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Bring To Light a Hidden and Silent Life

There was a serene beauty prevailing around her as she everyday trod the path to work.. She looked so absorbed in her own thoughts that one might not spot the mysterious and cloudy stare into her eyes.. She knew her way to home and work by heart.. she seemed to be in a perfect tune with time and place.. all her movements appeared to be synchronized with the tempo of the sounds surrounding her.. Such a harmonious living human being! If only one could step into her world and bring to light her hidden and silent life! Of those who watched her from afar would think of her a beauty of no core.. a blend of pathos and an unusual feel.. For those who crossed her path and nodded and smiled a friendly hello would neither see nor hear a greeting feedback! Such an endearing youth! If only one could receive the full force of her inner warmth and smiles! At work, no single unusual twists in her regular routine except for one bright day when a newly hired colleague, dripping with infatuation, approached her and dared looking into her non blinking eyes : “ When I look into your eyes I see a life of hope and love we can share together.. “ He could see her articulating : “ Would you please step closer and repeat what you have just said so that I can see you and decrypt your words? “ Each living being an abundance of powers possible to see "Haibun With A Message" poetry contest Sponsored by Charles Messina

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Date: 7/26/2022 3:55:00 AM
Great poem, great thoughts, and the lines "When I look into your eyes I see a life of hope and love we can share together" wow. Simply amazing sister, your muse is quite witty... A very well written poem with a beautiful message. Blessings
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Date: 3/3/2022 5:19:00 PM
Quite profound; beautifully expressed in this piece.
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Date: 12/20/2021 10:35:00 AM
Dearest Besma, your gifted pen spills a golden portrait. Your title hints at the beauty that comes into focus as your imagery unfolds the layers of a life in which one lives behind sightless eyes and silent ears.. but I adore how "she knew her way to home and work by heart" and is "synchronized with the tempo of the sounds surrounding her".. within her beats a lioness heart! The last two illuminating lines of this piece and the uplifting haiku are a grand finale to an inspiring Haibun. Your radiant pen shines with insight, dignity, expressive artistry and the beauty of your empathy, my sweet poetry sister. You are a grand poetess of soulful beauty and depth.. and your avid reader cherishes your grandeur! Warmest wishes, love and hugs to you, my dearest Besma.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 12/21/2021 3:11:00 PM
Dearest Besma, may you and yours enjoy a happy Holiday season, a merry Christmas and a happy New Year! Love and hugs to you always, my sweet soul sister <3
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 12/21/2021 2:03:00 PM
Every single word from you, sweet soul and poetic sister is a treat to read! Your presence dear Susan is an honour and a deep joy! Truly blessed to have so kind, so beautiful a soul and so gifted a poetess appreciating my humble poetry and responding to my humble words with an amazing poetry! I'm deeply grateful to you for generously offering me such a wonder! Thank you so much will not render my deepest feelings! Always a tremendous pleasure seeing you and reading you! My warmest wishes for a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.. Love and hugs.
Date: 12/17/2021 5:43:00 AM
"When I look into your eyes I see a life of hope and love we can share together" - Great haibun and beautiful haiku. Congratulations!
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 12/21/2021 1:49:00 PM
Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback and kind congratulations, Christuraj! I highly appreciate your honouring visit and beautiful feedback! My deepest regards and blessings.
Date: 11/29/2021 12:53:00 AM
A heartfelt and inspirational message, Besma, love the haiku you end with also. Harry
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 12/1/2021 3:53:00 PM
Being appreciated by a poet of grandeur and beauty is my honour and utmost delight! Thank you so much, Harry! I highly value your great support.. You are of remarkable humility. My deepest regards and blessings
Date: 11/28/2021 7:19:00 PM
A wonderful piece indeed. Love enters our life when we least expect it. Just lovely my friend.
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/30/2021 8:41:00 AM
So honoured and delighted by your visit and beautiful feedback, David.. Thank you so much! My deepest regards and blessings.
Date: 11/25/2021 12:30:00 PM
