Box

NEAT AND TIDY Really quite neat and tidy Tight – all square, save for the small hole chin-reachable near the top Sometimes I wonder what passers-by would think could they see its form? But as to the hole – A certain amount of inner dust will gather I suppose over a length of time Congestion might cause concern But for the time being I am safe and Really quite neat and tidy

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Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 12/22/2010 10:37:00 AM

what a very thought provoking approach you did here, Dave! Awesome poem that goes well beyond the box-- really liked this one too :) keep on writing and sharing with us your wonderful thoughts and poetry-- hugs nikko :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 11/8/2010 4:09:00 PM

Thanks so much Daver, guiding me to your contemplative poem! Quite a provocative piece,we could each interpret in our own way...however, it feels to me that..that we often conform our true selves to a little box, so neat and tidy for the outside world, keeping them comfortable with what they see, perhaps it would disturb them if they could see what is really going on inside our congestion..our complexities.hmm,would cause them concern perhaps, make them uncomfortable? am I close?I like this one!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/16/2010 6:16:00 PM

lol i can picture someone breathing and the dust collecting going back and fourth he he, enjoyed this one, ..P.D.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/15/2010 2:43:00 PM

Wonder where that hole is in what wall? Got my attention for sure..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara

Skat A

Date: 10/14/2010 6:17:00 PM

Hi, Daver smiles to you free verse~ENJOYED YOUR POEM~ Here I find myself all over the soup again. Stopping by to read many poems, before my crazy KIDS make me log out. I had a really nice time reading and catching up with you poets. Have a wonderful night*luv~SKAT"

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/13/2010 9:13:00 PM

hmmm, someone down here guessed mouth, but also it could be throat?? Let me know, will ya? Inquiring minds want to know. I am too lame to figure these interesting types of poems out! Luv, Andrea

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/13/2010 2:05:00 PM

Neat and tidy....poem you have here...enjoyed reading.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/12/2010 12:34:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your poetry today Daver. May you have a wonderful day full of inspiration. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/12/2010 9:13:00 AM

Very expressive thoughts on neat and Tidy, daver

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/12/2010 7:40:00 AM

LOL Are you talking about your mouth, Daver? Mine is always congested with words. But there's no way you're square so I'm still wondering... Love, Carolyn