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Date written: 06/26/2020

One-liner of doom... "I'm leaving you" Mercy! The poor fellow must've died a thousand deaths right then... "Whack! Whack! Whack!" goes an ax straight through his confused heart. Ouch! A devastating impact. Numb to the bone as he stands, directly facing her, in arrested astonishment; listening... as she narrates the end of everything. Too numb to utter so much as a word. He stands there as if frozen in time, growing... increasingly deaf with disbelief; too stunned to plead... "Baby, please, don't do this!" Or cry out an anguished "Now, wait a minute!" On her breath, the fetid stench of death; d e a t h of gargantuan dreams dreamt together. Their panorama of bright tomorrows suddenly look blacker than charcoal. He listens as she's speaking but doesn't comprehend the words forking into him like flashes of lightning. Hopelessly lost in "How did it come to this?" A sucker-punch that landed with blinding speed; he couldn't see it! Unbearable pain writes itself across his crimson face His defeated spirit, a bark of a tree withstanding b l o w s from an ax.

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Date: 7/7/2020 1:26:00 PM
Such a deep muse on the pain of heartbreak Edward! Metaphors of separation, angst and betrayal. Especially loved the vanilla-scented tomorrows and death of mammoth-sized dreams. This is amazing poetry. Glad it got a top win my friend. Keep writing and inspiring :)
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/7/2020 3:23:00 PM
Your glowing feedback and encouragement brought a smile to my face this evening, Aditi:-) Thank you so much, my dear friend! Most appreciated.
Date: 7/7/2020 1:03:00 PM
You have expressed this devastating heartbreak so well, Edward, with amazing metaphors. Congrats on the win! Blessings, Rhonda xx
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/7/2020 3:25:00 PM
Thank you very much, Rhonda:-) I treasure your kind comments and support!
Date: 7/6/2020 7:54:00 PM
Edward, a great poetic sucker punch. I hope this was not autobiographical, but your words have such an authenticity to them. Glad to see you take a "W" with this one. Congrats ~ John
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John Watt
Date: 7/6/2020 11:14:00 PM
Glad to hear that, Edward.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/6/2020 9:02:00 PM
I appreciate the lovely feedback and congrats, John:-) No, this poem isn't autobiographical.
Date: 7/6/2020 3:09:00 PM
Powerful, visceral words, Edward. You have put us right into the experience and the emotions. Congratulations on your top placement! Blessings my friend.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/6/2020 5:19:00 PM
Thank you so much for the wonderful comments and visit, Sam:-) Most obliged.
Date: 7/6/2020 1:31:00 PM
This is a great write Edward, still is a head scratcher this got an N/A...well now a deserved win!
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/6/2020 2:15:00 PM
Thank you so much for placing it, John:-) Most obliged.
Date: 6/29/2020 4:35:00 PM
This is a tour de force write Edward, one of your best, I gotta fave this one. Hey did you know Greg's gone, he left a goodbye blog, I'm sure he would appreciate a comment!
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 6/29/2020 5:29:00 PM
Many thanks for the FAV, John:) I appreciate it. I've already commented on Greg's "Thank you, Soupers" blog, and I'm really relieved he's not leaving for good!
Date: 6/26/2020 10:03:00 PM
powerful words convey the message wonderfully... great write! hugs
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 6/27/2020 12:15:00 AM
Thank you very much, Sandra:-)

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