Besma you are a poetess of virtue, truth, love, passion, adventure and most of all a dear, dear friend of mine whose friendship I will treasure for the rest of my life. You have a great insight of humanity, which is reflected in this stupendous write, and every other you have ever written that I have read. I applaud you as a gifted poetess, and humanitarian and wish you the best always with love and hugs and blessings, your poetry soul sister from South Africa. Jennifer. Jennifer.
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/30/2021 7:47:00 AM
A dear friend and soul sister as you are Jenny showering my humble soul with your genuine sentiments of love, praise and care.. always unable to find words that meet your beauty.. I just send you my love and hugs sweetest friend and charming poetess.. thank you so much! My warmest wishes.
Date: 11/25/2021 8:25:00 AM
One of the best poems I've ever read; it's both sincere and articulate. One cannot deny that the Haibun is both beautiful and significant. If they can immerse themselves in their lives and surroundings to such a degree, they can teach everyone they come into contact with.
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/30/2021 7:39:00 AM
So kind of you Lassad to write such valuable response.. so much delighted by such an uplifting and rewarding feedback! Honoured and humbled.. Thank you so much! My deepest regards and blessings.
Date: 11/24/2021 5:45:00 PM
My friend, definitely a truly great and profound Haibun.. If one can tune in to their life and their surroundings to that level- they enlighten those that they meet. Your words in verse and in your replies here as well both exemptify a great measure of that clarity and insight. A fine fav- and a true gem too. God bless..
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/30/2021 7:37:00 AM
What an insightful feedback, Robert! You add a lot of Light to my humble words.. thank you so much for honouring my poetry by your wonderful visit! My deepest regards and blessings.
Date: 11/23/2021 3:42:00 AM
The haiku-enveloped message is so true; well-articulated. thanks and shalom, shalom. Salaam
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/24/2021 8:01:00 AM
Salam Anil, That's my great pleasure! Thank you so much for honouring my humble words.. so much obliged to you for your great support! My deepest regards and blessings.
Date: 11/21/2021 3:53:00 AM
Some live silent, never intending to be noticed or approved, never encroaching into others'space. They are tied around their home and their calling. They may not seem quite charming outwardly, but they have an inner beauty, so rich and deep. The man who found her is lucky to partake in the beauty of her soul. The poem is so profound like her own personality. Best of luck Besma!
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/21/2021 11:46:00 PM
You have genuinely, beautifully and profoundly captured the message of my humble Haibun, sweet friend and dear Valsa.. If only we can be of Love, understanding, tolerance, depth and empathy in dealing with human nature feels and complexities. Deeply honoured by your sage thoughts and rich feelings.. deeply grateful for such a wonderful feedback! My deepest regards and blessings. Love and hugs.
Date: 11/20/2021 2:34:00 PM
Sometimes people build walls around themselves and it takes a special person to break through, interesting verse Besma. Best of luck in the contest. Tom
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/21/2021 11:33:00 PM
There are so wonderful, loving and caring souls who can see beyond the walls people build around themselves.. We just have to find that inner hidden beauty that's worth being recognized and given a chance to relish in life.. You are so kind Tom to spill your insightful thoughts on my humble words. Thank you so much for your great support. My deepest regards and blessings.
Date: 11/20/2021 12:28:00 PM
Profound thoughts in this poem. There are people who develop a bad attitude towards others. But there is always an exception. A pleasing Haibun. Best for a win.
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/21/2021 11:26:00 PM
So many people content themselves with the surface they keep scratching without trying to see and understand and get closer to the core of others and things. Thank you so much Victor for your wonderful feedback and great support! I highly appreciate. My deepest regards and blessings.
Date: 11/20/2021 12:18:00 PM
There was inner beauty in her silence that not everyone could see. It takes someone genuine to admire such a person. Perhaps she found him. A meaningful write, Besma--- you depicted her perfectly. There are more like her. Best for a win.
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Besma Riabi Dziri
Date: 11/21/2021 11:12:00 PM
So happy I could depict an inner world of a soul who carries a sight and hearing impairment.. a reality hidden between the layers of a determination to live.. Thank you so much dear Vijay for your ongoing support and the honour of your presence. My deepest regards and blessings.

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