Breath Rises

warm breath exhaled, illusionary smoke in frigid night air. Written December 8th, 2013 First attempt at this form.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/9/2013 11:57:00 PM

hey for your first one, this is better than a lot I am seeing around here!!! I mean it!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2013 7:19:00 AM

Thanks for reading all four.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 12/9/2013 9:12:00 AM

This is lovely as well, but I think that I like the one about laughing through the tears the most, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2013 9:15:00 AM

Thanks Eileen, I think I do as well. I value your judgement so I am glad we chose the same one.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 12/9/2013 8:17:00 AM

a breathing soul in the dark beautifully drawn

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2013 9:16:00 AM

Thanks Liam, a very poetic response.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2013 9:13:00 AM

Thanks Becca, these are fun.

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 12/8/2013 6:37:00 PM

Awesome endeavor, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2013 9:12:00 AM

Thanks again AO

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/8/2013 4:33:00 AM

Very deep thought, Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/8/2013 8:12:00 AM

Thanks Dr.Ram.