Deborah Simpson Poet Free verse

Blankness

I fared under the caricature
Of desolate bane this eve –
Walking with shiver in pocket
Toward the glassiness of now –

As I reached the tip of today
Drenched I was, in disgust –
Saturated with concocted sweat
I gripped tirelessly, the shiver –

Poured the shock of yesterday
Through forgotten cloud –
As I quivered under the dry
Of pouring dry rains –

My eyes swelled silently shut
From the lack of tears this eve –
My shiver, it completely melted
From the glassiness of now –

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Carol Sunshine Brown April 6, 2011 at 11:01 AM It has been a pleasure to read your excellent poetry today Deborah. I hope to get back soon to read more though you took most of them away. May you always find inspiration to carry on with your writing endeavors. Love, Carol

John E Wordslinger January 7, 2010 at 5:41 PM This is very very beautiful, ty WS

Syed Amaan Ahmad May 29, 2009 at 2:09 PM Congrats!

Carol Sunshine Brown May 26, 2009 at 3:32 AM Congratulations on your two poems being featured this week Deb. Love, Carol

Vince Suzadail Jr. May 25, 2009 at 2:12 PM Double feature this week? congrats again. God Bless. Vince

Ernilando Tugaff May 25, 2009 at 2:09 AM Very beautiful piece. I enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on your featured poem. Ernilando

May 24, 2009 at 4:33 PM Wonderful use of imagery to convey your thoughts in a creative way. Just wanted to drop by and add congratulations on having your poem featured to my other comment. Keep on writing! Karen

Akash Dwivedi May 18, 2009 at 1:03 AM Excellent work Deborah.. congrats..!

Stefania Carmen Misaila May 7, 2009 at 10:14 AM congrats, deborah!

Lena Pate May 5, 2009 at 12:50 PM Errie, desolate and powerful. Imagery superb. Well worth the win you received for this excellent piece. Great job.

Nadia Shahwan April 18, 2009 at 7:24 AM Unique and beautiful.

Anna-Marie Docherty March 31, 2009 at 3:00 AM Cleverly written,a deserved winner, well done!!

Chandru Ganesh S March 30, 2009 at 10:46 PM Hearty congrats dear

Debbie Guzzi February 2, 2009 at 2:12 PM So very much to ponder, so much pain, and I think I hear acceptance?"Walking with shiver in pocket, Toward the glassiness of now" wonderful fresh seeing. Light & Love Debbie

Chamonique Knowles January 17, 2009 at 10:27 PM wooooooooow that was good. congrats!

Elaine George January 13, 2009 at 8:24 AM Congratulations Deborah, on your first place win. You have masterfully conveyed with words, emotional pain of such intensity, it numbs the soul and freezes the tears inside leaving the soul unable to cry it out. WELL DONE! Lainie

Tyesha Ehigiator January 12, 2009 at 12:42 PM Congratulations on your win, Nice poem...Tyesha

Michelle Mac Donald January 11, 2009 at 5:32 AM Congratulations Deborah, on your well-deserved win! An emotive piece that reaches out with its descriptive imagery. Hoping you'll have a wonderful 2009, with many smiles. This is a good start!:) Blessing to you and yours..Mikki

Matthew Anish January 10, 2009 at 12:24 PM Congratulations on your win! I made the semi finals with Urban Lover. If you want to send me a comment or two.

Petra Mallett January 9, 2009 at 6:41 PM Congratulations for your win. Great poem!

Orma Sullivan January 9, 2009 at 4:26 PM CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win. Have a wonderful new year. All best, Orma

Karena Brown January 8, 2009 at 7:22 AM Congratulations Deborah on your win. It was well deserved. A beautiful piece!!! I loved the use of language and how intense the poem was...at least I thought it was. All the best for 2009. Keep doing what you're doing!! :-)

January 7, 2009 at 4:24 PM Congratulations on your first place finish! That is quite an accomplishment. Nice use of imagery. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen

Heidie Buys January 7, 2009 at 1:23 PM Warmest congratulations on winning the the contest. Have a wonderful new year. Regards Heidie

Bob Shank January 7, 2009 at 8:36 AM congrats on the win, a well deserved win, just a suggestion, the (I's), a reader can grasp that it's first person after the initial one, anything further becomes what is known as a filler and actually prohibits the writer of obtaining that clarity to put them over the top of others...Yes many will say "the greats" used it (I) throughout, emphatically, but many in the literary field are realizing the great weren't all that great......awesome poem either way

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