Box

NEAT AND TIDY

Really quite neat and tidy
Tight – all square, save for the small hole
    chin-reachable    near the top

Sometimes I wonder what passers-by would think
    could they see its form?

But as to the hole –
A certain amount of inner dust will gather I suppose
     over a length of time
Congestion might cause concern

But for the time being I am safe    and
Really quite neat and tidy
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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December 22, 2010 at 10:37 AM
what a very thought provoking approach you did here, Dave! Awesome poem that goes well beyond the box-- really liked this one too :) keep on writing and sharing with us your wonderful thoughts and poetry-- hugs nikko :)
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November 8, 2010 at 4:09 PM
Thanks so much Daver, guiding me to your contemplative poem! Quite a provocative piece,we could each interpret in our own way...however, it feels to me that..that we often conform our true selves to a little box, so neat and tidy for the outside world, keeping them comfortable with what they see, perhaps it would disturb them if they could see what is really going on inside our congestion..our complexities.hmm,would cause them concern perhaps, make them uncomfortable? am I close?I like this one!
A   Avatar
October 16, 2010 at 6:16 PM
lol i can picture someone breathing and the dust collecting going back and fourth he he, enjoyed this one, ..P.D.
Kendrick Avatar
October 15, 2010 at 2:43 PM
Wonder where that hole is in what wall? Got my attention for sure..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara
A  Avatar
October 14, 2010 at 6:17 PM
Hi, Daver smiles to you free verse~ENJOYED YOUR POEM~ Here I find myself all over the soup again. Stopping by to read many poems, before my crazy KIDS make me log out. I had a really nice time reading and catching up with you poets. Have a wonderful night*luv~SKAT"
Dietrich Avatar
October 13, 2010 at 9:13 PM
hmmm, someone down here guessed mouth, but also it could be throat?? Let me know, will ya? Inquiring minds want to know. I am too lame to figure these interesting types of poems out! Luv, Andrea
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October 13, 2010 at 2:05 PM
Neat and tidy....poem you have here...enjoyed reading.
Brown Avatar
October 12, 2010 at 12:34 PM
I enjoyed reading your poetry today Daver. May you have a wonderful day full of inspiration. Love, Carol
Mehta Avatar
October 12, 2010 at 9:13 AM
Very expressive thoughts on neat and Tidy, daver
Devonshire Avatar
October 12, 2010 at 7:40 AM
LOL Are you talking about your mouth, Daver? Mine is always congested with words. But there's no way you're square so I'm still wondering... Love, Carolyn
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