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7/17/2010
For Mark Toney's  2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 24 Poetry Contest

A millstone around my neck and weight about my feet drag me down so deeply that I’m being pulled toward something. . . something from a darkened dream - nihility - the place to lose chagrin and then to taste absolutely nothing. Tropical delights do not swim here to brighten the dingy water of my plight. No rainbow fish dart to and fro where murky disillusionment oozes all around and through me. I go lower. . . . But above me, I can barely see a tinge of rose and of blue, a sparkling distant light as the void below crouches, tugging at my soul. Hope, through ocean’s skin, peeps down at me. Rays of reassurance come gleaming through the layers of my gloom’s descent, and be it from God. . . or from simple human will, Prospect calls to me. I feel wonder as gravity relinquishes its hold, and the restraints around my ankles now fall off! The millstone is released. Unencumbered, I ascend. Up, up, up I go - bursting to exhale and to take into my lungs a refreshment of sweet oxygen. A final surge of spirit . .. and I’m breaking the surface. The coral glow of breaking day rushes forth splendidly to greet me.

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Date: 1/23/2023 10:14:00 AM
Amazing images that take me on your journey down then back up to "break through the surface" in a feast of hope! Congratulations on your podium win Andrea. This is chock full of your creative talent. Blessings!
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Date: 1/22/2023 1:38:00 PM
Andrea, I find myself feasting on delicious pabulum of spirit as I read your inspirational poetry of hope! Congratulations on your win on Mile 24 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Two more miles to run before the Qualifier's Final Placement Contest!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/22/2023 4:45:00 PM
thanks so much. This is a real oldie of mine where I actually felt like a true free verse writer.
Date: 1/7/2023 11:47:00 PM
In my estimation, Hope is one of the supreme themes in poetry, and your allegory is some excellent free verse writing on the topic. There are spiritual overtones that I find satisfying (the release from bondage and the looking to God for deliverance) but without being overtly religious. The feeling of gloom and despair giving way to hope and final release, along with your wonderful imagery makes this a winner for me. Going in my faves, and wishing you success in the contest ~ John
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/8/2023 12:00:00 PM
thanks, john, I am so glad you liked my choice here!!
Date: 11/14/2014 1:34:00 PM
WOW!!!! This is superb poetry, this is as good as it gets. Fav.
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Date: 8/10/2014 5:26:00 PM
a little bit like this one too. I do love your free flow. Your new stuff to me, is better still. THIS IS NICE THO'
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Date: 6/5/2012 11:17:00 AM
A belated congratulations on your placement in Nikko's contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/4/2012 11:28:00 AM
Andrea Congrats on your win in Nikko's contest with this awesome write!!
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Date: 6/3/2012 1:18:00 PM
Don't know what to say Andrea...your words just amazes me!!! Awesome write & congrats on your win!
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Date: 6/3/2012 4:25:00 AM
seems you have a penchant for breaking free, andie.. how lovely!.. special congrats!!:) huggs!
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Date: 6/3/2012 2:19:00 AM
Andrea super congrats on your win..David
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Date: 6/2/2012 2:13:00 PM
congrats on your win Andrea
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Date: 6/2/2012 1:32:00 PM
Congratulations on your terrific write winning in the contest. layers of gloom is just how I feel right now.
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Date: 6/2/2012 11:44:00 AM
YOU HAVE SO MUCH POETIC SKILLS!!! I ADORE THIS WRITE...CONGRATS!!!
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Date: 6/2/2012 11:32:00 AM
Ok. I was totally zoning on this one. Ha! You really know how to capture the reader. I love it! Congrats again!
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Date: 6/2/2012 10:36:00 AM
"Through ocean's skin" excellent poems here, my friend. splendid- A++++. Congrats on a well deserved win.
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Date: 6/2/2012 10:13:00 AM
Hi there sweetie! Aha! this one was yours?!! Hahaha, I had No idea, lol! You sneaky sweetie you! I saw this in my entries and just had to Smile ^_^!! this is an old fave of mine-- I don't think I would Ever get tired reading of this timeless gem! Awesome free verse from you and it's Always a pleasure to read this beauty from you-- such a vivid write, I could feel that weight and then I go up, up, up! :D Thanks so much for entering this & Super congrats, sweetie pie!! :D
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Date: 2/25/2011 11:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Andrea,in Chris D. Aechtner's contest "For The Sake Of Free Verse". Love, Carol
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Date: 2/23/2011 10:38:00 AM
Absolutely wonderful, inspiring write, Andrea. I missed this earlier. Congratulations on your very fine 3rd Place win in the contest! Always, Annalise
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Date: 2/22/2011 11:45:00 AM
Nice to read this poem of you today Andrea.There is always hope-there is always a tomorrow--Congrats----kash
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Date: 2/22/2011 8:33:00 AM
Good to see you at the top Andrea. Congratulations on your inspiring Free verse and it honored third place. Agape, Moses
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Date: 2/21/2011 3:54:00 PM
Very well done and fascinationg poem. Congratulations Andrea.
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Date: 2/20/2011 6:06:00 PM
Hi Andrea, I Must say - for someone who professes not to understand Free Verse, you write it brilliantly. Many congrat's on your well deserved THIRD PLACE WIN. Lainie
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Date: 2/20/2011 4:25:00 PM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest of Chris, Andrea
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Date: 2/20/2011 9:22:00 AM
you make me delirious , andrea.. CONGRATS to you for the superb win! ;) huggs, nette
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Date: 2/20/2011 9:15:00 AM
Hey there Andrea, congratulations on your win in Chris's contest, really enjoyed this one tonight.. Love Wilma
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