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--Breathe: a Collab With Mystic Rose

BREATHE As I inhale jasmines: sweet sailing scents of blooms, it place me to the time where distance has no room I'm chilled by blowing wind from an open window, struck by void while the moonbeams shines to grass below. Missing and hunger are the melodies that sweeps a lowly heart trembling as melancholy creeps, my growing yearning is to close this dreary space for so long it tears our hearts with wanting embrace. Our beings are imperfect but we do aspire: to feel, to taste one true love all of us desire--- throbbing with purity, lifting a soul from mire to end sorrows brought by agony and cooled fire When true love finally comes, stays and do surround, life reckons with a purpose to set and abound. Freed from shackles, thriving forever with delight: breathe anew for darkness shall fade to fuller light. When the night claims you like a wayward leaf of old and it takes you to the caves where anything turns gold you don't ask any questions and you don't dare breathe you just follow her, like a light weight tumbled weed Down the passages of dark, down the staircase of rune every step a little deeper than the crevices of moon you can almost taste the air, on your tonguing clepe you can down the stars of heaven in one single leap Taking you by the waist it shall dance you through the elixir of happiness when your feeling down n' blue you just thank the Lord for the magic of this gift all you need is skin n' eyes to cross her lowly rift When night claims you like a wayward leaf of old and takes you to her caves, all etched with gold don't ask her any questions just go ahead breathe no, don't ask her anything at all, just breathe, yes breathe... ___________________________________________ 4:25 pm, January 08, 2015
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February 1, 2016 at 3:49 PM
Olive, Congratulations, on your wonderful collaboration. Love LINDA
Salehi Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 11:02 AM
Very nice
Sankey- Lewis Avatar
January 27, 2016 at 6:51 PM
Congrats. wonderful images.
Selfa Avatar
January 27, 2016 at 8:21 AM
A great collaboration! Congratulations on your wonderful win!!! :) -HANS
A  Avatar
January 26, 2016 at 11:08 PM
Olive, congratulations on your collaboration with mystic rose. Luv Skat
Cwiak Avatar
January 26, 2016 at 8:48 PM
Great collaboration on this one, Olive. Another wonderful color of ink from your pen. Congrats on your win!
Haight Avatar
January 26, 2016 at 7:38 PM
A beautiful collaboration with Mystic Rose, Olive! Well done! Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra
Fraser Avatar
January 15, 2016 at 12:49 PM
Two wonderful poems by two lovely poetesses whose poems flow superbly. Love this ladies so much ~ hugs to you both ~ James ~~ xx
Thirtyseven Avatar
January 9, 2016 at 5:51 AM
Wonderful collaboration. I like those last few lines, they capture the soul of this piece well. "yes breathe", nice.
Gasun Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 7:22 PM
Such a great and very beautiful collaboration poem of two very talented poets! Excellent work my dear friends, Olive and M. Vie! Thanks for sharing! love lots and big hugs, Leonora
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January 8, 2016 at 7:14 PM
Olive, this is a most beautiful collaboration done by you and Vienna. Your words just seem to slip into place as if they were always there. I wish you all the best in the contest, but i can say, as a poem this is excellent. It has to be a seven my friend....Vladislav.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 2:21 AM
Vladislav, i thank you that you find my poem so fit to Sissy Vie's poem.. =`) im glad for your generous visit.. =`) ~O.E.
Callus Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 5:26 PM
Vienna's prompt has brought to light some very beautiful collaborations, and this is undoubtedly one of them, Olive_eloi! Love has the power to raise us to wondrous heights! ~ Have a lovely weekend...hugs ~ paul
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
January 15, 2016 at 6:37 AM
Thanks much Paul, I knew after I read Sissy Vie's poem what I wanted to write.. just I waited for sometime.. =`) thanks much for your encouraging comment.. =`) hugs!!!
Shahein Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 11:43 AM
This is a beautiful collaboration between 2 great poets , I just find it stunning and beautiful , hugs for u 2 // :) dalia
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
January 11, 2016 at 3:40 AM
Thank you so much Dahlia.. =`) I appreciate your generous comment.. =`)
Inman Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 8:38 AM
Beautiful write Olive, well written couplets and deep content.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
January 11, 2016 at 3:38 AM
Thanks much JAmes.. =`)
Sage Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 8:17 AM
excellent write Olive, fantastic
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
January 9, 2016 at 7:18 AM
thank you white Sage.. =`) glad you find this excellent.. =`)
Andresen Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 7:33 AM
- So beautifully to read, dear Olive & Vie Rose :) - Luck in contest ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
January 9, 2016 at 7:10 AM
Anne Lise, thanks much, weeeeeeeeeee I really just tried again thanks.. =`) hugs!!!
Nunez Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 6:46 AM
Sensational write here, Olive. Lilting, rhymes and catchy cadence...great word choices. Congrats on a successful collab with Vie. 7 and hugs!
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
January 9, 2016 at 3:55 AM
Kim to be honest it took me awhile to be confident in my poem as i thought somehow it doesnt fit Vie's poem but James said it does amd its okei so I did... I add a lil narration to the joyous content mood of Vie... thanks much.. i hope that mine came first before hers... =`) thanks
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