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Broken-Hearted After Stillbirth

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For nine months I nurtured you But you were not mine to keep You didn’t cry when you were born But I was crying In fact, I was screaming hysterically The doctor tried everything to save you, but it was no use He told me you were stillborn I said “No, she was born sleeping” God had other plans for you He needed another angel in heaven Now my baby girl plays there with her toys My womb is empty … so is my heart FICTION WRITE for Broken-hearted Contest Sponsored by Broken Wings 10-13-17

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Sandra Haight

Date: 10/18/2017 8:52:00 AM

Jan, back to congratulate you on your win for this heartbreaking poem. Hugs, Sandra

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 10/17/2017 10:21:00 PM

Best wishes and big congrats on your well-earned win, Jan - keep up the great poetry, my friend! :-)

Constance La France

Date: 10/17/2017 1:28:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this sad write, you captured the theme perfectly and I love your image too !

Eve Roper

Date: 10/16/2017 9:17:00 PM

Jan, very heartfelt write congratulations on your win hugs Eve

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/16/2017 5:09:00 PM

Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your placement in the "Broken Hearted Poem contest ".- Alexis

Curtis Johnson

Date: 10/16/2017 5:01:00 PM

Congrats, Jan. This is a great piece of fiction. So real; so touching. Blessings. Curtis.

Roy Pett

Date: 10/15/2017 4:12:00 PM

This is so sad and emotive Jan, sympathetically written with compassion, you have a wonderful ability to write excellent poetry. GL in contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2017 4:13:00 PM

You are so kind Roy :-) I never know what will come into my mind and just write when the muse is willing, my preference is humour but I do write the occasional serious poem:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/14/2017 6:58:00 PM

Jan, this is a real tear jerker. I felt the pain within in this piece. Although I've never experienced having a stillborn child, my heart goes out to the couples that have. This heart wrenching poem is pure heartache. I wish you the best of luck in the contest- Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 10/14/2017 7:01:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I can't imagine the pain of losing a child of any age:-( hugs jan xx

Stephen Pennell

Date: 10/14/2017 7:59:00 AM

cripes thats a real heart string puller jan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/14/2017 6:01:00 PM

Thanks Stephen I much prefer humour but i do surprise with the odd serious poem:-) hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/14/2017 1:55:00 AM

Oh Jan, this is so deep and emotional, I cried for this individual! My Aunt has had two stillborn babies, and they both were extremely hard on our family! She almost went into a depression that nobody could get out of! I could certainly understand that! I loved how you put the line, "I said 'No, she was born sleeping,'" within your piece because it lightened it a smidgen! But it was all soooo sad! I was in awe with your incredible talent my friend! I really enjoyed this poem this morning! GW!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/14/2017 6:00:00 PM

My colleague went through the very same thing Russell and totally withdrew from everyone around her, it was heartbreaking. I can't think of anything more painful than losing a child of any age and I still get so sad when i think of our friends who lost their 2 sons from a drugs related incident in 2014 - i still think of them every day as the beakers they drank from are still in my cupboard:-( hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/13/2017 8:11:00 PM

Ohh Jan, I am feeling this grief-stricken poem in every part of my being. This is so tenderly and poignantly written, so beautifully emotional and pure. I love it. Good luck in the contest. A winner with me! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/14/2017 5:57:00 PM

Thanks Susan:-( it is a very emotive poem:-( hugs jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 10/13/2017 5:01:00 PM

This was a real tear-jerker, Jan, I'm glad it was a fiction write. Best of luck in the contest. John

Jan Allison
Date: 10/13/2017 5:36:00 PM

Thanks John:-) Constance wanted sad I can't think of anything worse than losing a child of any age:-( hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/13/2017 4:30:00 PM

Wow, Jan...so very sad and unimaginable. Your sad poem really tugged at my heartstrings...a truly heart-breaking experience that you brought to life with your amazing, well-written poem. All the best for the contest! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/13/2017 5:36:00 PM

Its such an emotive subject Sandra I do find writing and also reading poems like this so difficult as I much prefer writing humour:-) hugs jan xx

Juli- Michelle

Date: 10/13/2017 3:17:00 PM

Jan, this is truly heartbreaking. I'm glad, for you, this is fictitious. Good luck in the contest, and thank you for your kind words on my Midnight Romance poem :) Love, Juli-Michelle

Jan Allison
Date: 10/13/2017 3:22:00 PM

thanks Juli I can't think of anything more painful than losing a child at any stage of its life:-( hugs jan xx