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Blinded By the Light

I stood upon  a brine soaked bow
Aboard a  schooner  lost  at sea
Where balls of hail tore through the sails
And broke the masts of three
When karma came to pay me back
For all my dirty deeds
When I laid upon a swan-like girl
Of grace and purity

I stole  her mind..her heart and soul
Her pride and dignity
When I wrapped her in a web of lies
Proclaiming love eternally
As I sealed her fate and destiny 
With my host of  wayward seeds
That would one day bear a bastard child
Bathed in humility  

For...when her eyes were closed in sleep
 I tiptoed out the door
A blaggard with a heart of stone
 I left  her lying there alone
To face the morning after
With  echo's of my laughter
Resounding through the rafters
As she gazed upon my footprints 
On the floor  

Many more...I scored before
Upon those many shores
Virgins by the dozens
And the broken town-hall whores
But, nary a thought 
Crossed through my mind
That one day I would find
The wrath of God upon my brow
When lightning...stuck me blind

 

 Written:  March 28th, 2018
Author:  Elaine Cecelia George

Copyright © Elaine George | Year Posted 2018

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Al Juman Date: 8/16/2018 2:56:00 AM Elaine this is a masterpiece Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 8/18/2018 7:09:00 AM Thank you so much for your kind comments, Al...much appreciated. Elaine

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/4/2018 6:46:00 PM What will your novel be called? I wish I could even START mine! Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/7/2018 3:02:00 AM Hi, Andrea. Thanks for stopping by. The novel I am currently writing is entitled, 'Out of the Darkness.' Thanks for asking.

Eve Roper Date: 4/3/2018 9:55:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Elaine, excellent alliteration. Hugs Eve ~`* Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/7/2018 3:02:00 AM Thanks for your comments, Eve. Elaine

Line Gauthier Date: 4/3/2018 3:09:00 PM Beautiful and powerful poem. I love the rhythm and imagery, Elaine. Congrats on a most deserving win. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/7/2018 3:03:00 AM Thank you, Line...for your kind comments...much appreciated. Elaine

Abdul Malik Date: 4/3/2018 10:21:00 AM A heart-rending and well-written story. Congrats. Enjoyed reading it. Login to Reply

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 4/3/2018 3:35:00 AM This is very well written. Congratulations on your win. Just one comment on the title: I guess that you mean 'blinded and not binded? Many wishes, Kai Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/3/2018 6:46:00 AM Thank you so much, Kai, for your comments and for seeing what no one else saw...including me. I have corrected.

Judith S Date: 4/2/2018 7:35:00 PM This is like reading poetry of the great masters of yesteryear. So well written ... I bow to your talents. Congratulations on your win Elaine!! ~Judy Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 4/2/2018 5:56:00 PM Wow! Very powerful poem, Lainie. Sometimes we fail to see the harm we cause others. Excellent reversal in the last line! Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/3/2018 6:47:00 AM Hi, Carolyn, So nice to see you are still here at the soup. Thanks for your kind comments.

Kim Rodrigues Date: 4/2/2018 8:30:00 AM Excellent, Elaine! Loved it! Congrats! Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/3/2018 6:47:00 AM Thanks Kim.

Probir Gupta Date: 4/1/2018 9:04:00 PM A profound poem with lively imagery, Elaine ... Congratulations on your nice win ... Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/3/2018 6:48:00 AM Thank you for your kind comments, Probir.

Susan Ashley Date: 4/1/2018 6:47:00 PM Such an enthralling poem, Elaine. Told with vibrant imagery and emotions that ride the wonderful rhythm of your poetic lines. Congratulations on your excellent win! Warmest wishes.. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/3/2018 6:48:00 AM Thank you for your kind comments, Susan.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/1/2018 4:44:00 PM wow, what a guy!! What made you think to write in the character of this "blaggard"? I miss your writing and it's so good to see you at it again, Elaine. I see you are on the winners list. BIG congrats to you. And thanks for seeing my ppem the other day. Happy Easter. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/1/2018 8:28:00 PM Regarding the blaggard...I am a story teller at heart and being from the Atlantic Provinces of Canada I have heard many tales of the seamen who captained the Tall Ships...a time long since gone down in history. Elaine George Date: 4/1/2018 6:21:00 PM Thank you, Andrea...its good to be back if only for a short time...I am still busy working on my novel, but sometimes need a break.

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/1/2018 3:23:00 PM - The winners are named and it was great to see your poem on the winning list - Congratulations, Elaine :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/1/2018 6:22:00 PM Thank you so much for stopping by and for your comments. Much appreciated!

Silent One Date: 4/1/2018 2:53:00 PM A really deep reflective poem Elaine, I just felt it could have used a bit more alliteration for the contest.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest... Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/1/2018 6:20:00 PM Thank you for the inspiration. I am working on a knew one about the Blue Nose Schooner (also known as: The Atlantic Queen) This schooner is a Canadian Icon and on the back of the Canadian dime. I will post it when completed...it will also fall into the genre of personification.

Charlie Smith Date: 4/1/2018 10:41:00 AM Terrific tale Elaine, well written with such a need to be told... Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/1/2018 6:23:00 PM Thank you, Charlie...much appreciated.

Mark Peterson Date: 3/31/2018 6:54:00 PM What a hideous transmogrification the sexual act has become. How sacred and pure it ought to be and our focus centered only on the one we have chosen instead of a wandering mind thinking only of pleasures that await. I have just written a poem called Treasure that considers this topic about which you have written so eloquently. Excellent work. Login to Reply Elaine George Date: 4/1/2018 6:24:00 PM Thank you for your comments, Mark. I will read your poem, 'Treasure'.