AM
That's wonderful--thanks for telling me Heidi. Don't know where to look.
Date: 8/12/2017 7:10:00 AM
Congratulations for your win Vijay! :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/12/2017 9:33:00 AM
Not sure Heidi, what you mean. I did't win anything that I know of-- but thanks!
Date: 8/9/2017 8:49:00 PM
Hi Vijay: KEEP JOGGING WITH NATURE AND KEEP WRITING! GREAT POEM!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/9/2017 9:25:00 PM
Love your feedback Ralph! Thank you.
Date: 8/9/2017 9:55:00 AM
I really enjoyed the mood of this poem.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/9/2017 1:51:00 PM
So glad you liked it--thanks Sunlite Wanter!
Date: 8/8/2017 5:58:00 AM
And natures beauty smiles upon us all again. Beautiful; have to fav.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/8/2017 6:46:00 AM
Your comments are inspiring! Thank you M.L.K.
Date: 8/6/2017 4:13:00 PM
Nice one Vijay! I can see the golden meadows...Good luck in the contest :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/6/2017 4:26:00 PM
Thanks Heidi. Enjoy the mountains!
Date: 8/6/2017 9:57:00 AM
Great theme Vijay i sure can relate to the frustrations of writing that final line is so apt!:-) hugs Jan xx
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/6/2017 10:31:00 AM
Delighted to get your feedback Jan. Many thanks.
Date: 8/6/2017 9:36:00 AM
Nice pen!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/6/2017 9:41:00 AM
Thanks Maureen, as always.